After years on the trail of a legendary Eldwurm, the skilled dragon-slayer found himself facing a disappointing foe: the dreaded Slyrak had grown ancient and frail, its wings tattered, its few remaining scales stricken with scale-rot, its fangs ground to nubs, and its fire-gouts no more threatening than a pack of wet matchsticks. Seeing no honor to be gained in dragon-murder, the young knight prepared to turn away and leave his old foe to die in peace. But a voice crept into his thoughts, and Slyrak gave a whispered plea that the knight might honor him with death in combat. The knight agreed, and found himself rewarded beyond expectation for his act of mercy: As he sank his blade in Slyrak's breast, the dragon sank a claw into his throat. As their blood mingled, Slyrak sent his power out along the Blood Route, offering all its strength and centuries of wisdom to the knight. The dragon's death sealed their bond, and Dragon Knight was born. The ancient power slumbers in the knight, waking when he calls it; or perhaps it is the Dragon that calls the Knight....
But after several years of fighting the dire Davion is transported to equestria to face one finale trial. Finding strength in friendship
.... idea is epic the flow story thoe is very, very , very rushed slow the fuck down bro
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Alright thanks for the advice
Be careful here, you're entering the uncharted waters of the DOTA fanbase with what I think is the first ever cross between the two. Not a bad idea, DK being in Equestria isn't a bad idea but the reason he is there is kinds shady. How about, instead of just looking for a friend, KOTL (his name is Ezalor) uses his powers as one of the fundamentals to send him there to defend it from Chaos Knight. That way he has a purpose which gives him a reason which seems a little more solid. Apart from the reason for Davion being there, m only recommendation is keep the pace of the story at a reasonable speed. There's no rush to get him to Equestria right away, maybe talk about the last hero he fought, or maybe use it to develop some more plot for your story. A rushed story is like telling the punchline to a joke right away, it takes away from however good it might actually be.
http://www.fimfiction.net/story/68788/what-does-a-hero-truly-need-vol-1-a-new-age-of-heroes
sir I think you weren't the first to do a dota crossover
True that there are a very FEW number of Dota 2 crossovers but this is not the first. (I myself been juggling the idea on making one or not...)
Furthermore I think that you should find yourself a pre-reader as the story has few descriptions, a bit of grammar errors here and there and seems a little fast paced to me.
Other then that I love it, can't wait for the next chapter! :D
so what kind of dragons you going for? skyrim, fairy tale,ect... or only my little pony?
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Mlp mostly. Youll find out why in a later chapter
Just thought I'd put this here.
Personaly I don't like DOTA, didn't even know it was a DOTA crossover untill I saw the comments, still gonna give the story a shot.
I asume you meant spears and not speaks right?
Poor pacing, spelling/capitalisation errors you'd see from an elementary student, copy and paste plot, clunky dialogue, and poorly written "action".
You, madam, have convinced me to never play this series. Overall, 2/8.