• Member Since 10th Apr, 2012
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Tri-PonyTrouble


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"Oh, look. This world has readers. Haven’t seen that for awhile. Well then. Guess I should name myself before reality makes me forget about you guys, hmm? I’m Andrew. Andrew Black. Pretty much a normal guy, I play games, watch TV, read books. And I was unlucky enough to stumble into a nice little building in the woods where some very smart people forgot to lock the door to their secret hidey hole. You know, mad scientist type people. The ones who are truly brilliant people that forget the smallest things like locks on doors. Those people."

Welcome to the story of Andrew Black. A young man who made a very stupid decision. He found a way to jump between 'dimentions' and was stupid enough not to read the whole manual. Join Andrew as he travels into the world of Equestria, finds a place to stay, makes friends, and takes a break from trying to get home.

But what happens when he finds out that he can't ever leave?

Chapters (1)
Comments ( 6 )

Alright, I see some downvotes. Not really a big issue, but I would like to know why if at all possible. I would like to know what I can do better, besides that, what's the purpose of criticism? Right? :fluttercry:

3959947
Well, when I had the idea, it was origionaly going to be a one-shot story starting at the end where he died. Still cliche, but I figured if a few people stayed around for a bit, then I could still use that ending. As I can see, that Idea didn't work out too well.

3971533 sounds like cliche starring with

Andrew Black. Pretty much a normal guy, I play games, watch TV, read books. And I was unlucky enough to stumble into

and heavy suspicion of selfinsert. also some people here despise HiE. not me, 99% of what I read is HiE.

3913761

Could also be humanized hatred.

3975972
True, it is quite cliche. If you don't like that though, I reccomend you leave now, I'm going to include a bit more... cliche-ness? No idea how to say that.

3976123
Also possible. I also noticed that when I was writing the second chapter(yet to be released because I'm stuck with writers block AND I have a research paper to work on), Dash was very OOC. I'm going to see if I can't work on that a little more, because I know I'll get a lot of hate for that.

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