Fluttershy Goes to the Dentist

Fluttershy goes to Colgate to get her remaining bat fang filed down after some traumatic experiences. Colgate sort of becomes a therapist.

Written for EQD's Writer's Training Grounds #001: ”Bats!”

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SuperPinkBrony12

SuperPinkBrony12 #1 · Dec 31st, 2013 · · ·

...until the nitrous oxide tank was empty.

And then all hay broke loose.

Avox

Avox #2 · Dec 31st, 2013 · · ·

This story was so awesomely awesome that I cannot even contain myself.

I loved how you characterized Colgate. Fluttershy and Bic Mac.... and that ending...

You've earned a follow/favorite/upvote from me.

Tine Croi

Tine Croi #3 · Dec 31st, 2013 · · ·

That was so hilarious! What makes it even funnier is that IT'S ACTUALLY REALISTIC!

Oh, and are you SURE it's your first fic? It's rather well written.

Seether00

Seether00 #4 · Dec 31st, 2013 · · ·

Whoops!

YB #5 · Dec 31st, 2013 · · ·

See? It doesn't need to be long to be good.

Well, maybe it's a bit too short to get featured. But that's still a nice little story that made my day. :D
Here, have my upvote, you deserved it well. Thanks for writing this

elue1234

elue1234 #6 · Jan 1st, 2014 · · ·

This was an excellent story my friend.
NO grammatical errors (As far as I see)
It tied together nicely
Bravo.

housedoc

housedoc #7 · Jan 2nd, 2014 · 1 · ·

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Wow, thanks so much for those kind words! Of course, all types of feedback are very much appreciated for one's first fic, but to get such positive comments feels super-awesome (and a bit unexpected).

3712106

Thank you! Well yes, it is the first fic I've finished, and the first one I've ever posted anywhere. I've started writing two other fics but I completely suck at getting anything done. The tight deadline for this was a good thing for my productivity.

3716445

I'm very happy to hear that, especially since English is my second language. Perhaps that makes me triple-check everything extra carefully?

elue1234

elue1234 #8 · Jan 2nd, 2014 · · ·

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Tine Croi

Tine Croi #9 · Jan 4th, 2014 · · ·

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Yeah, I hear ya brother/sister. I have several amazing ideas brewing for an originalish story. My main one does include characters that were... created FROM characters from MLP, but they aren't the exact same. For the most part. Discord is basically how he was in his first episode, but other than that everyone is pretty much an OC. And there aren't many characters, not even that many background characters. At least with the first draft of the idea. Eh, if you want to know more on this story I've been brewing, PM me.

Slendermare

Slendermare #10 · Jan 5th, 2014 · 1 · ·

3712092 agreed

Puzzle Reader

Puzzle Reader #11 · Jan 29th, 2014 · 1 · ·

Ah yes, nitrous oxide leaks.

Zeyon The Green

Zeyon The Green #12 · Feb 6th, 2014 · · ·

You know that gas is pretty fun, but you have to watch what you do. I accidentally gave my dentist an uppercut while flexing a muscle to say show I was okay. Fluttershy you so crazy...

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