After over a thousand years suffering under the rule of Discord and Nightmare Moon, the defeat of the immortal tyrants was like a dream. A dream that soon became a greater nightmare; for Midnight Star was no savior, and they soon knew greater suffering than ever before.
Even when the Empress's mysterious death renews the dream of restoring Equestria to the paradise it had once been, it doesn't last long. A small dragoness appears with dire news: The world itself is dying.
This is a prequel to Midnight Star. Reading Midnight Star first is not required.
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If the changelings were to find some vagabonds or some survivors from destroyed colonies and protect them in their hidden hives, their problem would be solved.
Midnight names herself Empress... without even knowing what it means.
Sonata A.K.A. Octavia
I love this story!
I am surprised it is not more well known...
As I was reading this I couldn't help wondering what they would think of Midnight's new look in the other story.
Also wouldn't it be ironic if Midnight was the element of magic?
I know she probably isn't, but it would be kind of funny.
Anyway...Love your work! And I eagerly await more!
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Well thanks! And yea; Midnight's gone through some major changes in the other story line; and there's still more to come for her.
As far as After Midnight though; it would be rather sadly ironic if Midnight were the element of magic. But luckily for them; Midnight, while extremely powerful with magic, had a very weak connection to harmony magic since she was more attuned to chaos at the time. So the element of magic wouldn't have chosen her.
Now thats something I didn't expect. All that looking for rest of elements was part of that other story or still its actual ?
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Lol, no, it is part of this story. After Midnight isn't even half done at this point.
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Its just looked that they search for element to win against Midnight
4072927 Nope, the elements are needed for something else; something only Reshkirana really knows about at this point.
... that day or two is going to make a difference, isn't it?
4520225 Hm?
1st: That's gotta be Applejack...
2nd Origin Atlas's is Rarity's. Surprise's is obvious, and I think Chrysalis will take Magic if Kira doesn't (hey, watch the teeth!). Maybe Sonata is the new Loyalty? or one of the twins.
Still leaves honesty, though.
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There were actually hints in The Frozen Empire pertaining to a couple of the elements. And you're right about Origin Atlas; he's generosity in this story.
apostrophe is unnecessary here.
and here. Remember that the apostrophe is only used in this case when you're indicating possession (e.g. the dragon's scales) or a proper name, not when referring to a group or a species (e.g. dragons tend to hoard precious objects)\
Needs to be a comma after "Ponyville"
Comma after "nodded"
Missing an ending quotation.
also, PARTY TIME!
Time for the Dances of Power!
used
Think there should be a comma after "said"
and
"get herself and Kira some refreshment" looks better to me.
I personally just don't like leaving this like that. Not sure if putting a comma before "smiling" is actually any better, though.
Here, though, a comma before "smiling" looks better.
Probably a comma after "asked"?
Colon instead of a period.
Needs a comma, methinks.
Also needs a comma after "asked"
Kira smiled in understanding.
Isn't this one word?
Just stick with Surprise. You act like they can't accept you <_<
This sounds like a sequel to something. Is it a sequel to something? If it is, then you should like to the previous story.
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It's a prequel actually. There aren't any stories that take place before this one.
Interesting so far. Also, whats it with me and stumbling on stories where twilight sparkle is evil?
Also, is twilight a nightmare in this story, or is her evil through some other means? Midnight star is a great nightmare alias for her though.
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Well that gets into the multiverse side of my first story Midnight Star. This is a kind of Prequel / side story, actually quite separate from the main series. Basically Midnight Star is this world's version of Twilight, but she's always been Midnight Star, it's her real name. My idea is that the more different the timelines are in the different worlds, the more different the versions of each character will be.
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So what's the sequel?
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The listed sequel was the original Midnight Star, the first fic I posted, and tells the story of what happened to Midnight after she 'died' in this story. This one is being written as a prequel / side story.
There had to be a cliffhanger.
Missing quotations starting from "from here"
And there's always a cliffhanger.
Hear that
Comma instead of a semicolon. It's like saying "To protect, secure, and maintain".
Comma instead of a semicolon; this time it's just the wrong punctuation. Semicolon's aren't used to separate incomplete and complete sentences (in the sense of having the standard subject-verb-DO stuff that would prevent it from being recognized as a fragment).
Extra quote.
First comma should be a period.
Comma instead of a period. The 2nd semicolon is okay, but IMO a period would be better.
Needs a comma between "from" and "possibly"
Period would be preferred.
used to.
Adding "was" here isn't necessary, but as far as word flow goes it'd probably be better to add it. Or change it to "it appeared so quickly Kira..."
First semi was fine. This one needs to be a period.
Comma instead of semicolon.
Put that comma over between "repeated" and "and".
I'd rephrase to this: "If I had to guess, I'd say it was at least a couple hours. It's likely after dark,"
Given the comma that immediately precedes this bit, "slowly brightening the tunnel" is a better way to put it since it fits with what comes before the comma'd part.
Also, in "as the drew", "they".
Unnecessary comma.
Feeling something in the air, ponies emerged from their homes and joined the rest
Period, not comma.
*snort* silly heroic sacrificers.
Too young for a cutie mark? (assuming she can get one)
And I'm guessing that Kira's descendants are going to be compatible with ponies. Have you thought about how the hybrids will work as far as physical appearances (like what Kira thought about)?
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At this point Firebloom is about 9 years old and I usually put the cmc around 10-12 in the show so Firebloom is about the right age perhaps a little young. Haven't actually decided if I would have Kira's descendants have cutie marks or not though, she doesn't have one herself. As for the their being hybrids, my idea is that they would always be hybrids as Kira thought and just vary in how much they are pony or dragon. Perhaps I'll have it so that whether or not they get cutie marks will vary as well, in which case Firebloom would probably get one, but her little brother that was mentioned probably wouldn't.
I see you like Hitchcock's idea of suspense, first a bomb goes off and then the suspense rises.
Nice start. Might read the Midnight Start stories later, though what brought me to this one was Chryssie.
Also, a hoard, not a horde.
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Raziel-chan
Poor Evening Star.
Alternate Twilight is an arsehole.
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Raziel-chan
Aww, I like Surprise even more now.
Though I always liked the idea of a pegasus Pinkie Pie.
That ending.
Yay Chryssie!
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Lol, horde, oops... Too much Warcraft...
No, Sallis, Surprise!
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Raziel-chan
... Other passengers kept looking at me funny when I kept wiping my eyes on the tram. Poor Sallis... She didn't deserve it.
Ding dong the witch is dead! At least in this verse.
Now I wonder who'll be the remaining elements.
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Raziel-chan
Wooo, another element.
... Shadow demon? They can't catch a break, can they?
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Raziel-chan
Oooh, so Sallis was the element of loyalty, makes sense.
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Raziel-chan
Dance dance magic revolution!
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And the elements are there! Kinda going Sallis might appear for a moment one they've been used.
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Poor Cutelings.
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That shadow is what remained of Luna/Nightmare Moon, isn't it?
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Raziel-chan
I suppose it became... Crystal clear that they did it!
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Raziel-chan
Nice ending. I like it when Chryssie gets a good end.
Though, did the remnants of Luna disappear, or is she still in the caves underneath old Canterlot?
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