• Member Since 26th Oct, 2013
  • offline last seen Jan 8th, 2017

Caffeine Junkie


Me in a nutshell: 90% caffeine 10% crazy, DEAL WITH IT !

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After losing the Alicorn Amulet Trixie decided to aquire a new artefact. No longer blinded by vengeance she only wants power to turn her life for the better. However, destiny seems to have other plans for Trixie and decides to let her walk a small path between good and evil. As her past slowly catches up to her she has to decide what she wants to do with her life...

Chapters (3)
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Comments ( 8 )

This story have my attention~ :trixieshiftright:
Nice work!

Hmm, off to an interesting start. Trixie's being fairly cunning, if not very repentant after all. Will she avoid her old mistakes, only to make new ones? Trixie's past as a member of a disenfranchised noble family in service to Luna is a nice touch, too.

A few errors I spotted:

Twilight Sparkle singlehoofedly managed to destroy Trixie’s life. In the blink of an eye respect turned to laughter and my pride into shame. All of a sudden even my admirers turned on me, those hyenas. Trixie swore revenge on the name of Lulamoon and set out to get it. The rest of the story Trixie would rather not remember…

For one, it switches from third person to first suddenly. For the second, she probably swore revenge on the name of Sparkle, not herself.

Keep up the good work!

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Thanks for taking interest in the story and pointing out the errors.
I fixed them a few minutes ago.

I enjoyed reading your story! In fact, I featured it in a blog post of mine. It's not much, but I hope it'll get you a couple of extra views. Keep up the good work! :trixieshiftleft:

I won't down vote this, because it's written very well. It's just not my cup o' tea.:applejackunsure:

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I know where you are coming from and I'm happy that there are people like you out there. Just because we personally don't like certain things it doesn't have to mean they are bad. Everyone has their own kind of taste and in the end it is exactly that kind of individuality which makes us truly human. So thanks for the comment and keep up that gentle spirit of yours.

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