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One day, as the Mane 6 and Spike are having a nice day out, a strange cloud appears to them from beyond the horizon. This cloud starts to cause immense chaos with its magical lightning bolts, with the chaos looking similar to the kind Discord had created before. After defeating the cloud, Twilight starts to act strangely, and the next day, Twilight's body parts start to change into different animal parts! Not knowing what to do, Twilight and her friends race to talk with Princess Celestia about this, with Twilight changing more and more with the more chaos she causes...

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Comments ( 188 )

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I think underlines are better for words that need to be emphasized.

But thanks, anyway! :pinkiehappy:

(I'm not sure. :pinkiegasp:)

Must know where this is going! Tracked!

Love it so far! I'm gonna be tracking this! :pinkiehappy:

I really don't think you need to use underscores for emphasis. It'd read just fine without them.

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I just want people to read it the way I imagine it.

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Why is using italics better than using underlines?

I've sen other people underline emphasized words.

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It says there they're used for emphasis as well as italics.

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But then people will think I'm emphasizing the other parts I use italics for.

I'm 10 chapters into this story when I realize that the plot synopsis for it has revealed more than the story itself. I feel like the first chapter should have covered everything the synopsis started talking about.

Also, I think you need to work on your writing technique a bit more. While it conveys what is occuring, it fails to do so in a clear flowing manner. Some more, clever use of descriptive words to define movement and interactions would be helpful. This kind of writing ability is gathered from experience and I'm sure you'll grasp it more as you write.

Just wanted to share my two cents. I don't mean to offend.

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Hmm, I probably shouldn't have made the synopsis so big.

Twilight was also getting pushed back by the explosion, but out of everyone, she was doing the best at keeping herself upright as she skidded backwards across the ground. She then used her magic and projected a magical barrier all around her, blocking the force of the explosion and preventing herself from getting blown any farther back.

Twilight just shot all of her magic into the cloud to destroy it, which means that she had no magic to make the barrier with. Logically, after shooting the giant magic laser at the chaos cloud, she should have passed out due to magical exhaustion.

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I don't want to give anything away about how she could do that.

What part will change now?

Oh the suspense.

this format hurts my eyes
its to bunched together
and the story moves way to fast
(even by my standerds)

Comment posted by adamdwarf deleted Jun 21st, 2013

Yeah. Because clearly it is better for her to stay in Canterlot where there are lots of more ponies to be endangered

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Well, it's worth the risk of the princess can help to cure her.

Crazy stuff + Magic = Chaos Magic
Chaos = Discord
Chaos + Twilight = Draconequus Twilight / Evil Chaos Twilight
Draconequus Twilight + Discord = This just got...
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This story is sexy.

I haven't even read the damn thing yet.

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Oh, you'll get way more than a thanks for this one.

<Insert perverted joke that kids won't understand here>

YES! YES! MUAHAHAHAHAHA! EVIL! CHAOTIC! EVIL! DESTRUCTION! FIRE! LIGHTNING! CHAOS! HAHAHAHHAHA!

you know what might help? the elements of... of.... um... oh blast it. the six magical megguffins.

Wow the chaos this fic must contain is spilling out, you have 8 character tags!

I could swear on the bucket of delicious chicken I have that there was a rule limiting it to 6... Maybe I'm just going senial.

Anyways, I remember reading another fic with a premise similar near exact to this. Let's see if ye did better than... thee? I wasn't the one that wrote it, but... it rhymes...

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