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Their lives had always seemed wrong; they had hidden it from everyone, but soon two ponies would find that they are not so different from one another as it seemed. Follow Ferox and Nelum Blossom on their journey as they learn more about one another than ever before in a tale of destinies entwined.

Chapters (7)
Comments ( 28 )

As states in the note, I would really appreciate feedback of you read this .

I'm slightly confused by this. But I'm sure it will be explained later.

I saw no grammar or spelling errors so good job.:yay:

Glad you liked it; also I'm surprised there were no mistakes, as I am typing this on a phone lol.

Anyway, to answer your question: yes, more will soon be explained in the 3rd and 4th chapter.

Think eyelashes adorned her colored lids.

I think you can figure out what's wrong with that.:twilightsmile:

his image of perfection shattered.

Is that a mistake or a hint?:trixieshiftright:

Anyway. Still confused, but I like it.

Whoops, thanks for pointing that typo out. I don't think the second is a typo.

It's hard to respond without giving away too much, but the names will be looked into more later :twilightsmile:

I know where this story is going. I am liking it so far. I'm not going to spoil it for anyone yet. I've been waiting for a story like this for a bit.

Comment posted by Lionblaze103 deleted Jan 9th, 2014

Gotta hate that school.

"s-sorry Miss,"

Capitalize the first S.

That's the only thing I saw. Keep it up.:twilightsmile:

I'll fix it right away. Thanks for being my unofficial editor! Hehe

I swear I'll read this but my adhd is too strong atm.

Haha, no bother, the next chapter is the best yet anyway, so nothong wrong with waiting :twilightsmile:

New chapter yay - as always, feedback is appreciated.

would love to see more as well as a follow up :pinkiehappy:

Awesome, I'm glad you like it Buzzard :twilightsmile:

Personally I think I'm still terrible with dialogue, but... meh.

Anywho, about more: I'll be releasing the final part later today.

Loved it! A sequal/continuation would be awesome.

Awesome, I'm really glad you liked it. You can check my blog for more info :twilightsmile:

I liked this story. Managed to tell quite a bit in a very short amount of space. I now wonder what I will do if my sibling turns out to be a sister.

A little short, but definitely got it's point across. I look forward if you have any stories or sequels with same themes in the future. :twilightsmile:

Thanks Froey and Cyborg.

I have been pretty inactive lately, but I plan to change that -- perhaps with a sequel

Lol, it was the twins from ponyville, wasn’t it?

This story has the shortest chapters I have ever seen. Well I guess I shouldn't let that stop me.

Huh, Nelum is the one sneaking out every night yet Ferrox is the one falling asleep in class? Interesting.

A pleasant read, but it felt way to short for the ammount of time it spanned. Would have felt more natural if it happened over a week rather than half a year.

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