decided to make this profile in order to tell various authors how much I love their stories, and to seek inspiration for when I myself may try and write a fan fiction.
Breeze, a big pegasus is sent to Ponyville to tell Pinkie pie that her father is dying. all he has as help to find her, is a picture of a little sad filly. he has never seen this pony before, nor has he ever been in Ponyville. will he be able to find her? will she come back to the rock farm to say goodbye to her dying father? will she be able to grant him his one final wish?
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I apologize in advance for potential grammar errors. This is my first fanfic, and English is my 3rd language :)
You are doing a great job so far. I'm following this story. If chapter one is any sigh, then this will be one great story.
Five mustaches to you.
Well, so far this is sweet and sad, but it has a few really cute, happy moments too, which is nice. Not harping on one note. Delving into Pinkie's history and family is always fun.
The grammar is for the most part pretty good, the errors are primarily in capitalization and punctuation. Surprised English is your 3rd language, heh. The one major thing is you need to start a new paragraph every time you have a new speaker, to clarify who is talking. Oh, and also, when you use quotation marks within quotation marks they should be single quotes so we know that the character isn't finished talking, i.e. "I’m sorry to bother you sir, but could you point me to the direction of a town called 'Ponyville'? I seem to have lost my way." (Also, that was one of those misplaced or missing periods I noticed)
Anyway, you've definitely caught my interest. Tracking to see where this goes.
329102 Thank you for the feedback :) i'll fix these things once i get home from my English midterm today :)
Sorry for taking such a long time with this, but i've got finals coming up, so I've had to put alot of my focus on studying.
soon i've got more free time, so these should start to come out more frequently
yay, you updated. i'm so excited to see what happens next.
What did Flutter shy give him? The suspense is killing me! I eagerly await the next update.