3816152 Thanks for the kind words! I am really quite fond of this chapter. I felt the diary was a unique way to write a story, and I'd never written M/M before.
And hearing that you are straight but you could still see yourself in the protagonist's shoes makes me really pleased with what I wrote and the theme I managed to convey
Twisted writing a story that makes me well up in tears at the end?! What is this world going to?
Ahem.. Really, just...wow. I don't think I've ever fully read any M/M clop stories, I can't even get thru the sex scenes, and yet here I am at the end, wondering where the hell you hid the past 10 minutes of my life Never done M/M, yet you mastered it here.
At first, however, I was wondering why the 'main character' sounded like a whiny twenty-something male pretending to be a little kid, especially when he swears.(And subsequently thought about my internal monologues and decided it wasn't that far off) But as the diary progresses, I think you got the feel for it a little better. Gonna have to vote this best chapter(so far) because of improvement and making me read things I don't like, but making me love them.
One small correction:
So me holding this part of him was enjoyable for of us, I guess.
God, this Chapter is sweet! I love the feel of this. I wish Big Mac and Human Male/Caramel Hooves(?) a happy life together. Heck, it feels more love-based than clop-based, which is actually a very loving break from the standard "let's-all-have-kinky-sex/use-magic-to-fulfill-our-carnal-desires" clop that frequents the Mature Tag.
You, dear author, are fabulously amazing! Keep up the good work!
(Also, this chapter sounds like a short story for Kaiden's FPS series, or at least, the premise kinda feels that way.)
I didn’t feel like telling him to leave after that, so the two of us went to the sofa and just layed down. There was some movie on but I wasn’t really paying attention, I was just running my hands through his mane and we were... cuddling? No, wait, that would be gay. I was just curled up in his big, strong hooves and enjoyed being so close to him. He’s a really good friend.
And then we did butt stuff. We're such good friends who are certainly not gay. No sir-ee. His delicious horse cock certainly entered me in a very non-gay, very straight manner. Eeyup. Definitely.
November 24st Hey Diary , work was hard today. I kept getting distracted by thoughts of what I saw in the shower yesterday. It’s not that I’m turned on or anything, I’m not gay! Err, at least I don’t think I am...
*Casually dangles the other shoe*
It's going to drop at any second now.
So why did it turn me on?
*Dangles shoe more angrily*
DROP DANGIT
My only real distraction was lunch. As always, Big Mac packed a lunch for me, and as always I got stuck with four apples and a head of lettuce. But today was different, I actually ate the entire lunch! Apples never tasted so sweet before, and even the lettuce was amazing . I don’t even understand how I could have ever turned lettuce down before, it’s so perfect! Mmm, I even stopped at the grocery store on the way home and bought an entire cart of greens. It was a good thing I did too, I had to throw out all the meat in my refrigerator when I get home. The power must have gone out or something, it all smelled gross to me for some reason.
Ah, of course. The ponifying power of horse dick.
“Hey, Sweetie Buns, what are you doing?” Big Mac trots over and kisses my neck.
Suddenly, massive writing shift!
I nuzzle him affectionately. “I only need one Apple in my life.”
This one is really well written, and as straight as I am I could see myself in this position...
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Thanks for the kind words!
I am really quite fond of this chapter. I felt the diary was a unique way to write a story, and I'd never written M/M before.
And hearing that you are straight but you could still see yourself in the protagonist's shoes makes me really pleased with what I wrote and the theme I managed to convey
Twisted writing a story that makes me well up in tears at the end?!
What is this world going to?
Ahem..
Really, just...wow. I don't think I've ever fully read any M/M clop stories, I can't even get thru the sex scenes, and yet here I am at the end, wondering where the hell you hid the past 10 minutes of my life
Never done M/M, yet you mastered it here.
At first, however, I was wondering why the 'main character' sounded like a whiny twenty-something male pretending to be a little kid, especially when he swears.(And subsequently thought about my internal monologues and decided it wasn't that far off) But as the diary progresses, I think you got the feel for it a little better. Gonna have to vote this best chapter(so far) because of improvement and making me read things I don't like, but making me love them.
One small correction:
enjoyable for both of us
(clop clop clop clop) sweat celestia! this one was HOT!
God, this Chapter is sweet! I love the feel of this. I wish Big Mac and Human Male/Caramel Hooves(?) a happy life together.
Heck, it feels more love-based than clop-based, which is actually a very loving break from the standard "let's-all-have-kinky-sex/use-magic-to-fulfill-our-carnal-desires" clop that frequents the Mature Tag.
You, dear author, are fabulously amazing! Keep up the good work!
(Also, this chapter sounds like a short story for Kaiden's FPS series, or at least, the premise kinda feels that way.)
3821886 Woah, I didn't even notice that he was turning into the splitting image of Caramel. Nice catch there.
And ditto on the variety of stories here. I applaud the author for his first time writing M/M clop because I think he pulled it off spectacularly.
Really very lovely~
ok I love it now I just wish it was a full story
*deep breath*
Great story
It kind of turned me on. Hell, I probably would have clopped if no one were around. So yeah.
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What this guy said, only I'm starting trying, actually to question my sexuality.
Thanks TS!
Great read! I can't believe I waited 10 months to actually get around to reading it.
Maybe I'm crazy, but this story should totally of had a dark rating of 1, maybe 2.
Cute story
And then we did butt stuff. We're such good friends who are certainly not gay. No sir-ee. His delicious horse cock certainly entered me in a very non-gay, very straight manner. Eeyup. Definitely.
*Casually dangles the other shoe*
It's going to drop at any second now.
*Dangles shoe more angrily*
DROP DANGIT
Ah, of course. The ponifying power of horse dick.
Suddenly, massive writing shift!
Adorable.