Rainbow dash has loved a certain timid pony for a long time will she ever be able to confess her feelings?
Read to find out :3
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Dexiom, you're a good artist, but this needs work
Short, but a great story
D'awwwwwwwwwwwwww
Nawww.
for starters, go over the Summary, you could make it better, right?
I enjoyed the story, as short as it is.
Though I wondered what's your primrary language for a while, then it came to me, you did not have as much as a pre-reader to check for errors?
The story would gain much, if you just had it checked for spelling and grammar errors, then considering pronomina choices, since they're kind of out of the room?
maybe not the best way to put it, but just go over the story?
3767798 I actually had someone rewrite it my version was much much worse.
3767900 by Celestia, then I'm happy I missed out on the Horendous Torture.
The most outstanding now, is the 'Cyan Pegasus' problem.
Early on, there is a 'She' too much, should be easily fizxed?
Short but sweet story. ITS SO CUTE!
Hi um I l loved the story it's one o of my favorite ships! But uh please re check for spelling errors. There's still quite a few.