Being a stranger in a land without normal,

i would fix that if i were* you

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Seems fine to me. I think you're missing the point of the statement. Nothing in Equestria is anywhere near what we might recognize as 'normal', hence "a land without normal".

Also, because I just cant resist now,

i would fix that if i where you

it's 'were' not 'where'

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Normal is an adjective, not a noun. An adjective is used to describe things :I

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Yes, normalcy is the noun form. However, "Being a stranger in a land without normalcy isn't the worst fate, just takes a little getting used to." reads funny. On top of that, the line is meant to be dialogue. No one speaks like that. Much like no one actually uses "whom".

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All I am saying is having a glaring grammar error like that doesn't make for a good first impression. And I speak like that.
(Makes me sound cultured)

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I take great pride in knowing the correct usage of who & whom.

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If you want to sound cultured you shouldn't start a sentence with a conjunction. Don't worry though, I had to catch about 4 of that same mistake in this chapter. (You should also not have an entire sentence inside of parentheses, you just make it its own sentence)

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And I would have gotten away with it too.

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And I would have gotten away with it too.

And

Bad author.

Very nice chapter. I'm enjoying this story so far and hope to read more chapters in the future.

Keep up the excellent work

Key Peg had a good laugh at me when I finally got home. Falling victim to one of Celestia’s kiss-and-make-up schemes officially christened me as a castle regular.

And now he's leaving the castle and won't be a regular anymore.

Walking into the dragon’s den, I did my best to swallow my fear. ‘I must not fear. Fear is the mind killer ...’ I chanted to myself.

Dune reference FTW!

Well, two, but Luna scares the shit out of me.

I'll deal with her!

Perhaps I’ll come visit sometime. For ... conversation"

Damn, Shane, you feel prey to Trollestia. Best be on the lookout now!

Sure celestia, "conversation"

Yay they made up.

The protag's conversations with the Royals have sold this story for me.
I don't read clop, but I will be reading this...
Not because this is a good story. I have many other unfinished good stories on my To Read list, I don't need more.
Not because this has HiE sex. I'm not that interested.
But because this is a story made good by having sex as a subject. It allows me to see the setting and characters in a refreshing new light, and is supported by good writing. That makes this title unique on my To Read list.

I really like how open this universe is to affection and sex. It's refreshing to not have to dance around the topic.

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Well I suppose when everyone's bits are pretty much on open display it seems rather silly for it to be something that needs to be subverted for being an uncomfortable subject.

Beware, Shane, for Molestia will be on the hunt for that ass!

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Although, to be technically "correct" (for a given value of "correct"), it should be "normality".

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I don't think it's the "A" she wants...

Bone them! Bone them all, Shane!

Big McLargehuge

Punch Rockgroin! Slate Fistcrunch! Thick McRunfast! ...Thank you, now I have to go watch that again. Reading this through a second time now that an update appeared and I'm again taken with how much I enjoy the atmosphere you create. This was one of those that popped up on one of my lists (good HiE? probably, it is); I opened it half expecting a train wreck (no offense) just on the premise, and was pleasantly surprised to find myself enjoying how that very premise was handled. When I saw no one commented on this chapter's MST shout out... I figured it was as good a time as any to add another bit of praise for this unusual and rewarding story.

but Luna scares the shit out of me.

...He's going to get Luna as one of his clients, isn't he?

"Perhaps I’ll come visit sometime. For ... conversation.” Sure Princess, for conversation, that's all it will be. LOL.

Honestly Shane kinda comes off as a bit of a coward.

> Big McLargehuge

You have no idea how happy this MST3K reference made me.