It has been nearly ten months since Discord's defeat and peace has returned to Equestria. Until that is proof of Discord's long lost legacy surfaces and now Twilight and her friends must prepare themselves for what could be the return of their most powerful nemesis. But this time he is not alone. Along the way Twilight and friends will have to deal with monsters, poison and a blue pegasus with a crush on Pinkie Pie.
Hey there Ink Blotch! I wish I had more time to read the whole thing of this, but I like what I've seen so far!
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Keep on writing!
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applejack has a CRUSH
mhmm
353686 Yeah I dont know what to do with passion fruit. At first he was just a part of a dream sequence but I think I might put him in Part 2 of the trilogy.
"Applejack lead closely to Twilight with wings upright and conviction on her face, her wings shining in the sunlight."
I'm assuming you meant Fluttershy?
359700 You did read the previous chapter right? Applejack has wings from the flight spell.
359920 My apologies, I completely forgot about that.
361166 Its ok
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WHahahahahahah! I have found you! Now That I care to find you I have found you!
388685 Hi Stev- I mean Zane. Good to see you here
That part about the figures acting out their counterparts woulda been the perfect time for an Applejack/big mac incest joke
nooooo they cant die
Expect part 9 in a week or two. After that there is an epilouge/sneak peak at part two. Then I am taking a break for awhile
You might want to look into an editor. You have grammatical errors and spelling mistakes abound. For example, the possessive apostrophe. When you want to indicate something Twilight owns, it's "Twilight's". Editor notes mid-story is another sign of sloppy writing. There's quite a few things that really need to be fixed, and you might want to take time to fix this up after you finish Part 1, especially since the story itself is quite interesting.
Oh yeah, and Rainbow Dash's hair was already like that before her first Rainboom.
wow Celestia is really kicking up the trolling seriously pony executions thats some hardcore shit you got going on
Bliss removed his hooves and with crossed eyes answered. “Kni Chtolb si eht tsom emosdnah ynorb.”
LOL. icwutudidthar
He has the coloring of a moarch butterfly, so obviously we should call him -
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THE MONARCH!
That was a good story. I especially like the way you made the story follow everything that happened in the show, but filled in all the gaps with your own elements. I'm interested to see where you take this in the next part.
I shall read more..much more MWA HA HA