Night Star's Story

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Once upon a time, in land far far away, there lived a Princess. Her name was Twilight Sparkle. Once, a little pony appeared on her doorstep. This pony was a pony who was destined to become great. This is her story. This is my story. I am that little pony. I am Night Star.

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Night Star's Story: Chapter 1 · 4th Feb 2014 · 2,330 words
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Night Star's Story: Chapter 2 · 4th Feb 2014 · 657 words
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TwilightTheAlicorn #1 · Feb 5th, 2014 · · · Night Star's Story: Chapter 2 ·

3901241 Two things. Or more, I'm not sure. Three. Or so. Anyway, this is not my first story. Two, I tried as hard as I possibly could to add some dialogue tags in, but I couldn't without making it sound choppier than it already was, and Star isn't young enough to talk like that. Three, they're little fillies. It's narrated in first person... pony, and even if Star is the student of the nerdiest (good thing) pony around, she's still learning how to talk without sounding choppy. I did that on purpose. I realize that I haven't exactly made things totally clear yet, and I will, I promise.
Another thing, and this is just a nitpick, but... I'm going to go rant for a bit. Don't take it personally. Man, you don't even have to read it if you don't want to.

It's Thunder Dust, not Thunder Dart. She's a little filly who hasn't found her cutie mark yet, and so she doesn't know what she wants to be. Her parents live in Ponyville, and they are semi-abusive. Not so much for her to be bruised and beaten half to death, but enough to where she's scared to say anything, and thinks she's worthless.
So. Yeah. I get worked up when I get criticism. Don't take it personally, or else I would feel absolutely terrible.
I'm a bit like Fluttershy in that I can't take much criticism.
And I'm really sensitive, especially towards other people's feelings.

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