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Since their first day being Power Ponies, Spike's marefriends have returned to Canterlot's House of Enchanted Comics for more adventures. One afternoon, Rarity, Applejack, and Rainbow Dash are enjoying a supertastic escapade as Radiance, Mistress Marevelous, and Zapp. The number one written rule of these enchanted comics is simple: the fantasy will not end until the narrative plays itself out. One problem, though. For this particular "adventure" to end, it's written that Mistress Marevelous and Zapp must kiss. Passionately.

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No offense, but, I'm not following you and got an alert that you posted a new story.

WHAT ALCHEMY IS THIS?!

Original title was A Mouthful of Rainbow, but ya know, teen rating.

Regidar #3 · Jan 25th, 2014 · · 10 ·

This could have been the perfect clopfic
Skirts you wound me

Wow, this was a shockingly transparent excuse to get two ponies to kiss.

All of my yes. Gonna read this now.:rainbowkiss:

I didn't need to read that textbook anyway.

Welp, that certainly was different.

Wait, wait. That shitty episode earned itself a tag?

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Yeah, they are separate characters from the mane six, and if even Pipsqueak or Winona need their own tags, so do the power ponies.

Personally, I am indifferent to variety of tags they add.
I was a bit surprised when I found that Stephen Magnet and Tubs Jelly didn't get their own tags, really.
:moustache:

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Sorry, but I have to say it.

I'd put a mouthful in her "rainbow"!
...
Okay, probably shouldn't have said it....

Screw it, still hitting the add comment button!
:trollestia:

Well, this was interesting. :rainbowlaugh:

Interesting. The writing style worked well for giving it the cheesy comic book feel (all that alliteration!), but I think you did stretch it a bit here and there. It was an interesting read. The idea of Rainbow Dash being "stuck" upside down like that was funny. "Wingboners" are not exactly a practical anatomical process :P

A few corrections:
"then shielded their eyes from a sudden bolt of lightning."
"Two-Flanks's bulging eye finished blinking in slow motion"

really good dialogue.

And Rarity being Rarity, what more does a fanfic need?

Wait. There's a Power Ponies tag?

My day just got that much cooler.

That was cool. I keep hoping that there will be more stories like this where the gang has to follow the awkward things that happen in comic books in order to leave. Such as maybe one of them turning evil (or mind control), having to fight multiple civilians, one of them having to die, romance plots, etc

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Yeah? I don't get what's so shocking about this. Character tags aren't "earned" based on the quality of an episode.

I wish this fic had an epilogue or something, showing how they deal with what happened instead of the abrupt cut-off. Do they go on as if nothing happened or did Rainbow like it?

Also, is that description implying that Rarity, Rainbow and Applejack are all Spike's marefriends? As in romantically? If not, you might want to clear that up.

I've heard a bit of you Mr. Explosions. From what I've heard, you're one of the best writers here. I also have heard a bit about the um... purplish hue of your prose. I've always liked purple prose though. Here it works really well with the whole pulp comic book atmosphere. I like my comic books too. I like the references, especially those furthering the parallels between Mistress Marevelous and Wonder Woman. The major problem of the story was really funny and then when it turns out Rarity made a rather crucial mistake! :twilightsheepish: I usually like my AppleDash to work out a little differently. :rainbowdetermined2::ajsmug: But here it feels more authentic as to how they would react if they found themselves in this type of situation. I really liked the twist at the end. It made me laugh so much. :rainbowlaugh: Next time Rarity, I advise you to bring Spike along into these enchanted comic book adventures. I'm certain he's knowledgeable enough about Power Ponies comics to have cleared up this little error. :moustache: I've been really waiting for a story like this. I'm surprised it took this long after "Power Ponies" to get one. Anyway, this was great. It really made me laugh. Keep up the good work. :pinkiehappy:

Laughing my ass off non stop...

I could easily have seen this as a episode, man.

Enchantedceptionnnn

That's what you get when a lemur takes charge... Somehow, it's pretty good, too.

~Skeeter The Lurker

"There was a smudge on the paaaaage—haa ha haa haa haaaaaaaa...!"

Rarity.....................Fuk you.

First Power Ponies tag I've seen, and I was not disappointed. :heart:

Well I must say its been an absolute joy to read something of yours that hasn't completely broken my heart. Your literary style lends itself really well to comedy and I think I'll be looking at more of your works that aren't epic tragedies. Kudos!

"Gaaaah!" Rainbow landed on her outstretched wings and proceeded to flail her hooves in the air like an overturned turtle.

Lovely.
Just lovely.
:eeyup:

I love it, I absolutely love it. Well written, funny, and an original premise. 10/10, 5 stars, Academy Award for Best Picture, Nobel Prize for Shipping.

Why is this story in the featured box when I have a story I posted recently with the same number of dislikes, but about 40 more likes and 8 more favorites! We have about the same number of views! This is unfair. If you had less followers then I doubt each of your stories would get so popular. You're a great writer, so you deserve it, but your number of followers gives you an advantage.

So did Rainbow like it? :rainbowderp:

:raritywink: Darling, I'm almost sure that there diffidently was a smudge on the page.

Better title would have been Taste the Rainbow Motherfucker, but that's just what I think.

:rainbowkiss:
AppleDash is simply fabulous. :raritystarry:

WOW!!!!!!!!!! :pinkiegasp::pinkiegasp: that was so GOOD!!!!!!!!!

Who else backed away from their computer very slowly,

Before jumping back into the seat and reading?

That opening.
That cheese. So... much... cheese...!
Egad! Cheese based hallucinations!
(Too much! too much! So brilliant... they should've sent a poet)

Ahem. Sorry.
Good story. 'Nuff Said.

OMG that was so FUNNY :rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowwild:

I just- :twilightoops:
I just can't- :rainbowderp:
Oh gosh :rainbowlaugh:

"I mean—Of course you don't! I-I don't either! It's total frickin' Awkward City! And I don't mean that one really wonky music group!"

Hey! Owl City is great stuff! (Unless you meant it in a neutral way, that is.)

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maybe it's cause the author is so damn good

HAHAHAHA, omg, Rarity stahp speaking internet!

You're so deliciously meta, Skirts.

Goddammit.

What is this? Actual Apple-on-Dash action from Skirts on this account? Granted, it's just a kiss, but still, this is fairly momentous. Usually you dance around it a lot more. Makes me more intrigued than ever by the (presumably) more serious fic you've mentioned before.

This one was really, really funny. The style really worked well for a comic book setting, what with the alliteration and the onomatopoeia. And as usual, your gift for dialogue is in full force.

Frankly, I'm surprised there haven't been more fics based on this episode or concept. Or, maybe I've just missed them.

Either way, a nice, entertaining story.

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It's my understanding that a story has to have at least four thousand words in order to make the feature box. Since your last few stories have had just over one thousand, that's probably why. Unless they've changed the rule, in which case I dunno.

3846318 That might be true. I could've sworn I've seen short stories like mine before, but I could be mistaken.

EDIT: That new story "Like a Virgin" has less than 2,000 words and is in the featured box.

so did dash jizz or something

Ah, you beautiful soul, you. It isn't fully reciprocating relationship Appledash, but it is super funny, super hammy, contrived makeout-session Appledash, and that comes in as a very close second.

Thanks for a delightfully silly read - like a few others, I'm honestly surprised this kind of concept hasn't been used more (the amount of shenanigans that can occur in a fantasy comic book setting is pretty endless, really) but you do it justice, so who am I to complain?

So yeah, live long and keep Dashing Apples, or something. Until the next fic!

So if RD's character is a guy, does that mean she is when she's in there?

the musky, rapturous scent of tiny pony tongues locked in tiny pony tango.

:rainbowderp:

When I first heard a "Mouthfull of Zapp" I thought you were talking about eating Zapllesauce :applejackunsure:
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But then I realized you'd have to be insane to eat that. :yay:

The image of a female superhero being physically restrained has never struck a positive chord with me for the oft-mentioned reasoning that it's too sadistic to be honest fun (but mainly because I prefer seeing a dude helplessly dominated by the fairer sex). Here, though, with any possibility of genuine harm befalling the victim removed, I guess Rarity's struggling and :raritycry:ing were...titillating enough to be fun entertainment. :raritywink:

"Oh hush up, ya clowns!" Two-Flanks shook his fist down at them

How did he manage that, I wonder... :trollestia:

"Didn't our Spikey-Wikey teach us that in the first place?"

"He did?" Rainbow blinked.

I find Rainbow's ignorance amusing—to an extent—because in all but two episodes, whenever Rainbow Dash learns something, Spike is either not present to see her learn it, or doesn't get to write it down. Pretty obnoxious trend if you ask me.

Mistress Marevelous swooped Zapp up in her strong arms and kissed him passionately on the lips.

Now that's a superhero yarn I would read! Role reversal for the win, baby. :yay:

"Ehhh heh heh heh..." Rarity sweated.

Just FYI, she's been doing quite a lot of that. Not that it's a bad thing. Seat is healthy for your pores. And sexy.

"None of it makes any sense! Like—just what kind of a mare sweeps up a stallion like that, anyway?"

You shut the hell up, Rainbow.

I don't read much mane six shipping, but I definitely like that you acknowledged how repellant and uncomfortable this would be for two friends of unspecified sexual orientation. At least, you did justice to that line of realism until the actual kiss occurred. Awesome as that paragraph was, it sorta throat-punched Dash and AJ's platonic relationship. Oh, well.

Lastly, your synopsis is awesome. :duck::moustache::rainbowkiss::ajsmug:

That was WAY better than I expected, in all honestly.

It was quite well written, and it just...the ending was priceless.

"Guhhh..." Rainbow Dash's muzzle twisted. "Who wrote this? A room full of lemurs at typewriters?"

:rainbowkiss:

The only gripe I have with this story, the only one, which should show that all in all, I liked it, is your spelling of a particular phrase. "carn sarn it" Now, I'm going to assume you were trying to capture her accent here, as some southern drawls can make it sound like that, but going by how little you emphasized her accent through syntax, I simply feel obliged to point out that the correct spelling is "consarnit" last I checked. :moustache: Nit-picky? Damn right. Silly? Likely. A big deal? By no measure or scale I've yet encountered.

In short, great story, and I'm damn proud of being raised in hick-town. Good job, you.

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