WARNING: THIS STORY IS DANGEROUSLY SUGARCOATED. PROCEED AT YOUR OWN RISK.
Anthea is blind. Turquoise Blitz is half-dragon, half-pony. Naturally, the two are drawn to each other, though the fact that their mothers are also best friends may have played a helping hoof as well. With most of their lives spent together, either with the rest of their group of friends or on their own, it makes sense that they would fall in love. With Turquoise's quiet personality and Anthea's unfortunate condition, it makes even more sense that nothing would happen for a long time, despite practically everypony in town believing them to already be a couple.
Then, one long time later, the two decided to stay out late and go stargazing.
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Inspired by the cover art you see above and the wonderful world created by Ms. kilala97. Characters and artwork used belong to her, obviously. For more on them and their world, check out her account!
Dedicated to LuminoZero.
Oh, geez, I really want to just fave and like this just for the characters alone. Gotta read it first though...
Short, simple and sweet. Nothing really here except some fluff, but that isn't a bad thing. Sometimes all you want is some nice, well characterized, well written fluff.
I'll let someone else point out all the syntax errors people on this site love to harp on, because I didn't notice them. I notice things that pull me out of the story, and I saw none of them here. It wasn't anything ground breaking, but that wasn't what you tried to do. You made a simple and clean story, and it really showed.
It was a very nice work. Don't put me on such a pedestal, you've got the talent to give me more than a run for my money if you choose to.
And you know what? I'll give you something else for this little gem.
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Wear it with pride;
-Lumino
Well.......PLAY THAT ROMANCE MUSIC:
Can you do this again? I really liked it.
Like, fav man I loved it
That was beautiful :'D Loved every second of this! Thank you so much for writing it
Argh too much sugar !!!!!
This is undoubtedly one of my favorite little bites of sweetness now. An "awww"-inducing, short piece that I will without question read again in the near future. I found it to be well-written and lacking anything that clashed with the story's flow, which made the read all the more satisfying for its fluffiness.
* reads the story * like a pony! * explodes from delight * like a pony! * now i'm ded * like a pony!
Augh, feelsplosion!
Can I just say how absolutely adorable this was? I'm serious, I honestly feel bad that this doesn't have more views or votes. It was a sweet, innocent tale about loving unconditionally that just warmed my heart. The setting was lovely, the characters were believable, and the story flowed smoothly. I'd really enjoy another look into the lives of Anthea and Turquoise, but I understand if you want to leave it as is.
In either case, I hope you have a great day!
I feel really bad because I don't get feels.
Otherwise, despite me not being driven to tears of adorableness or anything, that was a great one-shot. Like Zaphod said
, it really is true. You are pulled in, and then you leave wanting more. I can't believe this was sitting in your unused story box-thingy (pardon my use of...whatever that was
) Loved the story, and I wish you would continue it. You have the talent for making romance like this readable, and at that, enjoyable. Please do continue what you are doing!
With Great Respect,
-Anonymous Hornet
Found this by random mis-click, and decided to check it out. This is in no way a bad story, but neither is it my cup of tea. It might just be the style of writing, but I felt kinda unfulfilled. Maybe it's just because with how short it is, it feels unresolved. That might be remedied with a slice of life tag, since the story has that sort of feel.
My biggest complaint is one of the parenthetical statements.
It feels less like you are showing than you are telling in this instance. It kinda feels like you don't trust the audience to make the leap from Anthea to Annie on their own.
That's all.
Your random neighborhood stranger,
Seven.
Another awesome addition to the kilala fic club. Loved it!
This was cute. I hope you visit this pair again
What a pleasant read.
Very glad I found this gem, indeed.
I'd add it to the Library, but, heh, Lumino beat me to it.
Who wants to bet on RealityCheck bitching about the blind character?
~Skeeter The Lurker
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Yup....that gave me diabetes...well done!
More please!
so cute!
That was really sweet. Best of luck in your future stories.
*manly squee*
Sooooooooo sweeeeeeeeeeet!
Just the thing for a cold snowy day. The baby dragons loved it, even my big macho boys.
*rolling around on the floor laughing and squealing at the adorableness*
THIS IS THE CUTEST THING IN THE HISTORY OF CUTE THINGS
This is terribly sweet and beautifully written. I love it!
Very sweet, utterly adorable.
One of them is blind. They decide to go stargazing.
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Ok, now I just HAVE to read it.
Awww. That was cute.
''Under the stars''
you remember me about lion king
Now I have to read the originals.
so beautiful and the way you describe Annie´s blindess is really something,makes everything more adorable
Cute, but far too short.
Turquoise was her favorite blur. awwwwwww
lol
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I don't normally read Next Gen stories, mostly because there are so many, but hot damn, this was good. Keep it up~!
So sweet!
Just a thing, nothing against your story, but if she could see blurs, couldn't she get corrective lenses? they may also be very expensive, but why hasn't that been brought to her attention in any way it seems like?