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Flint Sparks

I gosh darn did it.


Carelessly giving, Rarity has been cursed. On Hearth's Warming Eve, she will put her beloved friends first. Will she learn true generosity and cleanse her soul? Or will she fail her mission and remain a fool?

Edited by Realm of Mere Shadows and Prak
Preread by Manes

Chapters (1)
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Comments ( 22 )

Merry Christmas to you, buddy:heart: great story.

Well, you just handed my flank to me.

I thought you actually had all the narration in the story rhyming, like I did here.

I guess I'd be pretty unoriginal then.

A story in rhyme is quite unique. I have never seen one done in quite this way, and it was interesting to say the least.

As with most rhyme schemes though, it got old pretty fast. I like what you did with the story, how it's structured and how you executed the lesson, but the rhyme did feel a bit forced at times.


this dress would ensure Rainbow would have no fear.

I see what you did there...

And of course, Merry Christmas and Happy holidays!

I needed a holiday'sy story to end my Christmas Eve night, and though dislike your ships, this fic was all right. There were some parts, scattered here and there, but by the end of it all, I really didn't care. This story touched my heart, from the start. I was sad to see it end, but all the same, merry Christmas, my friend!

(See, I can rhyme, too! Isn't that annoying?)

Someone got it. Don't know who took offense, but I was just representin'. :pinkiesmile:


Don't know if you're supporting my rhyming skills, or saying I can't, but I was just being silly, with no attempt at quality.

It's hard to do consistently. Imagine writing four thousands words and maintaining the best flow possible. It's not as easy as it looks. :twilightoops:


You had me at 4k words! My fics never get off the ground on word basis alone! Rhyming doesn't need to even happen to wreck my writing process.

Hate to be the bearer of bad news... but you've got errors.

Rarity cowered before the giant construct before her, which resembling a gem.

Resembled would work better here - tense agreement and all that.

“Twilight, darling, come take a look. I know you may be tired, but I brought you a book. It’s the history of our nation, a complication.

Compilation: a book made up of the independent work of multiple authors, such as to make a subject easier to understand. Complication: something nobody wants.

Other than that, good job. Very impressive, although I came in thinking the entire thing was going to be in rhyme, you impressed me enough with the advanced nature of some of those rhymes that I got over my minor disappointment quickly.


I did attempt to edit my previous comment with some positives, as well, so do review if you hadn't seen the edit already.

I did read them, and I thank you for it. :twilightsmile: I did need a little non-rhyming set-up so the curse would make sense (because it wouldn't make sense if the rhyming was before the curse was cast, know what I mean? :rainbowhuh: )

T'was a very nice read! I don't know how you managed to rhyme for, what was it, 5K words? I never would've been able to match that, even despite your frequent hiccups.

Although the end was nice for the most part, I was kinda hoping the rhyming would be dropped for the last few paragraphs. Perpetuating it until the last word made it feel like we were still lost in Rarity's holiday curse.

But was it a curse? :trollestia: You make a fair point, but I felt as if I had to finish strong on a rhyme note. :twilightblush: Alas, it's already written. Editing was a pain, and I feel as if it's fine the way it is. I hope you enjoyed it more than I did writing it. :rainbowlaugh:


I was recommended to read this.
I was not disappointed.
Such a work deserves really much more views.
Not only did you successfully rhyme for almost five thousand words, but you actually tell a good story, too.
Wow. Words fail me again.
Here, I fav'd it. Trust me, it is a seal of quality. Not a valuable or a worthwhile one, but still, it's mine. :moustache:

Let it be known that the author of this story is certifiably insane. Let them also have a thumb up. That is all.

Hi Flint.

I know you can add the story yourself, but I also wait and let others review mine before doing so. The rhyming felt a little forced at times, but it was a unique quirk that kept me really entertained and felt like I was reading an old holiday story.


Rock on;

Spikey OH spikey ,She gave you a smooch, A little more like this & a dracony will pop out of somemare!:derpytongue2::pinkiehappy::ajsmug::rainbowlaugh::raritywink::twilightblush:

A poet ? A piece? A story complete? Did Spikey give her the saphire scrunchie?:moustache::facehoof:

Wow. I imagine this was hard and time-consuming to write!
Since this was essentially a poem, I would've had an easier time reading it if the line breaks followed the rhyming couplets.
A few plot details still aren't clear to me, which I assume are just things left out for the sake of the poetic form.
Overall this was a great read. Thanks for writing it!

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