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Inferno demon Dash


Showing you the darker, more realistic side of MLP in my writing. Smoking, swearing and being a bastard, but that's nothing new with me. Got a cigarette?

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Immortality comes at a very dark and somber price, one that Twilight never realized until it was too late. But though she’s faced with a dark truth, she knows for a fact that her best friend, her dragon, her Spike will never leave her side, until his dying breath.

As the two reminisce about the past that brought them together they learn of a truly dark and hidden secret about Equestria’s history they wished they never heard.

Written for my author friend, Ekhidna and edited by the amazing author, Beirirangu thank you both for being such awesome people.

Cover Art created by The Dark Knight this man knows how to draw, thank you.

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Comments ( 23 )

that was awesome :moustache:
am i the only one rooting for Spike to kicked Deaths arse, find and kill 'Mother' and take her place as top dog so he can be with Twilight forever and start a family? :unsuresweetie:
no? just me? :pinkiecrazy:

3764475 :rainbowlaugh: Thank you that means a lot, really.


3764660 I would be to, but if you kill either one you basically erase all of creation, well up until Fate herself at least, she can start over in Death's case but for Creation it would mean everything in Creation and their entire universe would be destroyed so if a God can't do such, a mortal is nothing more than an ant to them :rainbowlaugh::facehoof:

This was a metatextual story, full of lore, gods, and Fucked up laws,
But in the realm of Equestria, this is to be the ACTUAL norm, and I love it,
Plus, you get extra points for the Spilight Shipping,
12/10
Awestactic gob there mate!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
:pinkiesmile::pinkiesmile::pinkiesmile:
:twilightsheepish::twilightsheepish:
:heart::heart::heart::heart::heart:

3765867 I'm seriously honored my friend:yay:

I gotta admit it got really dark with the deaths. I liked it though. :pinkiecrazy:

3767157 Thank you my friend and yeah, dark is my natural element:rainbowlaugh:

So dark with so many deaths. I like it.

Yes, you have certainly gotten better, but to be honest, I still like this story's plot. However, it's not the vocabulary I'm concerned with, it's the pacing and flow. It's hard to read when you jump from one event to another. Also,some events seem to happen without reason; like Celestia and Discord's union. It would be better if they were explained. Also, I've noticed you have a fixation with facing death. I'm not saying it's bad, but perhaps a little more variety would be good.
Despite that, I really liked this story. I think it has a very interesting plot, but it could have been presented better. And I do like the idea of Twilight facing the despair of being immortal. Not many stories are willing to go there... Go there and include the fact that Spike will still live with her, after all this. Anyways, I'm glad to see a new TwiSpike, and hope to see more. :twilightsmile:

Why is death such a prominent theme in your story? Fate, understandable, gods, demons, mortals all good. But death. You make morality... seem frail. like a gust if wind and someone is gone. That could not be further from the truth. Sure in the moment human lives seem easy to extinguish but as a guy that's had his life threatened more times that he can count, in accidents more often than a rugby player, and had overall scorn from many people my whole life you make it so simple.
She hung herself in desperation, she killed in anger, she died doing what she loved, he died doing his duty. Don't get me wrong I have heard, seen, and failed to stop more people from dying than I care to admit. But I never felt sad from there passing, sure I cried, but I never cursed the world as much as these characters do.
I guess I just want to understand.

Dark but I expect that from you Inferno........ Wonderful that you made another SpiLight but I wonder when will you add Flash Sentry to the mix...
Anyhow when you said Shining Guy died with the diamond dogs this is what came to my mind....
i.imgur.com/IVAYZN9.gif

Fantastic, simply amazing.

But I want that Hammer of Souls, and I will get it:pinkiecrazy:

Comment posted by BetaHammer deleted Jan 12th, 2014

3814865 Matter of option, for me personally and in my own option I see all Alicorns as immortals, Gods if you will:rainbowlaugh:

3814980 oh inferno, not all alicorns are gods, but I cannot "blind your own eyes"

3815432 No you cannot :ajsmug: But that's your option, I won't judge you for such:rainbowlaugh:

3814865 This is Alternate Universe!

Strange I thought I posted a comment here long ago, no matter then.

My bro, I am truly touched at this beautiful story, it made me cry, keep on the good work yo!

That was emotional, sad, and heartwarming. It got really depressing when you revealed the rest of the Mane Six's deaths.

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Meh...Just have Spike be Alduin, and Twilight be the Dragonborn! It already makes sense for Twilight to be the Dragonborn, so just make a sequel where Spike finds out that he's Alduin, and can totally kill Death and Fate! See: The Elder Scrolls V: Skyrim if you don't know what I'm talking about.

Although, if you don't know what I'm talking about, then where the HELL have you been? Living in a nuclear fallout shelter since 1999? Hell, even I know about it enough to make this comment, and I've never even played the game! By the way, if you're wondering, "aren't the two videos the same thing?" NO! One has lyrics for the song in it!

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