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To be continued...


Last time we left Rainbow Dash, Fluttershy, and Scootaloo an important decision was being made; the decision being the legal adoption of Scootaloo. This is the continuation of the original story which branches into the events leading after the final verdict.

Important Note: This story is non-cannon with GlitchyProduction's original work, but is based off of the authors original unreleased ending chapters: (Chapter 27-Epilogue Chapter 2)

Origanal Story : http://www.fimfiction.net/story/12844/pattycakes-the-remake

Cover Art: http://geotastic.deviantart.com/art/Flutters-407825725

Enjoy the story! ~ Oliver-England

Chapters (9)
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...What gives? I could have sworn that you posted this earlier today. I remember reading it. I even left two comments. If that was a dream, then my subconscious is 100% in tune with the future, because I remember this story word for word!
:trixieshiftleft::trixieshiftright: ... :rainbowlaugh:
I'm guessing the mods made you take it down? Congrats on actually making contact with Glitchy. It's awesome that he's letting you release the canon ending, too. Now if only the mods would let you do it. It'll happen, though. Good will come of this effort. I feel it. :pinkiesmile:

You're doing great! Keep up the good work.

Cheers mate,
Alaester Nikolai Modern.

Oh, what I'm realseing isn't his cannon-ending. I'm releasing a story loosely inspired by his ending. Him and I we're discussing what should happen and we both agreed what I have planned would be a good way to end "Pattycakes: The Remake" so that's what I'm doing! :twilightsmile:

3740746 That's cool, too. I like your version a lot. I think it's less "loosely based" than you realize; yours is almost identical to how I imagined, and hoped, his would end. You're doing amazingly well. Keep at it like this, and it will be a great ending to a great story.
It'll quench my need for closure just fine.

Cheers mate,
Alaester Nikolai Modern.

A happy ending for all involved. Scootaloo's former foster parents are being put away for their crimes, and her new foster family is going to take good care of her. And she's getting help with her reading. Life is looking way up for her. :yay::rainbowkiss::scootangel:

Small nit picking time:
Look over this story one more time. I saw several instances of missed capitalization, and paragraph splicing.

Over all a nice continuation of a great story.

3741257 But her new family isn't a foster family; It's permanent. Scootaloo is so lucky in this story; she gets to have Fluttershy as a mom *fiction envy*, and Rainbow-Dash as an implied sister *even more fiction envy*, AND she gets to be treated infantile in a completely innocent, non-judgmental manner by both of them *fiction envy EVERMORE*! Fluttershy is my favorite pony, but in this story, I wish I were Scootaloo... or even Rainbow-Dash.

>> Oliver-England Awesome first chapter. Can't wait for the rest of 'em... NO CLIFFHANGERS!!! LOL

Cheers mate,
Alaester Nikolai Modern.

I'm so glad someone continued this! You're doing a great job so far, aside a few grammatical errors. Asides that, thank you (x5) for doing this! :twilightsmile::heart:

Awww, that was such a sweet chapter! :heart: My inner FlutterDash shipper is smiling right now :twilightsmile:

That was so beautiful. It is such a genuinely loving relationship between Fluttershy and Scootaloo. She's going to have a great childhood.

Keep up the perfection, Oliver. :pinkiesmile:

Cheers mate,
Alaester Nikolai Modern.

Scootaloo has such a happy family. I'm so jealous of her. Heck I'm sure we all are. :rainbowkiss:

Breast feeding? Scootaloo is kind of asking a lot with that. I don't know if there are pills that can allow for a women to produce breast milk when not pregnant. There's always the local witch doctor Zecora though, she could probably mix up a brew to let Fluttershy breast feed. :rainbowhuh:

Very nice. You're doing an amazing job with this story, Oliver.

There were a few typos, but only one that I feel worth mentioning:
["...You’re willing to die to keep her feeling safe aren’t you?"
Fluttershy confidently smiled, “Yes, I’m willing to give my life for Cheerilee."]

Also, nice reference:
[Rainbow Chuckled, “Easy there Fluttercrinkle..."]
Very subtle. :twilightsmile:

Keep up the great work. And thanks.

Cheers mate,
Alaester Nikolai Modern.

I love this so much XD FlutterDash shipping and diapers ^^ :rainbowkiss::heart::yay:

“Fluttershy, Scootaloo told me she wants to be breast fed…”

Gah eeeh...uhh...umm....okay?

3772695 i think they can get some type of hormone pill that...causes a woman to begin lactating. Im not sure if i am correct or making stuff up.

gaaarh duuuur eeeef

Ah poor Scootaloo! She got a stomache and had an accident. It's okay Scootaloo, it happens to the best of us sometimes. :pinkiesad2:

Aww, poor Scoots. Accidents are no fun :ajsleepy:

Comment posted by SuperPinkBrony12 deleted Jan 20th, 2014

Great work, Oliver. Very cute. Keep up the great work.

Cheers mate,
Alaester Nikolai Modern.

Edit: I personally think your continuation is shaping up to better than the actual ending posted thus far by GlitchyP. Good on ya, mate. :)

Eh could be better...but for 5 seconds when she said radical I thought she ment my OC Radical Zun

Rainbow Dash does bring up a good point about Fluttershy taking things a little too far. But Scootaloo's foster family treated her horribly, and if this is the only way to make her feel better then I'm sure Scootaloo doesn't mind too much. I know it's complicated, but if it's what Scootaloo wants that's all that matters. :eeyup:

Adowable chapter! :scootangel:

The idea behind this fetish in general is true. The idea behibd rainbow overreacting is true.... But i know what this story needs... It needs some funnies..... Throw in a human pinkie pie!! Pinkie pie always knows.... She always knows..


Ponies thoughts in that image:

Rainbow: This box is closing in on me
Rarity: Ooh.... Thinking outside the box
Twilight: Help me! (or: Do i look like i give a fuck?)
Applejack: Is that for real?
Fluttershy: I hope she doesnt fall off of whatever she is hanging on.

Pinkie Pie: Hi Bronies!!

Yeah I agree, Chapter 31 was not very light hearted, But, you know what? You just gave me a really good idea! :pinkiehappy:

3857193 and if anyone asks... Remember:
Why? Because pinkie pie that's why. (I have a couple ideas for this story.... But while I wait for you to run out... I should probably think of ideas for princess fillytia

Dat some good shit Ollie

Nooz...... Not 1-8 days.... Less please

I think Fluttershy's been taking nursing pills so she can produce breast milk. And she's worried about someone finding out. :eeyup:

Meekoli does not get foal part of story...he feels dumb

3892835 If you ask him to release it sooner, you're asking him to sacrifice quality of the story, and length of the chapter. Do you really want that?

Also, Oliver, great read! A few typos, but what story doesn't have their share? There was this one I thought worth mentioning, though:
"...Scootaloo closed her eyes resting her head over Scootaloo’s shoulder."
But other than that, nothing that detracts from the story. You are a really great writer. Let nobody tell you otherwise.

I really like the direction the story is headed (I foresee fun times and pink chaos ahead. Hopefully, she contributes to, rather than dominates, the story). Also, it's continuing further than I thought it would, which is great! Thank you for that. Hopefully, it will continue on for quite some time more.
Personally, I'm not sure how one would go about ending this story anyway. it seems to flow in the same manner as the living live; if given the power do do so, would you stop the flow of life in someone else, or would you let them live? It's the biggest problem with writing great stories; ending them puts the characters' lives in a state of limbo.

Ending note, though: Great chapter, sir! I hope more thought-filled, heart-warming, talented, literarily-visual gold flows from your fingertips again and again! Excelsior!

Cheers mate,
Alaester Nikolai Modern

*EDIT: P.S. My comments seem to be quite lengthy and eloquent... perhaps I have a writer in me after all?

3912836 that is true.... But i have been able to write amazing quality chapters in a matter of anhour.. (princess fillytia is not an example.)

3913517 Yes, but how many stories do write simultaneously?

3913524 at that time i was on a deadline from my editor writing 3 stories.. and that comment was meant to be a joke... Tehehe apparently i helpedby throwing pinkie pie at oliver, she helped him make ch 32. I just dont want to see anyone good go into a yearlong funk

3913535 Uhh... was that on a different account?

3913539 no, im a published author.... Though you wouldnt be able to tell by my writing... My editor is vigorous.... Thanks Jennifer..... Shes not all that into mlp, otherwise id probably havetne best editor in the midwest on fimfiction..... Btw i edited my last comment.

3913555 Oh. Wow. What have you written? And I'm surprised, being a published author, that you still enjoy writing enough to do here, even though you don't get paid here.
3913535 And what do you mean by "a yearlong funk"? Were you referencing GlitchyProductions, the author of the original "Pattycakes: The Remake"?

3913593 yeah i wrote an age regression fic, which turned into science... And a bit of religion... Then made 3 sequels..... that got published but didnt sell quite well.. Id give you a link to the html version gotta find it first tho........ I said i had a published book, i never said i got good money for it... Only sold 3000 copies.... Sadly.

And i was no only referencing glitchy, but roker999, that brony over there, etc.

3913739 That sounds like a very interesting story. I would be very interested in reading it. How many words are they (each. Approx.)?

Ah, poor Fluttershy. At least she has Scootaloo now though. :pinkiesad2:/:yay:

Awwe ... This proves that you are worth owning the padded ponies group. Good job, andi cantcan't wait for pattycakes 3 to begin...

Aww, what a great ending to this chapter. And very heartfelt, too. :scootangel:

I love this story but, in all honestly you need a pre-reader, friend.
Certain things are off, like eyecolor or mixing up characters is all. Several grammar mistakes as well, but as a whole I love the story. :twilightsmile:

Great chapter, sir! It was such a tearjerker. :fluttercry::pinkiesmile: (Let me just say though; if I cried as much as Fluttershy has in this whole story, including the original 26 chapters, then I would be dehydrated with erosion lines on my face! I love these kind of stories!) Personally, I do hope the next one is the second to last chapter.

Also, I'd like to say that I have some concerns about 'Pattycakes 3'... I'll PM them to you soon.

Cheers mate,
Alaester Nikolai Modern.

Meekoli has had some laughs angers and tears in this story. He hopes next chapter is not it's this stories lasr

I'm a man, and a man can admit whether he feels sad or has cried. I shall admit these two things. This story has its goods and admittedly there are some roadblocks but all of it was heartwarming and soulful. I can't wait to see this to the end. I'll give my final thoughts on the last chapter.

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