Only when we have the courage to traverse the dark we may truly appreciate the light, no matter how weak it shines.
Before Luna turned into Nightmare Moon, she had proposed to her sister to create a kingdom of her own. Fearing that this would lead to a conflict with her sister and her realm, she forbid her to do that. But Luna ignored her sister, and sent a few ponies to the north, to a secure location Luna found before.
A thousand years later, Luna hasn't forgotten that there once was a settlement she created, and this settlement has some things to tell her.
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This story shows promise, but it would help you greatly to get an editor/proofreader to help flesh out your ideas and correct any mistakes. Also, cover art is probably something you should look into as well.
This is a good read, but there are quite a few grammar errors. If you want, I could edit for you.
This is a very interesting concept, and you seem to have a knack for world-building. I hope you keep working on this.
That said, you badly need an editor. You have lots of misspellings and mistakes with your grammar and punctuation, and your prose is pretty flat and lifeless. Check out the groups, you'll find some that are dedicated to editing and pre-reading.
..Please tell me there is gonna be a sequel...
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Indeed I intend to do a sequel. But why are you asking?
4686650 Because just stopping here would be PURE FREAKING EVIL.
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What if I AM evil
Muhuahauhuahua*cough* Sorry.
Don't worry. There will be a sequel. I just won't continue in the next time (I think) due to my planned holiday trip.
No comments? I'm surprised.
I'm happy to find this fanfiction. I was worried that no one else wished that Princess Luna had her own kingdom
Nice. I know the story is finished but I really want to see Luna take a form like Nightmare Moon but without the evil. Now THAT would be a queen
No worries on it being shorter. Too bad Luna doesn't want the title of queen
Yeesh Celestia, controlling much? She's your sister not your daughter.
Oooh yes! She still has that form to take. I do prefer it over her natural form
The suspense. I love it!
Ugh, Celestia. We've talked about this.
"...out of her control. "
I've been having the nagging suspicion that Celestia was a controlling type
Ooooh I'm so nervexcited!!