Megatron orders Shockwave to clone Dreadwing to replace Starscream. After Starscream's death, Dreadwing informs Megatron of a new source of energon, he discovered before his death, noting the earths supply is almost exhausted. Ordering Soundwave to lock the space bridge onto the coordinates provided by Dreadwing in hopes of finding a new supply off world.
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Okay hopefully this is the last time I change my mind. I'm going to resume the story, but I'm not going to bother editing the first three chapters, or if I do it'll be later.
Chapters (3)
Just for the heck of it, I'll fav and see where this goes... Though, won't the Autobots become suspicious if the Cons are gone for too long.
Especially Optimus Prime. He knows Megatron all too well for Megatron to hide anything from the eyes of the Last Prime.
Then again, you tagged it as Alternate Universe, so I won't question it any further.
Well I suppose the autobots would get suspicious, but it really wouldn't matter since they can't reach, nor control the Space Bridge, and they don't have one either.
All they can really do is take advantage of his absence and try to find the predacon cloning facility. However I'm not going to mention anything like that in my story. Put simply, this is a Decepticons VS Ponies story.
I like so far
There was quite a few errors, but I'm too lazy to look through.
It was a rather interesting development.
But good job. Keep trying and you'll come out on top.
4013353 I have a feeling most people feel the way you do,
but rest assured the ponies will come out on top by stories end,
4013349 Great. I work hard on this and there are "quite a few errors"
I wouldn't be surprised if the Decepticons had to deal with a certain draconequus.
4013393 Uh No
If you read the description, you'd have noticed this:
and discord isn't freed and reformed until episode 10.
Nice guess though, I think the Cons would be toast (literally knowing discord) if I had decided to include him though.
4013483 I meant the chaos from all the destruction could overwhelm the Elements of Harmony and cause Discord to Break out.
Good story so far.
Also there are a lot of repeat words thought I let you know.
4013550 you know you readers have an annoying habit of pointing out stuff that I would not have noticed.
Thanks to you I'll now be considering whether or not to include him!
4013559 Well thanks for pointing that out, I'll try to avoid doing that in future chapters.
4013550 Considering all it took was for 3 small bickering ponies to create enough chaos for him to overcome the Elements last time, I'm sure this should be enough, but we'll see.
Well, now we have to wait 50 years for Celestia to get back and kick ass! YEAAAAAHHHHHH!!!
4018098 In 50 years the decepticons will have removed all the energon from Equestria, and probably the ponies would be extinct, IF I allow the cons to win. I'd be a terrible writer if I allowed the bad guys to win in the end!
A sentence fragment in the description, and you don't know how to spell "prologue". This does not bode well.
Yeah, this really doesn't bode well...
Bad punctuation, sloppy capitalization, mixing of verb tenses, and just plain bad storytelling. And by bad storytelling, I mean too much telling instead of showing, too much of just outright stating what something "means", and at one point you even contradict yourself.
4044890 Noted, thanks for pointing this out, I'm not that skilled of a writer and this is my first fic, also I was thinking on using nyx, but decided against it, thanks for pointing that out I'll remove that asap.
4044890 Also you try describing ponies compared to horses.
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Pffft,
The bad guys always win, they just fool the good guys into thinking that they've lost. How else do you explain the supervillains always coming back (alright, apart from Hollywood needing another sequel).
Evil is fun to write, plus it allows you to expand on their motives and drives.
Also evil tends to have all of the cool stuff, like lasers.
4045135 True, but given how many people like the characters in mlp, and given how many transformers haters there are on this site, I kinda have to make the ponies win or else this story won't just go down in smoke, it goes down in molten lava!
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Eh, people seem to be fine with evil as long as you don't kill any significant main characters. Then again, some people did complain when I had Cadence put in the stocks and pelted with rotton produce so I guess I can see your point.
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Well, I wouldn't do so by saying they were both smaller and larger than horses. They're either one or the other, but not both.
Good to know, when you can think of a better way of putting it let me know. Until then or you can actually think of something more useful to say, buzz off. I don't normally react to comments this way, but it really ticks me off when they're not useful in the least.
4045562 well the only way I can make the cons win without going OOC is to have megs kill the mane 6, and seeing how people complained about produce being thrown at cadence, I don't see that going over well with the readers. Still it's gonna be tough beating the cons when the princess couldn't.
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You want useful? Don't describe things in simultaneous OPPOSITES.
"They were like life forms on Earth, except they were both smaller and larger." (Sound familiar? It was essentially what you wrote.) They were heavier, yet also lighter! They were taller, but shorter at the same time! Their bright, colorful coats were dull and dark! These strong creatures were quite weak!
Are you getting it yet, or do you need more examples?
If you're still confused, I'll be happy to provide dictionary definitions of "small" and "large".
What is this, I don't even.
Mate, wow the dialogue is so freaking forced, if a person were to read this, they would be talking all monotone
there's no flow to the story, it literally is just oh there are floaty things in the air! and now they attacked us!
well this story has a lot of dislikes
Whoa, whoa, calm down people.
Megatrron, Elric has a point. You can't use small and large at the same time. They are opposites. I strongly suggest you try and correct that if you are to succeed.
Tip:
When your universe differs from canon, summarize so in the story via exposition or flashback, or explain it in the Author's Notes. But not in the actual summary.
Just for future reference.
So far so good. I love it
4013353 You do not know what you had brought upon your self. You will (in time) bowdown to the Decepticon and hail Lord Megatron as our master.
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Well. Was I asking you? But never mind.
Lord Megatron, even though I'm a prime I am here to give you a fare warning, the life forms your about to attack control powers stronger than you, powers like a prime.
4327459 Please, if what I faced was all the power they had, then this will be too easy.
That maybe so Megatron, you may believe it's easy,but soon you will fail and fall to the powers of Eqeustria as you once did before on earth.
4327545 the leader of this world fell with ease by my dark starsaber, I doubt anything here can stop me.
The balance power may have shifted, but it can be regained. In the future, twilight and allied powers will join forces and they will again gain control of this world. No matter how powerful you think you are, you will fail.
4327687 From our week of observation, the 2 rulers were the only beings powerful enough to stop me, and soundwave has not seen any weapon or artifact that can stand against my DSS.
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I just reread my story and this was my reaction when I reread the first chapter:
So I can see this story can use a lot of work. I will admit I was feeling rushed since a friend of mine was producing more chapters for their story than I was. I won't make that mistake again.
4327800 You are a good man
Just try your best to improve
4330167 Any ideas how to improve "floaty things in the air"? Having trouble making it sound more like...well....Celestia I guess.
With aldo respect Lord Megatron, I want to go over a check on your story.How is deredwing alive and the insectacon, how did they get off that moon by Cybertron with arackned?
4330231 quit simple, I'm from an alternate universe. A rare cosmic event happened that allowed me to see slightly into the future. When I discovered what was going to happen I quickly ordered Shockwave to clone Dreadwing. After that, I allowed Dreadwing to kill and replace Starscream, thus avoiding Arachnids release, and creating an alternate universe.
4330221 Make her seem utterly shocked, like for the first time she doesn't know how to solve this problem. She's scared and she's panicking, and she's making irrational judgments and orders
4332697 are we talking about the same princess? you pretty much described what twilight would do, not Celestia.
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Fine, I see you want to make it less exciting.
Just have her tell the guards to stop the floaty bastards
4335599 No I'm just trying to stay in character with Celestia. Have you ever seen here do anything close to what you're suggesting?