Spike finds himself in the middle of nowhere, and with no way of getting back home. For a journey this big its gonna take two, and Spike forges an unsteady partnership with a unlikely pony.
Embarked on a dangerous journey to reach his home Spike is gonna have to keep an ace up his sleeve, call some bluffs, and hope his companion hasn't stacked the deck in her favor. Tempers flare, teeth will be grit, and things will never be the same. Enough napping young dragon, it's your turn for an adventure.
Kudos, and thanks too my beta-readers xgfhj, Lium, and Dataguy who've been patient enough to deal with the multitude of grammar issues that plague my stories, and all around have been a great help.
Cover image from the immensely talented http://suikuzu.deviantart.com/ check out the rest of his art if you think this is epic. Thanks suikuzu you rock
Tsundere Trixie and Witty Spike, I think out of the fics you posted today, this may be my favorite. I has a more detailed plot, comedy that is legitimately funny, a nice flow, a bunch of action scenes, character interaction, and has a nice set up for a Spike x Trixie fic. I'm guessing by the end of this neither of them will want to say good bye.
♫♥I look forward to reading what happens next in your story♥♪
I'm liking this so far.
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Glad your liking it waffler, Yeah this story is my current project and the first mlp fanfic i decided to try a hand at with chapters. I wanted to make sure that it was funny but still had a basic direction to go too, and that reader's would kinda grow attached to these two's constant bickering. Hate to give away spoilers but your hitting the nail on the head quite well.
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Looking forward to your comments on them as well
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Good to hear i'll try my best not to disappoint.
I'm really liking this story, but you need to do more proof reading, or find a pre-reader, because I see a lot of mistakes with your grammar and most of them fairly basic ones at that. Otherwise, I am very much enjoying your work.
Wow. With Spike's smarts and Trixie's creativity and magic, unrestrained, unlike Twilight's, with morals or doubts... yeah, it'll be awesome partnership. Loved that chapter greatly, good work.
That hammer seems like it could become a very interesting plot point.
Quite well done overall so far. The errors in your grammar didn't detract significantly from the quality of the work, which is quite rare.
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Thanks happy that your enjoying the story
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I agree and am glad that despite my grammar issues that you like my work. I'll start putting more effort into my proof reading to try to iron out these mistakes.
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Yes they'd make quite the smashing team if they were able to get along for longer than a few minutes. and of course thank you
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The hammer is actually a reference to another FIMfiction story written by an acquaintance of mine from deviantart. Around here i believe he goes by the name of TheDescendent ( excellent writer btw ) Well it's good to know that my errors aren't completely sinking this story, and as i said to moguera I'll endeavor to improve my grammar faults.
I'm lucky to have reader's who take the time to let me know when they see a mistake in my work, so that I'm able to improve the story. You guys are great.
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author that responds to comments! Rare sight :D You rock, bro
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Not as much as my readers, you guys are the real ones who rock.
Well it's only fair, with you reader's giving such awesome feedback, and offering advice the least i can do is show my appreciation by replying.
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Neat! By the way, you remember that clasp on Trixie's cape is gem? And Spike loooves gems :D Just saying
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OMG! Your right, I completely forgot about that, such good material for another argument right in front of me.
>> GiantMako
Yeah, he wrote one of my favorite fics, This story is really good, the only problems are obvious grammar mistakes, but aside from typos this is excellent, love hate relations are my favorites
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Mine too can't beat those stories with volatile characters being forced to team up. Working on the grammar issues so hopefully the story will improve for ya.
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Thank you always great to hear positive comments from you guys.
Apologies in advance for any grammar issues, mainly just wanted to get this submitted before the day was done. I'll get any lingering mistakes fixed as soon as i can. Hope the chapter was enjoyable and worth your wait.
It's good to see this fic get an update. The romantic tension is so thick you can cut it with a knife. I like it when the audience knows more than the characters. You might need to add a ship tag to this story. It's a hetero Trixie ship that alone should get you readers.
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"I'M IN A GLASS CASE OF EMOTION!!!"
Peace Out.
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That's a damned good idea! waffler I thank you for your advice, and glad you like it. ( lol just watched that movie two days ago. )
Yay, an update! Gonna have to read this as soon as I can.
Okay, your biggest issue so far is that you get your homophones mixed up. You use "your" when you mean "you're" and vice-versa. I also caught you using "too" when you meant "to" at least once.
Keep in mind, "your" (no apostrophe and no e) is possessive, as in "It's your story." Meanwhile, "you're" is a contraction (that's what the apostrophe means) of "you are," as in "You're driving me crazy!"
Also, "to" is used to designate location or action. "Going to Ponyville. Talk to him." on the other hand, "too" is used to designate excess, "That's too much hot sauce," or as a synonym for also, "I really like her mane too!"
I'm sorry to nitpick like this, but fixing these little mistakes will improve your writing a great deal. This is a great story. Hope this helps.
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And when you do I hope you enjoy it!
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That's perfectly fine moguera I'm happy to have readers who are willing to set me straight on my grammar issues. I'll take your advise to heart, and hopefully the next chapter will be nice and pristine the moment it's actually submitted. And yes your comments helps a great deal.
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Thanks Bawss, glad you get my sense of humor
I bucking LOVE this story. This chap was the best so far in terms of enjoyment. Beginning of this story was amazing. I physically FELT how much of an asshole Trixie was being. Also love the delicious tension in the air. It takes a good writer to get me emotionally involved. You have done this. Eagerly waiting for more from you! Now all thats left is to wait for events to proceed to their logical conclusion... angry SEX!!!
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It's an honor to know that I left such a good impression. Glad that you were able to get into it so much, and thank you for the compliment. Can't doubt that impeccable logic though angry sex might earn this story getting a Rating change, we'll just have to see what transpires next.
This one is actually really interesing, i know where this is going!
I hope this get updated soon.
And i realized Spike get shipped with almost every character in the show
By Celestia this is adorable. You sir are a genius of the written word.
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Glad that you like what's going on so far, hopefully an update will be here soon enough.
Spike ships for the win good sir.
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Aww shucks I try my best, I wouldn't go as far as too say genius, I get lucky here and there.
Thanks for the comment MysticOath
Wow this story is the tits. Have all of my approvals.
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Lol thanks, glad that you're enjoying it
I had an ex that acted like Trixie does in this story once. Looking back, can't remember what I saw in her. Now one of my friends is dating her, and for the life of me I can't understand what he sees in her either. She isn't even that pretty anymore.
Enough rambling, though.
This story rocks. That's all there is to it. The sheer awesome factor brought on by the constant arguments and insults. I need more, sate my hunger, man!
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Perhaps there's just something oddly enticing about women who are intensely stubborn, and have a bad attitude. Lol nothing wrong with a good ramble, I know I sure do it more often than I'd like.
Good to hear from ya, and I'm happy to say that the next chapter is at least in progress, so maybe I can get the darned thing finished before the end of the week.
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I just realize I forgot to favorite this story. Let's fix that!
Anyway, that's good to hear. So many authors just abandon stories, I know I've done it before too. I'm in the process of thinking. Its a long, grueling process for me.
I want to be a better writer, and I know it isn't something that happens over night, but apparently the way I'm going about it isn't the best way. I'm using the 'tried and true' learn by doing method. Any advice you can just throw at me?
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Thanks always enjoy getting fav from awesome bronies.
Oh yeah I know how that is, I've left way too many unfinished works to the side in my day. The learn by doing method is an old default of mine and has worked well enough for me up till pretty much the start of this year. Bah I wish i had good advice to give on the subject, my updates usually take longer than they should, and it takes me like 5 proof reads before I think anything i write is worth submitting ( and even then there will always be a few lingering mistakes that i miss. At least my readers do me a solid and point them out when they notice them. ) Sometimes I'll just stare at the keyboard, and draw complete blanks for hours until i get fed up and walk away from it for a bit.
I guess the best advice i have really is to know exactly what you want from your story, and to figure out how to let your readers see what you see in it. Luckily for us writers our readers are quick as whips, and can usually figure out what we're trying to say, even if our words are a bit garbled with bad grammar, and spelling errors.
Sorry if my advice kinds stinks
YES! Update!
And now we finally have ourselves a fifth chapter.
Freakin 10,000 words, and I ashamed to admit that the original idea for this chapter involved it being longer still. But you readers have waited long enough, and I figured you could survive a little cliffhanger for a bit.
Hoping this chapter was worth your wait, and the dialogue didn't bore you to tears.
And now that this task is complete I can finally...READ THE LATEST CHAPTER TO ALDUIN UNBOUND WOOOOO!!! I swear i promised myself I wouldn't read it until this chapter was finished and now I can finally get my fix of SkyrimxMLP goodness.
Enough of my ranting, I'll have to get to work writing the next chapter to F.B.N.T.M. soon
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Heck yeah my friend!
Hope you enjoy
Oh, you tease...
Very good chapter, by the way. Glad I took the time to read it!
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Lol
Thank you very much Pro always a pleasure to receive your comments. Happy that you enjoyed it
Damn cliffhangers
In true choose your own adventure fashion Spike has one of two choices:
!. Save the really obnoxious degrading unicorn (he saves her life multiple times and gets treated worse than a servant).
or
2. Pretend like you hear nothing and go make yourself a sammich. That would end it quickly and on a bittersweet note.
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At least you know that the next chapter will be a bit more exciting from the get go.
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Spike put that sandwich down!
terrible grammar, fantastic story
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You got me there Arco, this thing seriously should have gotten a more thorough proof-reading before i jumped the gun and submitted it. Hopefully after the minor tweaks that have been applied it'll be a bit more tolerable.
Glad you like it still, and happy to receive your honest opinion.
Yes, the wait was worth it! I love how the story seems to flow so smoothly.
This update made my day.
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Thanks Mystic glad it was worth your patience, and always good hearing from ya.
This was good! I love your attention to detail. Always wanted to know about dragon biology
...What the hell is Cthulhu doing in a small pond?
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Thanks, I apologize if Spike's wealth of knowledge on the matter seems a little unexplained. I plan on clearing that up in future chapters. Happy to share my theory on the matter Dataguy.
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A darn good question! That guy is impossible to book for an appearance these days.
My reaction to Mako updating
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=GQeaS3Su6xk
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My lord that as hilarious, totally bookmarking that video. Glad the update had such a positive effect Stofen
Hell ya! New update! Freaking love this story bro but hate your dam cliff hangers!