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Free from the yoke of her former boss, and freshly done with her work in he Brideway theater prop department, Coco Pommel launched her own carrier in the world of fashion. But sadly it would be short lived and end in disgrace Now the young mare has left the city to find a mare with the experience and knowledge to teacher her and help her clear her name. and the Generosity to be willing to take her in as an apprentice.
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I like the premise of this fic, I really do, however, it is in some serious need of editing and tense work. Unfortunately, I'm on my phone at the moment which limits my ability to comment further, but I can provide some examples/advice later if you're interested.
Still going to favorite it so I can see where it goes.
I agree with Shadow_Wolf. There are quite a few glaring issues that you could fix with the help of an editor. Here is a great group to join. Follow their instructions to find an editor you can get to know and you'll be surprised at how helpful they can be.
As Shadow-Wolf and Cryosite have pointed out this fic needs an editor, badly.
You have an intresting concept and premise, and it would be a shame to see it suffer because of grammar/puncutation issues.
I like the idea of the story and come one Coco is just so cute
how can one not make a fanfic of her. That being said, I have to agree with the other posters here. Some editing is needed here. Either then that, I don't have any complaints.
I do work with a proof reader.
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It's not even so much proof-reading, it's editing in general and some tweaking here and there for flow (granted that's mostly subjective on my part and I realize that as I state in a lot of my blog posts), but again, the premise is good and I want to see where this goes.
Regardless of what goes on, I wish you the best of luck!
So Coco said she got her designs from Suri and no one asked for Suri's side of the story? They just assumed Coco confessed to plagerism? Honestly how stupid are they? You would think that the fashion industry would not be one to make such assumpations. But I'm guessing Suri "convinced" the fashion board to look the other way during her dishonest practices.
3867116 it was implied by the maritime that Suri had already stated he case. Remember were it said Suri claimed Coco stole them? There's also another reason for the questionable judgement but I'll get to that later.
yay new chapter!
your doing good so keep it up! cant wait for the next chapters!
I'm liking where this is going
Hey guys sorry for the absence. February is the month of my birthday so took a bit of a vacation. Then early this month Nightshade my proofreader and friend told me he was leaving the site so I've been hesitant to continue. However my cowardice isn't fare to you my fans so I will continue wrighting, updates will be quicker however there may be a slight decrease in spelling and punctuation. It's not easy being a Wright er with dysgraphia. Anyway Thank you for your patience.
It is war.