It was almost a century ago that the great kingdom of Equestria was founded. The brave leaders of the unicorns, pegasi, and earth ponies finally learned to forgo their differences and live in harmony. Starswirl the Bearded has come to the newly-formed land to choose his new apprentice: An earth pony named Astelle. Astelle grew too fond of Starswirl during the time they had together, and ultimately refuses to perform the magical task he wishes her to complete. Astelle vanishes, and in her absense Starswirl has trained a young Celestia in her place. Now Celestia, Luna, and the Mane 6 have to face off against a scorned pony who re-appears in Equestria with an agenda of her own.
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pretty good but you should space out the paragraphs with a blank and maybe each section with a line eg.
Starswirl the Bearded was a legend. He held more magic than any pony could conceive. He was immortal, spending his days training those worthy in the ways of magic. But the more decades he lived, the less he was seen by ponies. After some time had passed, he had made it a habit only to show himself to other ponies when he trained a new apprentice. Every hundred years Starswirl would appear and select a pony with great magical potential. This apprentice would study with him until such a time that he deemed them ready and disappeared again leaving the task of magical leadership to his prodigy. The magical leaders he trained became legends themselves with their magical contributions to pony kind. Clover the Clever was no different; she had left her mark by bringing the ponies together and igniting the first fire of friendship that had saved every pony’s lives.
It had been exactly one hundred years since Starswirl’s last appearance, and it was time for him to select a new apprentice. Clover the Clever had been a magical leader for ninety nine years and had reached an old age where she could not fulfill her duties anymore. In the past, only a unicorn was selected as an apprentice, but now that Equestria had been formed, Clover the Clever had decreed that any pony may audition for the coveted role. On the longest day of the year, Starswirl would make his appearance, and more importantly, his selection.
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On the outskirts of Canterlot city, a quiet settlement of earth ponies greeted the dawn prepared to work the fields. A young pony with a coat as dark as night and a mane as bright as the sun was curled on her straw bed pouring over one of Clover the Clever’s volumes in fascination.
Also the dialogue is a bit confusing
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Thank you I certainly do that :)
i hear family trees on the horizon so is she realated to twilight cadanece or the sisters?
only time will tell.
Jesus Christ, I'm late ._. But I really want to continue reading this story, so can't you please continue it? *puppy eyes*
Will you ever return to this story? I recently reread Princess Trixie Sparkle and would love to see more about Astelle and her past!