Braeburn is a normally prosperous and well-to-do stallion. But, like most farmers at the end of the Appleoosa harvest season, he faces two long months of boredom waiting for the winter rains to come through before next planting season. Normally, that time is spent at the local Salt Lick Saloon taking his time and having a salt lick, but Braeburn soon realizes he faces an endless cycle of monotony.
That is, until a rugged stallion by the name of Dr. Caballeron comes into Appleoosa looking for the final member of a party to venture out into the deserts outside of Dodge Junction. Calling himself an archaeologist, Dr. Caballeron appears to be searching for something in the middle of Red River Canyon, a place where a strange magical force is said to dwell according to native legends. Despite the unusual nature of the request and the somewhat unsavory look of the Doctor, Braeburn accepts the lure of anything to stave off the boredom.
Unfortunately, if the legends are true, Braeburn may be getting in a little over his head. And that's not including who he's going on the trip with.
- - - - - - -
A little lighter Braeburn fare compared to my other work involving him. Because Braeburn is best pony. Sex tag for references to prostitution and other things, but nothing's shown.
Well looks like you've gotten back into the rhythm of writing.
3928944
Very small, at most 1200 words a day. But it's something.
3928955 be proud that you're getting stuff done. I can't since my jackass older brother is leeching off my computer until we get him a new one for his birthday in June.
So, I like this a lot. I had a vaguely similar idea, because Dr. Caballeron causing trouble with regard to artifacts in the pony west just seems natural. I think some descriptions could have used editing for a bit of repetition or unnecessary details or even a bit of rephrasing scattered through-out. Some of the dialog could have been edited similarly, mostly during the train ride I think, but overall you had me hooked.
I like the look of this team, the subtle way you tried to build up Dr. Caballeron, and the hints of bad things to come. Braeburn as the moral compass is a very interesting bit of logic and I like the idea that he's really smarter than most might assume. Not certain how I feel about the romantic angle, but Braeburn/Roseluck is cute. I like the idea of her as a botanist too. It feels a tad bit forced (as does Dodge Junction being similar to a Las Vegas style town) but I'm willing to see it through. You are going slow with building up the romance, which I like.
Eager to read more!
I...am intrigued.....
do continue good sir