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Briar Rose's pet phoenix, Poeni, has been in his family since...well, recorded history doesn't even really go that far back. However, Poeni is different from modern Equestrian phoenix - such as Princess Celestia's pet, Philomena - in one major aspect: Poeni is actually a different breed of phoenix, an ancient breed long thought to be extinct: the promptly named Ancient Phoenix.What makes the ancient phoenix so different from modern phoenixes - apart from age - is that while the modern breed can be reborn by spontaneously combusting, ancient phoenixes are required to build a ritual funeral pyre, built with several specific ingredients: myrrh, cinnamon, cassia, frankincense, spikenard, oak branches, and palm leaves. However, there is one major problem: not only are most of these rare ingredients, but it is not certain about whether a couple of them still even exist!!! Will Briar be able to complete the ritual so his phoenix Poeni can be reborn?


***Again, change your background color to dark. However, there isn't nearly as much dialogue in this story as there is in my other ones, so this isn't as crucial, but it's still more-or-less necessary to be able to read the dialogue that is in the story.

EDIT: I am currently working to change this***

I am working to make each chapter EqD worthy before I publish them, so do NOT expect regular updates. It doesn't mean that I'm not writing, because I am - I'm actually past the half-way point of the story as I'm writing this. However, I'm simply trying to make each one perfect...well, as much so as possible.

***Dedicated from a Poeni to all other Poeni who may or may not read this. Oh, I'm sorry, are you not familiar with Latin? Well, let me tell you this: poeni is the Latin root from which the Punic wars, as well as the Punic language. To clarify, poeni is Latin for 'Phoenician', of which I myself am one, albeit I am a Phoenician from Arizona, but my dedication remains the same, nonetheless. EDIT: Do NOT trust Google Translate for that. For one, Google Translate only has a Beta version for Latin. And second, I got this out of a textbook, not from any online source.***

***Cover image designed by WingWind over on deviantArt (link: http://wingwind.deviantart.com/) at my request.***

Chapters (8)
Comments ( 36 )

oooo i love the detail od the descriptions :D made me lol. bril writeing and look forward to more :P :pinkiehappy:

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Don't worry; there's already at least 5k+ words in more chapters that still just need to be edited. :pinkiehappy:

EDIT: My total wordcount for EVERYTHING is 7,517 words.

Good luck trying to get it onto EqD, The pre-readers are a bitch to get through from what people have said.

If they find usually one mistake then they throw the whole story away because it's either not up to their standards or it isn't a cliched romance story.

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That is exactly why I'm using their guide, which I linked to in the description.

Good luck with EQD... I submitted a story, and after the way I was treated I'm quite unlikely to ever submit another one. I don't need that kind of stress in my life. They didn't even send mine to a prereader, they dismissed it with prejudice and a six-word rejection note.

I wondered if there was some mistake, so I sent another message asking what exactly the problem was. Then I was told that I'd better just stick with FIMFiction.net. Okay. I can do that.

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Much appreciated. I absolutely prefer if people are not quick to judge, whether it's positively or negatively. I'm sure that you'll like the chapters to come. :twilightsmile:

I still wonder what is this 'EQD' standard anyway. It's not as if they run a actual publishing company.
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I do hope so. Normally in long stories, the action stuff can be ... rather late. How many words you plan on this?

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I'm not certain about the actual word count, but as for the plot, it's pretty much already written out. I've also already written drafts for up to...about 3/4 of the way through the story, approximately.

EDIT: And as for the 'EQD' standard, I've actually heard both extremes: that it's completely overrated and that it's actually easy, as well as that it's near impossible to get something through. As a result, I've decided not to give a damn.

oooooo this was a fun chapter. love the description :D looking forward to the next entry :pinkiehappy:

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Thank you! I'm currently working on the next chapter to get it ready to publish! I'm actually trying to increase the word count atm, so that I'm - as per one thing EqD specified, and I completely agree with - showing, not telling. In my opinion, that IS a big deal, and one that I've found I've had a LOT of trouble with in my stories so far, so once I fix that for this chapter you can expect to be able to read it. :pinkiehappy:

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Join the club! ...well, so far it's just us, I guess, but...meh. =3

Oh you! Sonic is the blue blur you silly!:derpytongue2:

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So is RD. She's also blue, and she's also fast.

As for the last chapter, which I failed to comment on, I like it a lot. As for this... I shall read.

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Haha, I do know that even though I use a shit-ton of dialogue and the like, I definitely can get a pretty good story from my mind to the Interwebs. How? I don't know. *shrugs*

The only individual. That gets a boner. From a morning.

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It's a pun on "happy", in case you couldn't tell.

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Read my other stories and you will understand. (Almost every single one has Pinkie Pie breaking the 4th wall at some point, so I had decided to get that out of the way before she decided to.)

^ True. Also, this is incredibly realistic based on characters and the way the would talk. Things like that.

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The realistic-ness is probably my #1 objective for anything I write on this site, so...



:yay:

Trolololololololololololololololo ... Eyeyeyeyeyeyeyeyeyeyeyeyeyeyeyeyeee.

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:facehoof: I'd rather not explain it further. Sorry. (I might send you a PM, though)

So, hasn't been updated since April? :fluttercry:
Writer's block?

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BIG TIME writer's block, hahahaha. Well, that, and my best friend is in Camp Pendelton (though he gets out the 14th! =D)

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