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After becoming a Princess, a new door was opened for Twilight Sparkle. More books to read and new spells to learn. Immediately going into deep study mode she found a spell to make one younger excited she quickly tried to use the spell but it ended up backfiring on her turning her into a foal.

Now with no way of turning back Twilight will have to be the widdlest Pwincess of Equestria until a solution can be found.

Featured: August 31, 2014 Thank you everyone.

Warning: Contains cuteness, Diapers and a little humor.

Chapters (13)
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Comments ( 429 )

May the massive amounts of diabeetus commence.

well.. its a start super.... though...... its interesting, quite rushed emotions, and seems fast

Do you need me to proof this chapter and any of the future ones? I really like the overall idea, but this needs some grammatical tweaks. Quite a few.

Before I start reading, I would like to know if this story is going to be in the same universe as your other 'foal' stories?

good story, just some grammer prombles and some other things :twilightsmile:

3900821 it does not seem to be in the foal-a-verse

3900788 that's what firebird is here for ;)

This is gonna be so cute, and if a cure is found this is gonna be a source of embarassment for Twilight. :rainbowlaugh:

Yay! Filly Princess Twilight! This story looks promising, and I can hardly wait to see where this goes next.

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No this is just something that was on my mind and it wouldn't go away unless I did it.

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Unless you have a plan Celestia's are only bet at getting you back to normal.

I noticed this in a couple places. It's supposed to be our.

3900970 there were quite a lot of these, but it does happen to the best of us :) minor errors that the story can be read with... but easily fixed.

This story is beyond hilarious! :rainbowlaugh: I love the scenes with Celestia and Luna talking about Twilight. That was brilliant setup.

Still, it was really quite hard to read. The grammatical errors and spelling errors are all over the place. It makes it difficult to understand, and it would be a lot funnier if you put the commas in the right place and spelled correctly. You really need a proofreader. Punctuation is a huge part of writing, and this story doesn't really have enough of it.

Other than that, keep up the good work! :twilightsmile:

A couple of grammar mistakes but nothing major, all in all I'm looking forward to seeing where you go with this.

3900863 Did he take a vacation or something, because this needs work.

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It does happen to the best of us, but the best of us have been corrected many, many times before, too.

3901099 love the LOST avatar btw.

But yeah apparently his computer went to sh*t (i dont know how many kids will read this)

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To be honest I think I may have to get another proofreader until Firebird comes back witch wont be till maybe next month he said. So till he comes back Perspective be on stand by.

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Dont look to close or you could get a heart atta- HHHHHGGGG!

Drops dead.

3901384 No! Super Stallion! Don't die on me! Don't die on me! Wake up! Wake up! (I start to perform CPR.)

So much Adwabuuuuuuuu, I'm going to blow up twice!!! Can't wait till Shining Armor or the Elements of Harmony find out.

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SS: Starts to open eyes and looks up to see you trying to gives CPR then struggles back to feet) Ahh nope I'm up now I'm good.

Night Mist: Thank god I thought you where dead.

SS: It be better to be kissed by another guy.

NM: What?

SS: Nothing.

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NM: Don't scare me like that man. if a kiss was all you needed, I could of called Sunset Shimmer or Trixie, though I think they might fight over who gets to kiss you.:pinkiecrazy:

SS: Ain't that the truth.:rainbowlaugh:

So, when is the next FA chapter?

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No problem. I'd also be willing to proof "Foal Adventures" too, as I see that some of those chapters need a little evening out.
Also, it's spelled "P-e-r-c-e-p-t-i-v-e." Like "I perceived many grammatical errors." (No offense, I just needed an example sentence. (I'm an ass like that. (sorry)))

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Thanks for the LOST compliment. Plus, a LOT of kids will be reading this (or so I predict).

It's a good start.
3901099 3901259 Sorry about that, my luck as schizophrenic as an analogy that goes everywhere but to the point.

3901186 Kids shouldn't be on this site, according the Restricted To Adults logo down below the page anyway.

3901507 Give me a second to piece that statement together...
So... your luck is schizophrenic, or your luck is as schizophrenic as etc....?
After that I get it, but that's... slightly incomprehensible. (I'm not saying this to be mean! It's just that I can't fully realize what you're trying to say because you're missing a word or accidentally mistyped a letter.)

3901473 he says about a month

3901507 problem is that isn't stopping anyone really...

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Aww, no more chapters for a while? I want more.

3901593 you're not the only one... But sky hooves and I are writing the next couple unofficial chapters .. I'm writing em apparently. But I need ideas.... Ideas and motivation..... Roll pinkie!

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I'll see what I can think up, but give me some time.

good chapter :pinkiehappy:

Reading this chapter. Looking forward to more diabeetus.
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What will her friends and family have to say about to this?

Cool but is this in a different universe than foal adventures?:rainbowhuh:

I'm enjoying this so far. Keep it up.

So many spelling errors, it's almost painful to read. You could really use a proofreader.

Riz

I hope Spike will be the goffy big bro to Twily :twilightsmile:

Comment posted by Night--Mist deleted Feb 6th, 2014

looking around the room she saw a potted flower on the window sill

Twilight fired a bolt of magic right at the flower, but for some strange reason the magic bounced of the flower and right back towards Twilight.

Hmmm, maybe this is a special breed of poison joke, and that's why it fired the magic back at her, or maybe Discord enchanted the plant to throw the spell back at her. That, or it only works on animals, or maybe just ponies.

oh dear god THE CUTENESS, ITS SO CUTE
I was worried for a second thank the amount of awkward would be too much in this first chapter
*potty joke at end of chapter making it so unbearably awkward I had to :rainbowlaugh: *

Comment posted by _______________ deleted Feb 6th, 2014

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Just got one and he should have the edit done soon.

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Great, couse I liked the story so far :twilightsmile:, but the errors were getting kinda annoying

Very nice! You had me hooked within the first few paragraphs! That is not an easy thing to do. I expect great things of this story.

Very cute and with a nice level to the humor, not too boring but not TOO exagerated either :pinkiesmile:
A nice easy-to-read comedy.

Characters are believable, reactions are what you would expect from them, and the setting makes good sense.

All in all, it's a good start and I am looking forward to new chapters of this, I want to see what happens next :yay:

Oh god! Get the insulin! I gotted diabeetus!

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