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Magical Trevor


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Your life was going... as well as could be expected. At least, you think it was... When you wake up near a forest with most of your memories forgotten, how do you recover? As you attempt to find your place as a Gryphon in this new world of ponies, you struggle to discern the difference between reality and dreams. Are your ‘dreams’ speaking the truth, and you’re really a human, in a coma in another world, or are they simply recurring nightmares, trying to scare you? Your new friends tell you to ignore your dreams, but… what if your dreams are right, and you already have friends and family who are worried, and want you back? Who are you supposed to believe? The voices of ghosts in your mind, or the voices of those in front of you?


This is my first second person story, so let me know what to do to improve! I haven’t seen a second-person fic yet with a Gryphon for a main character, so… Yeah! Figured I’d give it a shot. I wanted to try something interesting with world exploration, and thought a second-person view would be cool for that. Here’s hoping I don’t disappoint! (But if I do, tell me how so I can improve! Thanks!)

Cover art is temp, until I can get a 'real' one done, but this is done by Sayluh on DeviantArt. She has very reasonable prices, so go check her out!

Disclaimer: This is a fanfiction, not intended to gain any profits. I do not own any rights, properties, etc, of My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic. All proper ownership, rights, etc belong to Hasbro. Please support MLP: FiM and Hasbro.

Chapters (4)
Comments ( 16 )

Mmm, curious to see where it goes, the concept is pretty original compared to the usual.

YOU SUCK!!!:trollestia::trollestia:

Can't wait to see where this goes. Oh, and I'll take a look for you, even if my grammar and spelling skills aren't that high.
Still, I think I'm up on the 'Milly-speak' enough to understand Dinky.

Yeah, silent works.

Also... dammit Pinkie!

Silent is OK. Worked for rpgs

damnit all the sillence is a problem for me:trixieshiftleft: oh well.

also this:Story with a second person gryphon in it. but yes they are uncommon:pinkiehappy:

3793382 It is? Hmm... Maybe I can make it a mix, then. I'll see what I can do. XD

Yeah, but that's, what, one out of hundreds of second-person stories. Point is that there aren't enough of them. I just wish I had started posting a couple years ago, when I first had the idea... No clue why I abandoned it after the first chapter.

"Not only that, you muse, but it would also make the overall health of the citizens healthier, wouldn’t it? If you didn’t have to pay, then you’d go see the doctor when you first feel sick to get the right cure, and thus get better much quickly, hopefully. Worry about money and you’d wait longer, and then it might also take longer to get better."

Subtle.

3794183 :eeyup:

Either that, or you're looking too deep into things, and giving me far more credit than I deserve... Never know... Trust me, things seem black and white now, but, well... Just wait. X3

Somepony... griffon has just opened up the wrong door.

Incoming headache in 3... 2... 1...

First things first... Ditzy needs an apology.

Secondly, keep both.

3894771 mornin bro across teh pond. Your vote has been dutifully counted. Have a plesent and sedition-free day, citizen!

3894790 :D the book chute from "the sink". LOOK OUT A COMMUNIST....Wait it's just a twig...my bad.

4149316 Why of course it is, citizen! I trust you have had an enjoyable day of freedom in this wonderful land free of communism?

(Sorry this hasn't updated in forever. Searching for a job kinda taking top priority right now. Next chapter is started, but i don't know when it will be fully written. We apologise for the wait, citizen!)

4149422 it's perfectly understandable in fact I never get mad at an author for taking a while to update I just shit bricks when I remember that I had been reading it and that it ever existed, which did happen once. XD

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