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Wolfe and WindSilver


I'm Windsilver and my grey companion is Wolfe. Dabblers in the trade of writing, we hope that you enjoy the work that we put forth. So grab your tea, blanket, some nice music, and enjoy the ride.

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The bonds you form with others, sometimes you choose and want them. Sometimes you don't.
Bonds we were forced into, having no control over who we met or who we must interact with.
Bonds we've forged over time, putting in sweat, blood, and tears.
Bonds we've had all our life, ones that have influenced our decisions drastically.
Bonds we don't know about, and therefore don't act upon, until destiny rears its head.
The bonds you form with others can give you the power to do great things. They can protect you and the ones you care about. They can be the things that pull you from the darkness.
They can also endanger you. Used and manipulated to fit others' desires.


It's been almost a year since the Elements of Harmony saved Equestria from Tirek. Their fame spread as tales of their heroism reached the farthest corners of the land. Stories of Nightmare Moon's fury. Discord's revival, reformation, treachery, and repent. Sombra's tyranny. And Tirek's hunger for power.

The six bearers have been through much since then. But when evil once again threatens the land. They find themselves without their elements, and very limited knowledge of their rainbow powers. This time they'll need more than simply the Magic of Friendship to stop it. But who exactly can step up to the plate?

Celestia has discovered ancient texts that tell of a second set of Elements. Elements with the power necessary to protect Equestria. At least, she hopes so.

(I don't own the current image. If owner requests for removal, it will be done. Image comes from Axquirix and the emblems themselves come from here Emkay-MLP both on Deviantart.)
(The fic now has a theme song that was discovered by a friend who writes stuff. Some of his stuff is NSFW but he labels really well. Pay your respects to Senpai Butt Stallion and the awesome theme)

Chapters (6)
Comments ( 31 )

I like it. It has the possibility to become a really good Fic.
However, you need to be careful with lines and paragraphs.
I found this harder to read because it was basically a block of writing. Try to space it out a bit more with shorter paragraphs.

Apart from that, I really liked it, you have earned yourself a like and a favourite, keep it up! :pinkiesmile:

Mhm. This is, quite good. I might actually start pestering you to finish the updates for this. Good stuff bro!

All I can say is this story has potential, but it need more stuff. I don't know, maybe introduce more of the characters.

SEE!?
I FUCKING TOLD YOU TO SPACE YOUR SHIT
FUCK YOU DARRY
FUCK
YOU
OH AND GOOD STORY

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This :pinkiecrazy:
Fucking :pinkiecrazy:
Guy :pinkiecrazy:
Right :pinkiecrazy:
Here :pinkiecrazy:

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It's funnier because I know him IRL.
Wanna know his name?

3889007 Is it Darry by some chance? :pinkiecrazy:

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unoriginal pls
His name is Darrisson.
:D

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Great, now I have to kill everyone and change my name before the government comes after me. Again!

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u wot m8
Do it faggot.
I dare you.

3890545 You bring the kerosene, I'll bring the blowtorch.

3891371 Can we bring SlayerHewkii? The more people we bring, the more people we can kill . the more things we can destroy the more fun we can have :pinkiecrazy:

Hey, Its me again. Just a few things (don't hate me :twilightsheepish: )

You made the same mistake as you originally did in the first chapter, and thats making a block of writing. Dont get me wrong, it's a good story, and I enjoy reading it, but at the same time, it's quite difficult due to the block.

Get that fixed up, and it should be good to go.

Keep up the good work :pinkiehappy:

Well the story is progressing, that is a good sign.

Well we meet another element. I cant wait for the next chapter.

*sigh* :ajsleepy: I have to admit when I clicked on this story I wasn't expecting much. But! :pinkiegasp: I have been pleasantly disappointed.:pinkiehappy:
Keep up the good work. :scootangel:

It is good to see that you have learned from your mistakes and have finally started to use spacing.

Liked this chapter, a lot, good writing from start to end and detailed information in between.

Keep it up.

So is soarin the element of trust or is it this changleing? Great job writing up what a changeling does to prepare to live someone's life.

I thought for sure Soarin will be an element... as any prominent male character in the series. Not really complaining about the character... Just thought the "supposed elements" are for ponies.

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I break the molds!!!
And what elements, I haven't seen any sort of elements in the story. Whatever do you mean.
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Not going to delve further. Clearly, to be answered in the story AND your own work, so you have your own "CREATIVE" Right and boundaries.

I was thinking thunderDash shipping. Nice chapter. I can't wait for the next one. I'm glad you're back.

I suggest putting the intro section (the tag thing, in italics) into quote tags and centring it. That's what I do for 'things characters read', works pretty well. The way it is I rather confused as to what was going on there, and took a few reads.

There's some extremely minor formatting inconsisancies, like sometimes you put dialogue on a new line- and sometimes you don't. Pick one and stick with it.

Good work with Applejacks dialogue.

“Eeyup.” I started to walk past her

Started to walk isn't a speaking verb, you have to have a said in here or something. "I said, and started..."
There is somethign weird with the indenting, either you didn't indent paragraphs or something else is broken. specifically at one point "I shivered" and then the next word is on a new line for some reason. Formatting errors are easy as heck to fix, so just get on it.

So Celestia, this is who you would send to challenge me. Let’s hope your other “champions” will have more spice in them, or this may very well be the most boring takeover of the century.

I am entirely confused as to what this means, who's saying it, and where it came from. Either specific who is saying it somehow, or cut it.

the flapjacks suddenly seemed, not worth it

Don't need a comma there, although you do need one before the preceeding 'and'.

her, just like, Mom

Another un-needed comma. Perhaps consider enunciating what you write to get a better feel for it. Why would be pause after like?

So who is wisdom. Flim or Mac? Sorry about being grounded hope things work out for the better soon.

Haven't read this yet. It's going in my read later for sure though. I am intrigued.

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“Eeyup.” I started to walk past her

Started to walk isn't a speaking verb, you have to have a said in here or something. "I said, and started..."

There was a period, so "said" isn't required. If it is a long sentence and a short bit of dialog, however, it might be better to hit enter and separate the two.

Everything else sounds right, advice-wise. :twilightsmile:

Oh du ThunderDash !!! :rainbowkiss:

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