Wilson, a mad, nature hating scientist, must survive in an apocalyptic world. Spider's roam, Wolves hunt, and Darkness rules.
Wilson has a hard time surviving in this god-forsaken land, most of this land doesn't make any sense, but that's nothing science can't handle, right? Wilson has entered Maxwell's door, who is Maxwell? A sick, twisted, and chaotic mastermind of this place. When Wilson seems to just not be able to be killed by whatever Maxwell throws at him, Maxwell gets pissed. Drivin to madness and pure rage, Maxwell decided to change Wilson scenery, in almost every way. Maybe Wilson will complete Maxwell's challenge? Will the others arrive? Will the pigmen come to? I sure do hope Chester's okay! Can Wilson survive this! Just as long as he remembers these words…
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Dont Starve
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This story is based off of the game Don't Starve on Steam, and PS4. Playing the game is TOTALLY recommended, but it would help give you a better understanding about what is happening if you did play the game.
(But seriously, this game is fun and you should play it….now!
Tried it. It's boring.
The game, anyway.
I wish for more, very much so.
As a fellow writer of Don't Starve/MLP fics, I applaud you for taking steps to try and fill in some of the holes that were not filled in by the game itself. However, I ran into a few issues while reading your story that should probably be fixed if you plan to continue the story.
One of the things is you really need to do a bit more fact checking as Wilson's official whole name is Wilson P. Higgsbury among a few other minor discrepancies I'm willing to overlook in the name of narrative freedom, I only point to the name issue because that is something a lot of people might call you on. I also found it very odd that Wilson would be aware of Ancient Guardians considering he was only now encountering a Deerclops for the first time.
On a more narrative level, I noticed you committed a few a few minor foe-pas. The most obvious and easily fixed problem was listing numbers as numbers (i.e. 1) instead of as words (i.e. one). This is a big no no in writing and fixing it will make your work look more professional. I'd also strongly advise trying to make your work more accessible to people who haven't played the game by trying to describe the various monsters and environments better. Which was actually another detail I found lacking in the story, your narrative is very spare in details and as such comes off flat and dull. I'd strongly advise putting as many specific details as you can into your story to help pull the reader in.
For example which sounds better to you, "Wilson shivered in his Puffy Vest and adjusted his Winter Hat. Maxwell just HAD to make this world permanent winter, didn't he?"
or
"Wilson's teeth chattered noisily as he stuffed more of his now long itching beard down under his equally itchy vest he'd made from the fur and trunk of several animals he'd hunted in a vain attempt at keeping warm. As another cutting wind blew more wet snow into his face he pulled his fur cap down lower over his face trying to protect himself from the near arctic conditions his tormentor had tossed him in."
I would also question the fact that Wilson would simply charge into the middle of town considering he is from a fairly modern society and would find the thatch huts of ponyville odd, not to mention he would be expecting some form of trick from Maxwell considering the set up you gave from how he arrived in Equestria. His simple curses also seem off, due to his opinion of himself as a gentleman as well as his pride as an intelligent individual. It seems more likely that he would either spout his simple, "I really hate that guy," or go into a long almost poetic rant about how deeply he despises and hates Maxwell.
While the last paragraph is mostly opinions, I hope you take the rest of my advice to heart as I love seeing any Don't Starve fan fiction and enjoy seeing it done well.
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Stormrider, while you are entitled to your own opinions, it is very rude that your comment is simply you stating you dislike the game this story is based off especially since you neglect to say anything about the story itself. It is very much like coming in and saying, "I think the thing you like is stupid," to the writer and most of the people who are likely to read this.
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Last time I checked, I wasn't commenting on the story itself.
In fact, I like this author. He/she does very great work. I was going to express what the pros and cons of this piece as soon as I get a chance to actually read this story. But there's no need to take up half a comment page. That's what PMs are for.
3848952 Oh my gosh
Thank you for this, I will remember your words and cherish them. It's the first real constructive criticism i've ever gotten.
Glad you enjoyed the story, too!
CHESTER!!!!!
Loving this fic
3857836 Glad to hear that! You can have this
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You know what would be awesome
Discord vs maxwell
Who I loved in this story
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Oh my god, he knows your plans. He's spying on you, we watches you while you write… He can hear your thoughts, he is probably hearing all of this. What will I do? I can never think….ever, or I can chop my head off or something. I don't know what to! This is so creepy, I'm going insane, he follows me and stalks me all day. I see him at lunch, He watches me socialize with my friends
WHAT WILL I DO
idk wat dis iz
well I cried too my friend.
3859049 Finally someone found that!!!!!
You people were making me nervous
Great job though
so sad
*mouth gaping and eyes wide while wondering how its really going to kick off*
"Insane"
Might want to put more questions in
It seems a little OOC for so few questions
wolfgang! wolfgang! wolfgang!
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wolfgang wolfgang wolfgang
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I Approve of this message
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wilsons crew
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Wilson's reaction will be
who else thinks this pic is epic
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3907643 Thats Dope!!!!
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Wilson the god-king of the pigs and ruler of knowledge and survival all hail
she is here!!
Twi is going to have a field day
why no wolfgang? why do we have to have abigail. we want wolfgang
sorry if i am demanding but still i like wolfgang hes my favorite character.
Why would you do this to me? Why would you do this to my heart?
Hmm...this reminds me...I should really put wiki links in my Skullgirls crossover. Make it easier for readers who know nothing of the game to understand the references. Thanks, writer!
Abigail?
Does that mean...
WENDY?!?!
I finally found a good Don't Starve fic, can't wait for the next update, please update soon :D
I also can't wait to see Wes xD
Maxwell told Wilson about how we was miserable and in pain, he didn't but it.
"Say pal….you not look so good"
he had to find supplies and don't starve.
one his fingers and toes,one his fingers and toes,
Terrible grammar
It updated! YES! YES!!!
And an awesome update by the way, I can't wait for the next chapter :D
Come on Woddy, come on Woddy.
4574207 Woah! Didn't see that one, changed it
4574315 I think you mean Woody? Or... Wendy? Whhaaaaa
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Woody......I meant Woody.
Hurrah! It's great to see this back.
I was not expecting Wendy's predicament. Maxwell is reminding me a lot of Discord here.
4600822 Good good, Maxwell reminding you of him is a good thing
Amazing chapter as always, Wilson's life or the metal potato thing? I truly hope Wendy chooses Wilson's life
I can't wait to see Wes in this fic, at least I hope he appears.
And Maxwell looks like a more evil form of Discord, Discord wants to prank everyone, while I see Maxwell as a... Cold and calculating enemy, always knowing when to strike.
Anyway, can't wait for the next chapter
4603402 Thank you for the kind words!
Please stay tuned !
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4813379 .... Wha?
4813379 Um, is that a code?
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morse
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4813446 Sooo, what are you trying to say?
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go to your other story I should have commented, there is a code on that story learn morse so we may communicate war
Oh no! Wendy's stuck, quick Wilson, save her!!!
4813455 or you could just look up morse code translator
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yessssssssssssssss
What's this story about? :/