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This is just a story I'm doing for fun constructive criticism is welcome after all it is my first human story. I hope everyone enjoys it :)
Twilight has a mishap with a teleportation spell which transfers her to a new world. Creatures she had never seen before of all different shapes and sizes roaming the land and sky. She is greeted by a young warrior and together they must find a way to return her home.
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Oh buck... The hell... YES!!!!
Someone actually made a monster hunter/mlp crossover. I am so fanboying right now. Look, I don't care who you are or how good a writer you are, I bloody Love You!
Okay, now that that's out of the way, I noticed a few minor mistakes in the fic, and your descriptiveness is a ways on the weak side. Add a bit more description so we can paint a better mental picture here.
A Zinogre as her first monster? Aww and I was hoping it was the Brachydios. That thing is fun
Gotcha and thanks :) and don't worry her first monster will be special let's just say
Ok that's much better. The Rathalos image is fixed, and the chapter is much more smooth. Glad you lengthened the fight and made it much more realistic, though in all honesty, if those two are good enough to take on both a Rathian and a Rathalos, a great jaggi is just going to be cannon fodder to them. Overall, the chapter was much more enjoyable than before, keep up the good work.
Love it, love absolutely everything about it you should earn a medal just for the idea!
Great chapter good sir. I'm on the fence about new characters joining in the hunting party, but Soul seems interesting enough. Just wondering though. which monter hunter game are you basing this off of. Monster hunter 3 for the Wii, or Ultimate for the WiiU/3DS?
It's mostly off of the new MH3U but I'll just add little bits of monsters once in awhile from other games just to make it more interesting.
I've always found it odd how you can fish up a Niebelsnarf like it's in water. Anyways, nice chapter once again. Keep up the good work.
This is a decent story, but you really need a proof reader.
Yeah I could use an editor to help pick up what I miss.
Gonna have to point out a few things I view as flaws here. First of all, not much is mentioned about Twilight's appearance, so there is little in way that you can claim this as anthro. Her horn and her wings are missing, you have not said she still has fur or anything like that. I believe that the tag needs to be changed to "Human" instead.
Descriptions in the story are a little lacking, but the byplay between characters and the fights are well done. The most glaring problem that you have though are quite a few spelling errors. I am not the best person to look to for a proof reader though. I can recognize some of the mistakes but not all. I would recommend getting a proof reader or a beta.
My money's on the Nargacuga. That thing is awesome, and I so want to see Twilight in ninja armour
An interesting chapter, and I like the representations of demon and spirit modes you've given. I assume that Rain has a longsword of every element right? One thing I don't like about this fic is that Twilight is basically mooching off of Rain. I would find the fic more enjoyable if she was responsible for her own arms and armour, which is quite feasible now that she has shown good competence in the way of hunting, just a thought though.
He has only some (expect some material grinding chapters in the future) but not all and I plan to change that with an upcoming chapter because I have something in mind that will force her to do that so don't you worry.
FINALLY A CROSSOVER FIC ABOUT THIS GAME hey thanks for making this and i was wondering, in one of my fics i will be including a monster hunter crossover fic and i wanted to include your characters in or vise vers
Two words, Called It!!!
Someone actually did this...? OMFG I LOVE YOU!!!!
Hey it's me again great chapter but took too long to come out for just a thousand words. Yes i understand real life n' stuff but still dude you gotta be faster devote all your free time cause u got fans
So who does own the pictures and characters?
Also, love the story! Monster Hunter is amazing, so why not combine it with some Ponies?
Combining "Monster Hunter" with "MLP" = 100% combination success rate! (Monster Hunter joke. It was lame...)
3942507 Nah it wasn't that bad.
The Death Trio is almost here
I'm so stoked
Hmm, I was expecting Twilight to feel uncomfortable in her armour due to it's... rather provocative design. That's the one thing I don't like about these kinds of armours for the female characters, makes them all look like a bunch of street girls.
Okay, I wanna know two things.
1) What is that absolute masterpiece of badassery that reaper is wearing?
2) Something I've addressed in my own fic, but haven't seen addressed here. What's going on in Equestria? How are the other ponies reacting to Twilight's disappearance, or are you pulling a Deus Ex Narnia here?
death stench armor and it's a surprise i don't want to spoil it for anyone till the very end
what is the setting of this one exactly i have only played mh3u on the wii u and a bit of the original i don't know this village
it's somewhat of a mix of a bunch of the different monster hunter generations and where they met was a village from the japanese version of monster hunter portable 3rd and mixes with different things from monster hunter freedom unite as well as the recent monster hunter ultimate 3 with the village and new port
yay mr.nibbles lol
they sure can be a pain sometimes to hunt and to dodge if its gigantic like the one in the arena
hehe i guess Soul is secretly a perv saying the nargecuga suits Twilight very well
i can agree since the stats and skills are very nice for ranged hunters that improves dodging skills or was that Barioth set that improve the dodging skills?
and not forget the sexy look for female hunters
also i guess since Twilight used to be a pony she wont be fazed much for wearing skimpy armor since normally ponies are nude.
lol and a new sport was created..... The Barroth Rodeo
oh my Kushla Daora man i hate that one because of the wind barrier ugh
also i hope Twilight will meet a Kirin or a herd of em at some point.
man that will be sorta awkward for her since she used to be a pony
3718855 what are you gay
it took me 1 year to learn how to use the bow. also I had 5 mins left when I hunted a zinogre as i was hunting it i had the fully upgraded brachydios switch axe with goldbeard ceadus armour with 20 lightning defence. if you say I'm bad at the game i can solo almost any monster except hallowed yhen moran
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any updates soon?
MOAR MOAR MOAR
2013?!
Wow, World wasn’t even a thought back then