It might be a tad bit cliffhanger-y. On the plus side I A) am not graduating, moving, and starting a job search at the same time this go around and B) ended up writing large chunks of 4 when I got hung up.
This is one of the best FO:E fics that I've read, it being in a third person narration rather then first person, makes it all the more serious, keep it up!
742257 Your story is the first third person FO:E fic that I've read, I guess everyone just follows the original and uses a first person viewpoint, plus first person is probably easier for most people to write for, though as you've shown, third person allows for easy view point switching
I like that one. Mainly because you spell out the word 'one'. That's something that really irks me, when people throw numbers in prose. Don't get me wrong now, I use numbers in prose. Stable 48 would just look weird as Stable Fourty-Eight. And I wouldn't expect someone to write out 1,395,035. But you should spell out two and the like. Just looks better.
But look at me letting fancy mathematics muddy the issue.
Not ALL the badasses. Besides, we are one chapter away from finishing the Stable 48 arc and getting to the first Wasteland arc. We can find Wasteland badasses there! I would contend that Cider is no slouch in the badass department as well. Although I will miss Tumble and Chief, there is plenty more badass to be had.
While I'm commenting here, it's a good time to say 'sorry for the delay!' Both my laptops died the same day and I've been without for the last week.
Different strokes for different folks I suppose. I highly recommend Wild Sky Yonder, but it isn't the same kind of story by any stretch. Homecoming is horror, Wild Sky is a coming of age story.
Homecoming wouldn't exist without WSY and Mysecsha. I was captivated by the story and when he was looking for prereaders, I was ecstatic to be brought on board for chapter 3 on. After working on a few chapters as an alpha and sounding board he asked if I had anything written. I showed him the first 8k of Homecoming. It was a tense-confused, poorly-attributed wreck. He and Drakmire held my hand through the first chapter and BEAT correct grammar and proper pacing into me. I attribute the fact I've written something remotely readable to them giving hard but fair criticism on my premier chapter, and for Mysecsha continuing to be my alpha reader, sounding board, accountability holder, and pretty, pretty princess.
Watching, Favorited and waiting patiently... patiently... Gizmo IS a terrifying little nightmare though, I mean seriously I just about jumped off the couch when he showed up!
I'm glad you all are willing to be patient. When I gave my optimistic "the drought is over" line I failed to take a few things into account.
1. Job market sucks, so my shiny new degree has lead me to working in a warehouse. Took me a while for my body to adjust.
2. Karma is a ( Buy some apples!). And both our laptops and my desktop died the same week.
3. And most importantly I failed to take into account how HARD it is to write good suspense. I'm on the fourth rewrite.
And as to Gizmo, he is a terrifying little fella. He also gets a lot of attention in the final chapter of the Stable Arc. (Not to be confused with the final chapter which is way, WAY off.)
I intend to ride the wave of your praise to a night of solid progress!
know how 1 and 2 go, it took me a bit to find my current job and I had to go for two weeks without a computer before my taxes came in from last year so I could get the one I use now. As for 3 I can only guess that it's like having an art block... I haven't really drawn anything worth a damn since I left high school. Here's hoping things start really looking up for you!
MOOOAAAARRRR!!! I NEED MOAR! On a more serious note, this is probably my favorite Fo:E story. Every other story always has something that really urkes me. For example, the way Blackjack almost dies, like, every two chapters (not trying to bash PH, I still read it, and it gets a bit ridiculous). Really hope you're going to go into the wasteland because that would make me a very happy McSnuffle.
The deaths of Rough and Tumble had a strong effect on me, they remind me of me and my best friend who are pretty much like brothers, and are assholes. Great writing, you certainly outdid yourself and probably everyone except Somber.
Ahhhhhh!
Ahhhhhh!
This is my favorite Fo: E horror fic 8)
FFFFFFFFFFFUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUU
Talk about the worst cliffhanger in the universe!
But seriously, to get out of the nightmare vault only to get shot in the face by some looter fuck, well, damn.
TASTY
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Fugga! Fugga! WOO! WOO!
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It might be a tad bit cliffhanger-y. On the plus side I A) am not graduating, moving, and starting a job search at the same time this go around and B) ended up writing large chunks of 4 when I got hung up.
Stay tuned cause the drought is over!
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You bring the beer, I'll bring the BBQ
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BLISS!
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a nightmare image from the mind of the author!
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Yes. Peer into the blackness of my soul... through a doodle I did on Dabbleboard.com. This is the world of wickedness I live in!
This is one of the best FO:E fics that I've read, it being in a third person narration rather then first person, makes it all the more serious, keep it up!
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I'm glad your enjoying it. The third person tool box has been serving me well, if I do say so myself.
742257 Your story is the first third person FO:E fic that I've read, I guess everyone just follows the original and uses a first person viewpoint, plus first person is probably easier for most people to write for, though as you've shown, third person allows for easy view point switching
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Third person is where it's at! There could be no "Fugga! Fugga! WOO! WOO!" if this was all in Lancet's perspective.
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To think it only took three chapters to let slip the mare of the future's name. Welcome officially to the story, Tink!
Tumble! We shall miss thee greatly.
Seriously. I dunno what it was about that character but FUCK I loved every minute of him.
This is one of the most fun reads I've had in a long time. You sir, have all the internets. Because you totally deserve them.
In all seriousness, this was a great chapter. I loved the cliffhanger at the end, and I am greatly enthused to see more.
BOOMSHAKALA
NBA JAMxFoE. HYES.
Gizmo SAYS HI
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A moment of silence for the loss of swag that diminishes us all...
That should do it.
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There was something amazing for me watching you comment 1, 2, and 3 in one sitting. It was exhilarating.
and yes. NBA Jam is best reference.
ARE YOU REALLY gonna reply to every comment I makes?
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Indeed, although I reserve the right to ramble, not address your points, or respond in innuendo.
What about this one?
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I like that one. Mainly because you spell out the word 'one'. That's something that really irks me, when people throw numbers in prose. Don't get me wrong now, I use numbers in prose. Stable 48 would just look weird as Stable Fourty-Eight. And I wouldn't expect someone to write out 1,395,035. But you should spell out two and the like. Just looks better.
But look at me letting fancy mathematics muddy the issue.
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Wanna make out?
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AHHH! MacDash! My only weakness!!
femspotter.files.wordpress.com/2008/07/hillary-melting.jpg
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A) um... Is that Hillary Clinton?
B) next time I get to be rainbow dash
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wait... that really IS Hillary Clinton... I don't know if that makes it more or less win...
THIS is the BEST. FALLOUT. EVER.
But you killed off all the badasses... Y U DID?
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Not ALL the badasses. Besides, we are one chapter away from finishing the Stable 48 arc and getting to the first Wasteland arc. We can find Wasteland badasses there! I would contend that Cider is no slouch in the badass department as well. Although I will miss Tumble and Chief, there is plenty more badass to be had.
While I'm commenting here, it's a good time to say 'sorry for the delay!' Both my laptops died the same day and I've been without for the last week.
895153 lol don't apologize to me for timing I only found it today
maybe apologize for telling me that Wild fic was any good
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Different strokes for different folks I suppose. I highly recommend Wild Sky Yonder, but it isn't the same kind of story by any stretch. Homecoming is horror, Wild Sky is a coming of age story.
Homecoming wouldn't exist without WSY and Mysecsha. I was captivated by the story and when he was looking for prereaders, I was ecstatic to be brought on board for chapter 3 on. After working on a few chapters as an alpha and sounding board he asked if I had anything written. I showed him the first 8k of Homecoming. It was a tense-confused, poorly-attributed wreck. He and Drakmire held my hand through the first chapter and BEAT correct grammar and proper pacing into me. I attribute the fact I've written something remotely readable to them giving hard but fair criticism on my premier chapter, and for Mysecsha continuing to be my alpha reader, sounding board, accountability holder, and pretty, pretty princess.
Watching, Favorited and waiting patiently... patiently...
Gizmo IS a terrifying little nightmare though, I mean seriously I just about jumped off the couch when he showed up!
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I'm glad you all are willing to be patient. When I gave my optimistic "the drought is over" line I failed to take a few things into account.
1. Job market sucks, so my shiny new degree has lead me to working in a warehouse. Took me a while for my body to adjust.
2. Karma is a ( Buy some apples!). And both our laptops and my desktop died the same week.
3. And most importantly I failed to take into account how HARD it is to write good suspense. I'm on the fourth rewrite.
And as to Gizmo, he is a terrifying little fella. He also gets a lot of attention in the final chapter of the Stable Arc. (Not to be confused with the final chapter which is way, WAY off.)
I intend to ride the wave of your praise to a night of solid progress!
know how 1 and 2 go, it took me a bit to find my current job and I had to go for two weeks without a computer before my taxes came in from last year so I could get the one I use now. As for 3 I can only guess that it's like having an art block... I haven't really drawn anything worth a damn since I left high school. Here's hoping things start really looking up for you!
MOOOAAAARRRR!!! I NEED MOAR!
On a more serious note, this is probably my favorite Fo:E story. Every other story always has something that really urkes me. For example, the way Blackjack almost dies, like, every two chapters (not trying to bash PH, I still read it, and it gets a bit ridiculous). Really hope you're going to go into the wasteland because that would make me a very happy McSnuffle.
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Don't worry, our
heroessurvivors will get their fill of the Wasteland soon.The deaths of Rough and Tumble had a strong effect on me, they remind me of me and my best friend who are pretty much like brothers, and are assholes. Great writing, you certainly outdid yourself and probably everyone except Somber.
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