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Blank flank they called her.

Worthless they called her.

Apple Bloom has endured the torment of Diamond Tiara and Silver Spoon as long as she can remember, and now it's beginning to affect her. Her mind wanders and she has images of hurting them. She fears these moments. Every time she imagines herself hurting them it sickens her, but they keep coming back. So, under the advice of Cheerilee, Apple Bloom goes to see the school counselor about it, never imagining that such a choice would make the next three days a living hell.

To find out why this was cancelled, as well as to find out the rest of the story, go here.

Edited to make this pre-season 1.

Teen for profanity and some gore.

Cover art here: http://techrainbow.deviantart.com/art/Gloomy-Apple-Bloom-340214157

Chapters (2)
Comments ( 524 )

:D a possible revival of SLOR? Must read!

Oh god. :raritydespair:

So sad.

Dainn #3 · Mar 23rd, 2014 · · 8 · M1 ·

*Reads description*
Now this hits a little close to home.
In my short lifetime I've found that there's a simple solution to dealing with bullies, punch, kick, and stomp until they get the message.
After that punch, kick, and stomp some more.
And don't be afraid to fight dirty.
Sure, it can do more harm than good sometimes.
But it'll end once and for all if a bully gets a quad dose of their own medicine.

what the fuck?
DT and Silver spoon are the ones who caused all this shit. and yet apple bloom will be arrested if shes on school ground?
the fuck? how does this make any sense at all?

BBkat #5 · Mar 23rd, 2014 · · 1 · M1 ·

My thoughts exactly.

Also, if they're going to be keeping her overnight or whatever shouldn't they be informing Applejack/her legal guardians?

4120247 That's how a hold works. To schools, the threat of murder is a lot worse than "just a few words."

but they know that DT caused this right?
its her fault that apple bloom feels this way.
it feels like DT is getting off scot free.

4120275 Who says they didn't? Why do you think AJ and Big Mac are tagged? They take you first, then talk to people. Trust me, I know how a hold works.

Apple bloom should take up baking :pinkiecrazy: or become the forman of the rainbow factory :rainbowdetermined2:

4120293 We're only on chapter one...

Having said that, life isn't fair sometimes.

That's what I did, but it only made it worse.

true we are only a chapter in, hope this all works out.

Damn AB!

4120296 They just didn't seem to make any indication that they had told anyone else about this, aside from DT and the school board.

4120234 The bullies I knew would deliberately provoke that so that they could bring the wrath of the system down on you. And then they'd laugh as you got suspended, and laugh when you came back, and provoke you more because now you had a history of violence and their frame jobs would be that much easier. :unsuresweetie:

In true BW fashion, it's going to be a bittersweet ending.

good ol brony writer, always able to hook me on a story

4120332 I had bullies who would coax me to chase them, then report me. Luckily my mom watches recess, and she isn't and idiot

Ayla #19 · Mar 23rd, 2014 · · · M1 ·

This isn't fair at all! Diamond Tiara and Silver Spoon should be suspended or even expelled, but Apple Bloom is banned from school grounds under threat of arrest never allowed to return?! I am so mad right now! I hope this story gets better and the bullies get what they deserve. I know this was marked as sad but come on! :twilightangry2:

I hope Apple Jack finds out soon and starts kicking some flanks! Along with Big Mac!

So Apple Bloom talks to Cheerilee and the school counselor about all the shit DT and SS put her through and her thoughts of revenge on them, and because of that she gets barred from school and hauled off to the mental hospital. And all without anyone thinking to notify her family or even discuss this with them.
I'm sorry but this is grade A bullshit:ajbemused::twilightangry2: Cheerilee would never agree to go along with this crap, and school board basically foalnapped AB(the Apples weren't notified AT ALL!) and sentenced to a mental ward as if she where the spawn of Sombra. That right there just kills my suspension of disbelief.

Why is the title making me think of Monster by Skillet?

Dainn #22 · Mar 23rd, 2014 · · 1 · M1 ·

4120332 I don't feel like talking about some of the things that my past bullies put me through, but things tended to run in a cycle. They provoke you until you say/do something they don't like. They throw punches at you, then they/you-both get suspended. When they/you-both get back, the bully would try to pick up from where they left off last time. Then they/you-both get suspended again, and it keeps going on in a cycle until someone gets kicked out permanently. Or unless the bully gets outright humiliated.

That's the way the system works. Schools will coddle the bully and criminalize the victim. I was bullied every day until my parents pulled me out of the system. Thankfully I was never expelled and most of the time I'd spend the rest of the day with the principal or would be sent home.

Appleboom should have just kicked their ass.

Ayla #25 · Mar 23rd, 2014 · · · M1 ·

4120407 I know I was bullied as a kid too, that's why this ticks me off. XD Sorry to get all worked up over a story, but that just means it's well written! :twilightblush:

I do want to keep reading and see what happens next. Though I get the feeling this story will end up making me cry. :twilightoops:

I know, it gets to me too.

Is this story in response to the kid who was barred from wearing his MLP backpack to school because it was getting him bullied?


Tracking this, because I know how these stories and I work with each other. Feelsy, that's how.

And I like feeling the feels, no matter how feelsy.

Looking forward to another read with you!

It wouldn't surprise me. The real surprise about that whole thing was Glenn Beck being nice to the kid. I put together a comic about that.

4120386 Um... no, this is how it works. Trust me on that. This is based on a true story, and that happened in real life. The person was taken before the guardians were contacted. I wouldn't do it like that otherwise. I never said that the Apples weren't notified, but even if they were it wouldn't matter. She's still going.

4120568 Nope. Not at all.

Can't wait to read.

4120403 Because the title is a line from that song. :twilightsheepish:

4120568 Wait, that really happened? WHAT THE ACTUAL FUCK?!

4120568 I actually hadn't heard about that till now. Anyways, good story as always BronyWriter! A story can't drive me crazy if it isn't good. So congrats on that. I think I've read most of what you've written and I usually enjoy it. I also noticed that gore was in the tag, so I assume that means that somepony is gonna get hurt. :pinkiecrazy:

Alondro #36 · Mar 23rd, 2014 · · 6 · M1 ·

4120580 Glenn is not the monster (P)MSNBC makes him out to be.

He doesn't care what people like, so long as they're not getting up in people's faces and rubbing their noses in it and demanding everyone kowtow to their preferences or be labelled as haters (which is why the LGBT lobby ticks him off).

And honestly, that ticks me off too. I like how "South Park" put it some years ago, "Tolerant, but not stupid."

I never said he was a monster, but he is an idiot and I'll stop right there because I want to enjoy BronyWriter's new story.

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Wyrme #39 · Mar 23rd, 2014 · · · M1 ·

I know how Applebloom feels. For elementary and middle school, I went to the same building, and went there with the same kids. They were terrible people. I don't even know why they hated me so much. I was weird, I'll admit(I still kind of am), but I was harmless. I never did a thing to them. But they treated me like trash. For example, they invented something called "Emily Germs", named after yours truly. If someone were to come into contact with me, they would catch this germ and die. And I couldn't but take sadistic pleasure in chasing around the schoolyard. This lasted until maybe third or fourth grade. And that's just ONE example of how awful they were. Eight years of hell and lonliness.And that school was a private school. As in one that's religious. And yet the kids there were so evil. What if it was a public school, where discipline isn't all that great?(not that my old school ever did anything in the first place) I can't help shudder at this thought, because, who knows how much farther they would've gone in such an enviroment?
And there are people these days who say bullying is overrated.

4120189 It's already been revived in "A Shadow Hangs Overhead," a what-if story that's about what would happen if Annie had escaped.

Alondro #41 · Mar 23rd, 2014 · · 1 · M1 ·

4120409 That's what I did! I let them start it, naturally. Then I finished it.

I think it severely embarrassed them, getting taken down 4-on-1 by a 100 lb nerd.

I was abnormally powerful for my small size. You should have seen the looks on the faces of my high school gym class when I did 20 straight reps of 500 lbs on the leg press and 65 pushups in one minutes.

Suffice to say, the bullies soon looked elsewhere for a target.

Of course, today you have to worry about them being armed. We need to go back to capital punishment in schools. And I volunteer to administer it! *brandishes spiked bamboo rod* Ah, they do things right in Singapore! :pinkiecrazy:

Woah, a SLOR story that I missed! I had thought that it ended at Ripples. It appears I was wrong! Thanks friend!

4120783 You're welcome.:twilightsmile:

Alondro #44 · Mar 23rd, 2014 · · 2 · M1 ·

4120693 Boy, he can recite more history than you've ever read.

He's bellicose and eccentric, but an idiot? Far from it.

Can I join this club?
I have most of the same sceneros (or however you spell that) except I didn't tell anyone and now the people who made fun of me deeply regret it.


Dude, some people made the "Adam Cooties", and it was basically the same thing as yours. Although it may have seemed bad, I actually enjoyed "infecting" people. It was fun as hell. :pinkiecrazy:

Lars #47 · Mar 23rd, 2014 · · 2 · M1 ·

Ah, so many people who don't realize that public schools actually work this way...

4120234 same here went though hell with bullys in till that one day I release all my :flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage: on them. :pinkiecrazy:

Well, that was incredibly depressing.

I think I'm going to go find something cheerful to read now.

Lyall #50 · Mar 23rd, 2014 · · · M1 ·

:twilightangry2: Hits close home for me (I guess a good portion of us really). Verbal bulling is fucking horrible and what is worse about it is that sence there is no "prof" of it happening jack shit is done about it. You know until the victim get tired of all of it and finally does something about it (or parents threaten lawsuit even then still unlikely).
4120762 If there is one thing I learned the hard way is that bullies don't need a reason to do what they are doing. I tried to apogize to one of my bullies, thinking I did something to them. They told me flat out they were just having fun doing what they were doing, made things ten times worse.

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