I live in central U.S., Kansas, just by the road to the Natural Wild Life Preserve. I had found it rather convenient.
Once I had inherited the lands, I built a rather large ranch on what's now my lands. I had intended to breed Horses on my lands, then I had opted for a smaller orchard. The rest of the lands, will be some lush forest. For as much as that will be. I did not have all that much left, after I had set up the pastures, and the small orchard by my house.
I had taken the tine, preparing all the pastures since it is the basis of what my ranch is all about. That started with removing all the soil, before I lay out new in an even layer, just thick enough for all the grasses. Then I had selected seeds for all the right grasses, thus making up the menu of the Ponies intended to live with me. I had then built scattered hills, where I planted selected trees.
Holes had been drilled, then the land had been marked, and fences created. Then I had connected the fence to my electricity, keeping my Ponies on the pasture chosen. Just as it keeps most others out.
Then I had built the barn, and stables for each of the pastures. Incidentally, the stables are in three floors, starting with the main ground level, where I am to keep large Horses, the second is where I will hold small Ponies. On the top floor, I keep all the feed.
At this point, I had managed to select a few small herds of chosen Ponies and Horses, I had managed to buy in for the ranch. Two stables had been filled up. I had laid the water line, so they have water, and I had managed to buy in all the required feed for about half a year. Naturally, I had chosen only fillies. They are all about two years of age. Now happily munching away, as they stand on the pastures.
Shortin' your description and put a few more enters between paragraphs. Then add on about...let's say 1800 words. Then I'll consider reading. Honestly I can't take something seriously with such a low word count. But here's some advice from a guy who did the exact same thing you're doing right now. Try to lengthen out EVERYTHING. Have a minimum of 2000 words a chapter, and try your best to make sure all the characters are in character. The only way to do that is rereading dialog. Trust me, you'll see things that scream to you "this doesn't belong in a normal every day sentence."
Yea but nice job writing a chapter with no dialog. It's a good start to learning how to lengthen out chapters. But I suggest you go into extreme detail about the world around you. EXTREME detail. Learning how to do that, or at least trying, is the best way to become a better author.
I think you can do it. I think a lot of people can do it. I'm STILL failing my english classes because of essays and shit. But I've got a story here on this site that has...1000 likes....yea I'm confused, but hell I'm grateful. Use my stories as a reference if you want, even see how some of my earliest works kinda transformed into the stuff I write now.
Your indents are AMAZING! You just need more spaces between paragraphs.
The first part, or the proloque is basically setting up the scene.
The second is to develop the mood, as to lead you into the story proper.
The third is the easing into the story, as such.
I hope to be able to publish more of the story, so that it can be enjoyable to read, in the intended manner, and not just as a farm story, some may, or may not enjoy quite as much as the story I'm about to tell.
3717266 Side from building up the scene, choosing exactly where and when to put in details is a challenge, it's the way it has to be.
This early on in the story, there is still plenty of room for changes.
There sinmply was no point in dialogue, in part, because the character was alone, in the first place, but hay, you need to build the scene, before the story could get interesting, right?
I have had a few stories, just like that, finding myself flooded with apreciation, before I had even truely started out. Possibly mere hours from publishing the initial chapter, I guess I hit the sweet spot, HuH?
Ofcuase, I'm still new to this site, I need to connect to the Audience I'm flirting with, or I'd fall flat.
3717268 indents? are you high
3717268 Is this by any means what you were hoping for?
3751070 I am in the process of reforming the format for the story, going beyond the mere adding of a line between the paragraphs, in hope to improve of the experience of the story.
I am also going over the story in order to improve on the story itself, not just the packaging.
This particular story has been left alone, gathering dust for far too long now. I need to do something more with it, before I have forgotten what I had in mind with it in the first place, as well as left any reader who may have enjoyed it behind along the way.
3717268 since you noticed my indents, I thought I should ask what you think of the new format.
I have started to go over the story in order to improve on more than mere packaging, in hopes to gather what readers still are interested, aside from what readers may be interested in the story, once I start writing on it again.
"I had taken the tine, preparing all the pastures since it is the basis of what my ranch is all about."
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