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Button has to go back to the troubles of teenage life, which includes patching things up at home, keeping his friends....and trying to make things less awkward between him and his X-Marefriend Sweetie belle in this dark,cheerful and even comedic insightful take on a Colts high school life and general experiences.
This is told through the perspective of a bitter teenage gamer trying to survive in high school and keep control with the crumbling world around him.
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Fuck yeah it's button mash!
i cant wait for more
Im currently half way through part 2.
well I'll just read this and then like and fav
I know the feels button bro, #gamer4life
Ooooh shiny
I like, I demand MOAR
if that is okay with you
if your ok with the darker tone then Ill start work on Pt3.
More plz
You want a proofreader? No, no, it's no problem. Button Belle fics are really rare, and I'd like to see this flourish. Even though the grammar, formatting and etc. is shit, I think it's okay...
No just kidding, I haven't read it that far because the first paragraph was so bad, but I'd like to try to edit it to make it seem okay.
No asshole-iness intended.
ummm..........k
Honestly I like this story and definetly look forward to hopefully many updates.
You are very good at describing past events in other ponies lives,such as snip's,which help your story grow.You have to watch out with this though because small bits in someone's life in a previous chapter,could be forgotten in the next chapter.
Detail wise you're average.You use some details and describing words every now and then but try to spice up your vocabulary.
Your pacing and story telling is ,in my oppinion,the aspect that needs the most improvement.To avoid long drawn out conversations you use ^^^ to mark that your skipping forward in time.Now while this is fine,you use it a bit to much.Try to find ways in the natural envirment of the story to do that for you.Such as on the coach one of Rumble's other friends could of been a dick and cut into the conversation before he could answer.
Overall I rate this story 3.5/5 Spike-Staches
thanks for the advice jblade, Ive used a proof-reader and editer to help fix up chapter one, but your definitely right abount the heavy use of skipping, its a problem Ive had for a while when writing, its hard for me to come up with a segway to blend one scene into another, I I will and am trying to work on it. thank you for the advice.
I'm really impressed with this story. It has a good story line with awesome characters. I really hope you update soon, I really wanna know what happens!
I'm slowly getting through part 3 but I'm really thinking about making better structures to the way I write conversations as well as thinking up believable segways between scenes, I know it wont come out smelling like daisies but If it means I can get a better story to you than Ill be happy.
I love this story! Should be more like this. Keep up the good work man
part 3 should be done anytime this week now :).
wow dude, a bit harsh... but I am interested to see where this goes
It is a really nice story with a lot of plot twists, and that's what I like about it.
well i read this while listening to depressing music...... i regret nothing
more sweetie sub plot?
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Like what?, what would you like to understand about SweetieBelle?
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no, the other plot.... hmmm maybe they get invited to a party and have a one night stand..
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I doubt that's going to happen anytime soon...but...stranger things have happened?.
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Anything can happen after all
Plz finish story...much grateful if do
kk, Ill get back on it :)
And than he dies!!!
how unoriginal.
4181598 ..And than his vital bodily systems are damaged beyond repair of his own doing and his soul is sucked into the darkest abyss of the tartus.
(Actually a great story. Still reading)
you don't need to apologize for taking so long if its for a reason like that i'm just glad your still going. also tell your mother I wish her a speedy recovery
Sorry to hear about your mum dude, wishing her a speedy recovery.
Nice chapter and I'm just gunna say it button dude you got yourself stuck between a rock and hard place, let's hope scarlet looses interest and sweetie gets jealous and tries to get you back haha
Hope yor mom okay
Love it
fedoras are amazing how dare you mock them.
so is like sweetie going to second thoughts about button oh please let that be whats going to happen
4364118 i have the feeling that that's whats going to happen as well, because jealousy. cant wait for the next chapter
lovers bonus: +10 charm for 24 hours, -5 resist for 48 hours
interesting little story, I wonder how sweetie will react though.
Hmm, this is getting interesting. But, my readers instinct tells me, if you pardon my french, "the shit is gonna hit the fan" very soon and very badly
Plz write more. This is a terrible place to stop
AWESOME STORY!
Seriously though, awesome story. Glad for the update as I personally love anything with Button in it. Please keep writing!
I'm working on Pt7 though it seems it'll be shorter than 6, there a huge twist in it with something that seemed insignificant.
Haha, Skyfall spotted !
Anyway, i like your style and the plot so far, so let's like + fav !
damnit.... I wanted the boss fight already... also call in the backup....
don't worry, Im half-way through 8, should be here in the next 2 weeks :).
very interesting cant wait for the next chapter
4812645 thanks man
Boss fight please! Also, I seriously love this story. So well written, it reminds me of my own.
4921677 hold on to your butt... because the next one get really serious.
A few spelling errors but I still loved the chapter can't wait for another one. And I'm with you button PRAISE THE SUN!