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Ouch, that ending hurt dear sir. However, this was a very good read, no matter its short length, I enjoyed every line. Great job!
It was a nice quick read. Really short but not rushed at all. Peculiar.
Just wondering, did you pull a couple of the scenarios from Two's Company, Three's a Crowd? 'Cause there were definite parallels. (Not that that's a bad thing. I personally like references such as these.)
Ending was really obvious from the synopsis, but interesting nonetheless. However, the narration is full of tell and little actual show. A few tense issues as well.
I created an account and submitted this late last night, before I went to bed. I wake up today to find 6 likes, 3 comments, and someone watching me. What a way to wake up.
>>Ryuler I am glad that you enjoyed it, and the ending hurt me a bit too, and I'm the one who typed it.
>>theoneOshen Peculiar indeed, because I only spent a few short hours on it. As for the possibility of references, while I myself like them as well, I didn't really mean to pull any from any other fics.
>>Kurbz I'm not quite sure I understand what you mean by "full of tell and little actual show." Could you explain a little more, please?
God i love melancholy. While it does seem like you spared little words for details, I think it fits this fic just right.
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http://www.coloradospringsfictionwritersgroup.org/archive/2003-10_article-creative_writing_101-show_versus_tell.pdf
That explains it better than I could.
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Indeed it does explain it very well. I'll be sure to work on that, thank you.
A very good short read, loved the way you did Octavia, I just can't see vinyl as a drinker though. That was the only real thing that bugged me, loved the story and premise though. Could have shed a little light on WHY vinyl was dying..unless you wanted it to be a mystery which is
entreging
The ending made me almost cry.
On a lighter note however, i managed to imagine the song in my head and it was beautiful, very beautiful.
vinyl...no...
Bitter sweet