I can't remember the last time a jerked myself to anything other than clop anymore, so I guess that loss of memory seals the deal for me, great chapter by the way, very hot. hell Fluttershy's been a bit of a target for me more than the rest of the ponies but I have also been fantasizing about Trixie and Rarity. Damn it, I gotta pick one and go with it, I just don't know which one to go with, I mean Trixie, yeah she's a bit arrogant, but that just makes her so much sexier. Rarity, she's got the looks but she cares to much about fashion and staying clean at all times. Fluttershy, she loves animals, I love animals and I'll be damned if she doesn't have the cutest voice I have ever heard. I just don't know which one to choose.
Gahhh!!! Celestia help me, somepony please help me choose wisely.
Ben looks down at his body, a whole host of feelings going on in there. "Yeah I..." he pauses for a second, his jaw starts to tingle and feel the same way as the rest of his body. His hands slowly close up on themselves, fingers shrinking and his fingernails melding into one another, the same happening to his toes. His bones and joints begin to change, his entire body starts getting smaller and his balance starts to falter as his back bends forward. The fur rapidly spreads across all areas of his body and a pressure emerges from his lower back. John can just stare in pure amazement as he watches his friend’s form twist into something new. Ben’s clothes begin to appear baggy as his friend shrinks into his shirt and pants. Hooves then burst out of his shoes, and out back a brilliant blue tail starts to appear. John practically squeals in excitement as he watches the transformation near its finish. "Dude, Ben you're going to love it! The transformation looks like it’s working PERFECTLY! And wow, are you going to be happy with how you look, Vinyl Scratch is the coolest pony ever!"
I see what you did there, and it is glorious .That reminds me VinelAmror should be an AU ship.
While this is not the darkest thing that I have read, it is the most potent nightmare fuel I have encountered... It isn't dark enough to be too far out there and sits just on the edge of your sub-conscious, taunting your conscious mind. This story has been giving me shivers all day.
John yells the last word of the spell and feels magic settle on him, as it focuses on his loins. A second later he clutches his pants as he feels himself change. His underwear rips and he feels something huge start stuffing itself down one of his pant legs. Something is wrong here, something is very wrong! He wanted a larger cock, but not THIS large. Humans should not have cocks this big!
Thank you! This story hit just about every one of my hot buttons when it comes to both transformation and mind control. I'm so glad I found it, straight to favorites!
Edit: After thinking on it through the morning, I was struck by how much this story reminded me of an older one that I had read over on the Nifty Archive, both in subject and plot, called, coincidentally enough, "Spell-book". So, I hunted it down, from Jan, 2000. Old indeed, internet time. ---I realize that you mentioned something of this at the top, but Freya only expanded upon it, and this 2000 story was originally written by someone else, going only by "D". The original story is the only one I am familiar with, and now that I know of Freya's expansion, I simply must read my way through those as well! It's always been one of my favorites, in large part because of the way that the mind of the 'victim' was pulled along. To be honest, though, yours is better by an order of magnitude. And not just because it has been ponified, though that is almost always an improvement, naturally. You have fleshed out much of the personalities, given a few of the bits and pieces nice little alterations, but the part that I really enjoy was the actual scene after the Control and Transformational aspects really kick in. You kept the parts I loved, and expanded on most of the parts that I had always wanted more of. Yours is light years above the 'original' concept laid out previously, and this one will immediately take it's spot on my favorite go-to stories when I want an awesome TF and MC story.
After thinking on it through the morning, I was struck by how much this story reminded me of an older one that I had read over on the Nifty Archive, both in subject and plot, called, coincidentally enough, "Spell-book". So, I hunted it down, from Jan, 2000. Old indeed, internet time.
That, original story holds a special place in my heart. It was the first transformation fic I came across (and consequently, the first transformation scene I would fantasize about endless times). That story, with all its flaws, was how I realized I had a TF fetish all those many years ago. Now that I find myself writing clop for others to enjoy, I felt it only right to rewrite that story and add ponies and my own scenes. I liked the idea of giving homage to that original fic for taking me down the TF fetish.
To be honest, yours is light years above the 'original' concept laid out previously, and this one will immediately take it's spot on my favorite go-to stories when I want an awesome TF and MC story.
Aww, you humble me greatly, but I can't claim to be the better writer. It's much easier to improve an existing story than to create a new one out of thin air. As I said before, I was 'clopping' to the Spellbooks scenario for a long time. So, over the years, I would add extra little twists or things here and there to keep it fresh. Turns out, those random clop scenarios I think of work out pretty well when turned into a short story. In fact, to be perfectly blunt, this isn't the only story I wrote that is based off a scenario I thought up while clopping.
I wish more people shared their TF clop ideas. I'm quite certain that everyone who's into TF has created their own little TF sexual fantasies (or clopped to the thought of some extra scenes to existing TF stories). Anyway, you should consider taking your favorite one and putting it down in words and add ponies to make a clopfic. Chances are, that if you found it really hot, well then the rest of us in this crazy TF community will find it really hot as well.
3811496 You know in your heart there is only one mare for you, and Nova believes you will make the greatest choice in your power
4193965 Placebo is something else, this was actually Operant conditioning, where you reinforce a behavior that would not normally be in her, like having Ben want to be his mare, the reinforcement is usually something enjoyable or pleasure-ey, the "commands" installed the behavior into her, and the feeling reinforced them naturally, It's a classic tactic used in many MC related stories.
Fluttershy was gently sucking on his flared head when it suddenly started spurting. The first wave of cum catches her by surprise and she almost chokes. She quickly swallows it all, only for another spurt to fill her mouth, and again, and again. The taste of it practically sends her over the edge, and she feels herself squirt even more mare juices around the hoof she has buried between her legs.
So~ If I'm not mistaken all mind altering up to this point stays permanent?
She creases her eyebrows, "You said the transformation spell wore off after we finished making love and it’s permanent now." John nods, so she continues. "Well, I was just, umm, thinking about ‘your neighbor’. How long ago did the mind control aura you had wear off? Shouldn’t that have lasted just as long?" "Mmm, not quite honey. Remember I casted that spell quite a bit earlier than the transformation I did to you, so it ended a while earlier." John tilts his head as he does some mental math. "The mind control aura on the neighbor wore off... about twenty minutes ago? Which would have been about a minute or so after you started blowing me. Like, right before you started deepthroating me, and before I came into your mouth. Yeah, right about there. Why do you ask?"
Ben was free of the mind control but didn't know about it, that + the fact that Ben was somewhat enjoying what was happening made him/her keep doing, well you know that, as if she/he was still under it. At least that what i think happened.
Just realized something that should have happened near the end... with the space of time between Jon using the TF spell the first time, with the Big Mac, ( im gonna assume 3-4 minutes) and ben turning into Vinyl, then Fluttershy, shouldn't Jon's first TF be reverted while at the last part? Was only curious if it were to be mentioned... but still a nice story to go back to...
I love the reveal at the end. The "oh shit, I'm just flocked up, I did that willingly. Welp, let's just go with that!" and the fridge logic that the climax was also after the mind control ended so not only is she apparently cool with being Flutters forever... no permanent commands. At least, if he's not a jerk enough to use it on... her... again. (which honestly, could happen by accident since it's an aura and he might go shoplifting or raping... man this one is just a bit dark for me, but I'll give it a pass because it didn't show anyone intentionally being monstrous.)
Also I have some headcannon (borrowed from another fandom) on why sex makes it permanent: It's simple Thaumatology, the sharp aspect radiation from the orgasm causes the spell to lock. My thinking here is that it's not truly "permanent", but you need an equal Intensity of magic, probably opposite pitch, to unlock it temporarily. Thus, you would have to either fuck someone (or something...) else or kill someone/something while casting (and probably the latter. As I said, opposite pitch) if you want to change anything after it locks.
one tiny plothole in this. And no, I don't mean fluttershy's rear: as long as John doesn't command Ben not to, Ben could just turn himself into another non-female form. He did read the incantation, right?
"Neither of them could even remember the last time they fapped to something other than clop"
Yeah well, neither can I
I can't remember the last time a jerked myself to anything other than clop anymore, so I guess that loss of memory seals the deal for me, great chapter by the way, very hot. hell Fluttershy's been a bit of a target for me more than the rest of the ponies but I have also been fantasizing about Trixie and Rarity. Damn it, I gotta pick one and go with it, I just don't know which one to go with, I mean Trixie, yeah she's a bit arrogant, but that just makes her so much sexier. Rarity, she's got the looks but she cares to much about fashion and staying clean at all times. Fluttershy, she loves animals, I love animals and I'll be damned if she doesn't have the cutest voice I have ever heard. I just don't know which one to choose.
Gahhh!!! Celestia help me, somepony please help me choose wisely.
I love Hyper! Must keep reading! I love it when your favorite fetishes aren't in the tags and they come up unexpected like that.
I see what you did there, and it is glorious .That reminds me VinelAmror should be an AU ship.
You need to add an Anthro tag as well/
If I were Ben, and the time ran out, the next thing touching John's face would be my fist.
Very, very forcefully too...
She's got female hormones, that's why.
While this is not the darkest thing that I have read, it is the most potent nightmare fuel I have encountered... It isn't dark enough to be too far out there and sits just on the edge of your sub-conscious, taunting your conscious mind. This story has been giving me shivers all day.
All my yes and so SO much more!!!!
Also.....Did Ben/Fluttershy just realize he was gay for John i.e. his best friends?
I really liked this, but my brain wouldn't stop imagining John as JonTron, making this kinda weird. Why does my mind hate me?
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My feet would touch his balls.
With full kicking power that is,
[meanwhile in equestria]
"BIg mac! why is your penis so small!?"
"I DONT KNOW!!!"
lol nice hidden link there!
Thank you! This story hit just about every one of my hot buttons when it comes to both transformation and mind control.
I'm so glad I found it, straight to favorites!
Edit: After thinking on it through the morning, I was struck by how much this story reminded me of an older one that I had read over on the Nifty Archive, both in subject and plot, called, coincidentally enough, "Spell-book". So, I hunted it down, from Jan, 2000. Old indeed, internet time.
---I realize that you mentioned something of this at the top, but Freya only expanded upon it, and this 2000 story was originally written by someone else, going only by "D". The original story is the only one I am familiar with, and now that I know of Freya's expansion, I simply must read my way through those as well!
It's always been one of my favorites, in large part because of the way that the mind of the 'victim' was pulled along.
To be honest, though, yours is better by an order of magnitude. And not just because it has been ponified, though that is almost always an improvement, naturally. You have fleshed out much of the personalities, given a few of the bits and pieces nice little alterations, but the part that I really enjoy was the actual scene after the Control and Transformational aspects really kick in. You kept the parts I loved, and expanded on most of the parts that I had always wanted more of.
Yours is light years above the 'original' concept laid out previously, and this one will immediately take it's spot on my favorite go-to stories when I want an awesome TF and MC story.
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That, original story holds a special place in my heart. It was the first transformation fic I came across (and consequently, the first transformation scene I would fantasize about endless times). That story, with all its flaws, was how I realized I had a TF fetish all those many years ago. Now that I find myself writing clop for others to enjoy, I felt it only right to rewrite that story and add ponies and my own scenes. I liked the idea of giving homage to that original fic for taking me down the TF fetish.
Aww, you humble me greatly, but I can't claim to be the better writer. It's much easier to improve an existing story than to create a new one out of thin air. As I said before, I was 'clopping' to the Spellbooks scenario for a long time. So, over the years, I would add extra little twists or things here and there to keep it fresh. Turns out, those random clop scenarios I think of work out pretty well when turned into a short story. In fact, to be perfectly blunt, this isn't the only story I wrote that is based off a scenario I thought up while clopping.
I wish more people shared their TF clop ideas. I'm quite certain that everyone who's into TF has created their own little TF sexual fantasies (or clopped to the thought of some extra scenes to existing TF stories). Anyway, you should consider taking your favorite one and putting it down in words and add ponies to make a clopfic. Chances are, that if you found it really hot, well then the rest of us in this crazy TF community will find it really hot as well.
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You sir, are a genius!
I feel
Placebo effect?
3811496 You know in your heart there is only one mare for you, and Nova believes you will make the greatest choice in your power
4193965 Placebo is something else, this was actually Operant conditioning, where you reinforce a behavior that would not normally be in her, like having Ben want to be his mare, the reinforcement is usually something enjoyable or pleasure-ey, the "commands" installed the behavior into her, and the feeling reinforced them naturally, It's a classic tactic used in many MC related stories.
So~
If I'm not mistaken all mind altering up to this point stays permanent?
Just occurred to me while reading
you should further this story arc including the fact that "Fluttershy" might have been impregnated due to john's actions. I would read that for sure
4425908 Actually it is the opposite:
Ben was free of the mind control but didn't know about it, that + the fact that Ben was somewhat enjoying what was happening made him/her keep doing, well you know that, as if she/he was still under it. At least that what i think happened.
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Could be worse. Your mind could be visualizing Ben as Ben "Yahtzee" Croshaw.
...Oh dear.
.... I had College roommates named Ben and Jon....... XD
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..........................DAMNIT!
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Just be happy you didn't walk into a room to see THIS going on
This story, as AudioBook on Sound Cloud.
Just realized something that should have happened near the end...
with the space of time between Jon using the TF spell the first time, with the Big Mac, ( im gonna assume 3-4 minutes) and ben turning into Vinyl, then Fluttershy, shouldn't Jon's first TF be reverted while at the last part?
Was only curious if it were to be mentioned... but still a nice story to go back to...
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It was mentioned: John orgasmed from Ben/Fluttershy sucking him off, making the Mac cock permanent there.
I'd wanta a whole other story with the same theme as this chapter
Edit 1/31/2019:
I love the reveal at the end. The "oh shit, I'm just flocked up, I did that willingly. Welp, let's just go with that!" and the fridge logic that the climax was also after the mind control ended so not only is she apparently cool with being Flutters forever... no permanent commands. At least, if he's not a jerk enough to use it on... her... again. (which honestly, could happen by accident since it's an aura and he might go shoplifting or raping... man this one is just a bit dark for me, but I'll give it a pass because it didn't show anyone intentionally being monstrous.)
Also I have some headcannon (borrowed from another fandom) on why sex makes it permanent: It's simple Thaumatology, the sharp aspect radiation from the orgasm causes the spell to lock. My thinking here is that it's not truly "permanent", but you need an equal Intensity of magic, probably opposite pitch, to unlock it temporarily. Thus, you would have to either fuck someone (or something...) else or kill someone/something while casting (and probably the latter. As I said, opposite pitch) if you want to change anything after it locks.
one tiny plothole in this. And no, I don't mean fluttershy's rear: as long as John doesn't command Ben not to, Ben could just turn himself into another non-female form. He did read the incantation, right?
I kinda wanna interview this guy, I wanna also know who helped him with this chapter