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Wow. She really is nice... She's like a red Rarity! 8D
YEAH! Nopony should be alone like that unless they WANT to be alone...
(Will be skipping the clop in the next chapter, if I can.)
3766815 No.. This IS gud, not gon b gud. Trying reading and then commenting.
Very nice overall, though since I skipped most of the chapter due to clop, I have no clue how that was handled, but everything else was great, so I assume it was pretty good.
I love this!
hell yea it is! this is awesome
interesting choice my friend.
Best way to start my day off!
That that touched my feels. So sad.
I hope a sequel is planned.
in my opinion clop is better when there is a story.
“But I’m not anything special,” she whispers sadly. “Just a lonely farm mare. There’s no shortage of them.”I am reading this while listening to my Journey play list... the Open Arms opening just started when I read this line. It is actually a fitting song for this fic if you think about it.
This is great!
Though, I wish there had been more emphasis on the romance.
very well written, though i would wish for it to be longer! i loved the relation ship the two characters shared, it was brilliant!
Do you have plans to continue that story?
Great story. Deserves a sequel. But still waiting for the next chapter of TMM. Hope we won't have to wait that much longer for it.
It's stories like these that make me glad i have an imagination!
Not that i would usualy read this kinda thing, and all, though...
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I agree with this.
I'm loving this build up !! You are good at that =)
I leave feedback and and I love your stories !!!
That was excellent !! Well done !
I normally don't read stories like this, but this was well done, I plan on putting you on my watched/follow list
Take care and enjoy the rest of your day
This story, as always, didn't disappoint me. Well done!
I'm sorry, but... This nonclop part just feels... Meh. The dialogue seems dull, and quite frankly, the main character is a bit of a doofus and blows things out of proportion. He wakes up, sees someone he knows walking at night, and just immediately assumes she must be getting attacked?
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How could this masterpiece get five downvotes?
Such masterpiece.
Finally somepony dose a clop with ms jubilee, I always thought that it was uncharted territory
I'll read tonight, cant wait
The people downvoting this story are complete and utter scrublords.
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Pretty much what I have to say about this story:
3767282 I second this. More romantic moments like this one!
Hey I liked it, nice work! The one thing I've found that I love about this story and TMM is your post-sex scenes. The connections there (emotional, not physical =P) are pretty damn well done in my opinion. I think I practically prefer those to the sex at this point!
Anyhow, onwards! I have faith that you will deliver to us whenever you feel your work is ready!
little fast in the relationship build up but i can deal with it, nicely done my friend
3766815 Dear god, I haven't seen that gif in forever.
I was just about to read the next chapter when I saw
It made me laugh so I decided I would actually leave some.
I personally like the way you write; Your descriptions of the surroundings are short and concise, and I like how you show what the character is thinking through little conversations with himself.
The setting was described rather well and I like the character's attitude towards it
The little bits of humor you sprinkle around such as that, I at least find enjoyable.
Ms. Jubilee's character I did not find any problems with and was done well.
The character that is supposed to be the reader was too enthusiastic or tried to be too helpful that it was a bit unrealistic in a few places I felt.
This kind of came out of nowhere.
Also the dialogue was a bit dull as Dances With Hobos has said.
Other than the over enthusiasm of ...me since this is second person? and the dullness of some of the conversations I haven't found any problems with the story so far and have been enjoying it.
WOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!! BEST STORY EVER~~~~~
Cherry!
Ms. Jubil!
*Swoons*
Cherry Jubilee is my favorite non-mane 6 pony.
10/10 would clop again. But on a serious the story was amazing woth a cute ending to boot.
i know you've got your hands full with ICH and TMM but if you ever feel like expanding on a slice of life romance this would be a great one to do. Maybe it's because i've always like Cherry Jubilee for some reason but seeing a longer version of this story would be cool. Not to say I didn't enjoy this by any means, it's always nice to see Cherry Jubilee get some lovin'
...coulda sworn I had my pants on.
Hm.
WOW, there is so much telling vs. showing going on.
This feels more like an instruction manual than an immersive experience.
The world itself is confusing. I can't tell if I'm supposed to be a human or a pony, what relevance the "human world" has, etc. It feels very jumbled and discordant.
Rather nice. Not a fan of clop, but this was actually tender as opposed to straight sex. I like it.
As for the rest of the story, seemed to be a little quick between meeting and getting down to it (but that's just me), but the pacing was nice and it didn't feel too fast or slow at any point.
I have no feedback to give you!!!!
3769677 I didn't know you liked ponies, Michael.
love a clop with some backstory to it! amazing!
Do I tell him this story is great and I'd like to see a sequel?
NO! That will take attention away from TMM! and then we'll never see ether story update again!
Maybe he can do both?
Lies! Authors can't do both! They never do both! End this foolishness before you destroy both storys.
.......-sigh- I thought this story was awesome and I'd love to see a squeal.
YOU FOOL! YOU'VE DOOMED US ALL TO AN ETERNITY OF WAITING FOR AN UPDATE THAT WILL NEVER COME!
DIE TRAITOR!!!
AAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHH MAKE IT STOP!
NEVER! SUFFER FOR YOUR HERESY!!!
unf!/10 would read again
[yes intensifies]
Oh... her character makes me wish to put her in a story... I shall!
I mean no offense or anything but I must agree with Winter Storm, I feel like I just read a romance novel for a retard! Its well written and all but there just to much explaining in some parts and none in others.
I still love the story though, 4/5.