Accidents Happen

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A simple, lone action made in annoyance causes Fluttershy to lose a friend she had known for so long, only to gain the love of another she had admired from afar.

Written for my friend, Late Registrator and edited by Beirirangu

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TwilightPoopSparkle

TwilightPoopSparkle #1 · Jan 9th, 2014 · · ·

Cute

Crab Spy

Crab Spy #2 · Jan 9th, 2014 · 1 · ·

Written for my friend, Late Registrator and edited by Beirirangu

I had read this as "Written for my Late friend, Registrator and edited by Beirirangu" which made me depressed for a reason that only my stupidity can conjure up.

Author of MADness

Author of MADness #3 · Jan 9th, 2014 · · ·

Where did you get the picture?

SgtDerpy

SgtDerpy #4 · Jan 10th, 2014 · · ·

I kinda feel bad for poor Rarity, it was an accident. Flutterbats just mean.

Inferno demon Dash

Inferno demon Dash #5 · Jan 10th, 2014 · · ·

3761722 Thank you

3761846 Fail

3762036 Google images

3763291 True but you can't blame Shy for being upset that she was being rude to Angel himself, and Flutterbat is supposed to be mean, she's not anyponys friend.

Smitty91

Smitty91 #6 · Jan 10th, 2014 · · ·

Your grammar and punctuation could use some work and you capitalized words that didn't need capitalizing (pegasus, earth pony, gods, etc). Other than that, this was good, but felt rushed. However, I do like the interesting idea you have presented here in regards to Bats. The only problem is that I didn't see Flutterbat present any hostility towards the Mane Five. She was simply trying to enjoy the apples and that's it. Still, I think it would be interesting to do a story about Fluttershy suffering from a personality disorder, where her more bitchy side (for lack of a better word) manifests itself into a new Fluttershy that the nice Fluttershy must struggle to overcome and defeat . . . or something like that. I'm completely stealing the plot of Secret Window here. I really need to stop doing that and start coming up with my own original ideas.

Inferno demon Dash

Inferno demon Dash #7 · Jan 10th, 2014 · · ·

3763742 Odd seeing as I had an editor look over this, and I always wondered if Gods should have a capital g or not, still bot sure really. You do need to come up with ideas of your own, it's not easy though but even though you are right about Flutterbat, I personally see her a dark alter ego who cares about nothing more then permanently taking over Shy's body and feasting on apples, but that's just me Thank you though man, it means a lot to me that would would look over this

Smitty91

Smitty91 #8 · Jan 10th, 2014 · · ·

3763795 But that isn't to say that getting inspiration for stories like Secret Window is a bad thing. The plot of that film is that a man is being accused of plagiarism. Somehow, it goes into the territory of alter ego. I haven't seen the film in a while. Your feelings towards Flutterbat are reminiscent of demons; they care about nothing but permanently taking over a person's body and feasting on the fear of others. The only reason I would have Flutterbat in my story at all is if I could fatten her up through apple juice.

Mindashy69

Mindashy69 #9 · Jan 13th, 2014 · · ·

No offense to your editor, but this still has quite a few noticeable errors, as well as a few parts that seem just too quick and uncomfortable for me. I can point those out if you like.
Also, interesting ship, but I'm a little bit disappointed as to how short it was, and more importantly how other than a quick confession and a kiss on the nose, there was very little in-depth on their relationship. Still, a fun, quick read. Very enjoyable.

nightwalker