• Member Since 24th Dec, 2013
  • offline last seen Aug 18th, 2014

Jake the Dog

They told me a could be anything I wanted. So I became a potato.


Fluttershy returns to her cottage only to find a message from an anonymous individual threatening not only her but her friend's lives.

Who will face the consequences?

Chapters (1)
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Comments ( 23 )

Nice so far! I like where this is going!:pinkiehappy:
First comment up!:twilightsmile:

morbid, BUT AWESOME!!!
morbidly-awesome :pinkiecrazy:

Whoa. That was... horrible (in a good way). I just... wow. :fluttercry:

. . . . .
Wow. Wow, bro. Wow. I didn't know you could write like this....oh my Chryminy.... This was amazing in the most horrific, brutal, and destructive way. Amazing piece of writing, and to :ajsmug:,:duck:, and :twilightsmile:, screw you; to :pinkiehappy:, screw you for not giving a crap that Fluttershy was gonna die; and to :rainbowkiss:, /)

Awesome story, Acriimony. Not only did I genuinely love it, I am also well ensured that I should be haunted by this for the next few months. :rainbowderp:

Sequel! Sequel! Sequelsequelsequelsequelsequel!!!

Why do I get the feeling someone just drove Fluttershy insane to the point that she just killed herself? This is just a really really sad story, not exactly scary. Unless I got it completely wrong...

3850974 Dark, not scary. Someone's controlling her.

3852031 Or someTHING.
Oh, wait, this is your story. Nevermind.

I liked it, but logic got in the way. If you fully enact suspension of disbelief, it's actually quite nicely written.


4458469 Fluttershy's a dumb bitch--simple as that. Shoot her in the face and she'll take it as a compliment.
Anyway, thanks for the feedback an' stuff.

btw, how would you like to see a *snifffff* clopfic?

:twilightangry2:-IT IS ON!
:rainbowdetermined2:-WHAT SHE SAID!
:applejackunsure:-AHM IN!
:raritywink:-As am I!
*all of us lock and load*

4522046 Oh she's stuck in the Dan vs universe.

Why did I wait so long to read one of your stories?

She said hi to everypony and slipped away to a corner of the room. She needed to think about how she would explain this to her friends.

This is more of a matter of opinion I think, but I think that "She said 'hi' to everypony and slipped away to a corner of the room. She needed to think about how she would explain this to her friends." would look better.

You used a lot of HR things.

Overall, the story was really good :twilightsmile: I like how Fluttershy broke under pressure. I highly suggest writing a sequel, or a bonus chapter of what the anonymous pony's life was like during the period where Fluttershy was freaking the hell out. :yay: 8 RariStars for Jerome! :raritystarry::raritystarry::raritystarry::raritystarry::raritystarry::raritystarry::raritystarry::raritystarry:

4556124 Thanks for the positive feedback :D

AH! I really should've looked at the sad/dark stamp. sleep ain't happenin' tonight.

Good job!:twilightsmile:

What is with he mystery's man? Who the hell was gunning for them?

k what the fuck

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