When Sugarcube Corner burned down, Twilight offered to let Pinkie live with her. Living with Pinkie can bring out a lot of things in a person, though. Annoying habits, odd quirks, and feelings that had been ignored for a long time.
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fallen starr
How can I be home and still feel out of place.
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Just curious, but why did you change their names rather the keep them the same?
Interesting. I'd like to see where this goes (I mean besides the obvious TwiPie shipping).
3673563 A lot of humanized fics do that.
3673563 I feel like it makes it more easy to see them as humans instead of ponies. Thanks for reading!
3673699 don't worry, I'm already working on chapter 2
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Sure, why not?
I'll admit, I was very nearly put off by the different names. Granted, I don't read a huge amount of humanized fics, but I'm gonna give this one a shot.
The premise is interesting enough to hook me. Not something I haven't seen before (the house burning down, that is), but that's not always a bad thing. The characters felt a little bit plastic to me; the Cakes just lost their home and business, and Pinkie lost her beloved pet and very nearly lost much more, but it just didn't feel like they were that broken up by it. Pinkie could have reached out for a shoulder to cry on, or begged one of the firefighters to look for Gummy. Just something to keep in mind for the future: characters that are believable in the scenario are many times more memorable.
Still, like I said, I'm gonna give it a shot. I hope you continue, and I'll be looking out for the next chapter!
Have a great day!
3674359 sorry, why not what?
3674410 oh, that scenario had been done? I really didn't know that...I mean, I think I've read one, but that's it?Hopefully this one will be different.
The first chapter I wanted everyone to seem a bit detached from what had happened, almost as if they didn't believe it. With the next chapters I wanna get more into the emotions, as seen through Twilight's eyes.mim really working on putting in more detail and emotion in there.
Thank you for reading, and I hope you continue to give it a try.
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Perhaps not specifically Pinkie with Sugarcube Corner, but I have indeed seen a few fics where the premise was someone's house burning down / getting destroyed, followed by a focus on adapting to living with a friend.
I guess the emotional detachment makes sense, story-wise; a survivor could be in mild shock over the ordeal. Glad the emotions are coming out in the upcoming chapters, then.
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I meant, sure, I'll follow this.
3677403 oh, right. Thanks!
A nicely-paced and entertaining continuation.
This is a fantastic story. If I went through what Pinkie did, I don't know what I would do. Twilight is an amazing freind.
This line hit pretty close to home for me. I can see that Twila really wants to comfort her as best she can, but sometimes it's really hard to relate to someone when you haven't been in a similar situation yourself. Pinkie tries putting on her brave face, but in the end it still comes crashing down.
I'm glad I continued to read. Have a great day!
3682038 thank you!
3682073 yeah, she is! Haha, thank you for reading, I hope you continue to enjoy.
3683038 I'm glad you continued too! And I'm really glad you like it. I hope you have a great holiday, and thanks so much.
I've never been a huge fan of Twinkie, but this is really great so far. Keep up the good work!
3689651 Well, I'm glad you like this one then! Thank you!
I like the direction you're taking the story. Having Pinkie go out and use her connections to get a new job is a good idea, and I could totally see her actually doing that. That's one of the things I really like in stories: when the characters are believable in the situstion, I feel it really helps with immersion.
As far as your author's note, I like the emphasis on Twila's thoughts and the parallel with the Sparity romance on the side. It really does sound like she's working through a crush and I can only hope for her sake that Pinkie feels the same.
Keep up the good work and have a great day!
I am very okay with the direction and execution of this. Keep it up!
This is adorable!
The story is pretty good so far and the look into Twila's thoughts is good. Also huzzah for side Sparity.
.Okay, I'm interested
Definitely keeping an eye on this story.
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3730306 thank you guys! I appreciate it.
3730217 thank you. I'm glad you liked the Sparity. I was afraid people might think it was forced. And yay (
) for liking Pinkie getting a job. I just do t see her being able to sit around all the time, plus she is depending on Twi to take care of most things that cost money. Thank you!
Even Twilight is confounded by Twilight's actions.
Things Anime has taught me: Twilight Edition. Still....loving the story.
Hoooooo boy...here we go!
Poor Twilight
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And what exactly has anime taught you that would be applicable to this story?
All of the things that I`ve learned from anime would only be useful if I was trapped inside a virtual reality game, or if I was part of the forces protecting the last of humanity from a race of naked giants.
3763962 Just a bit, but that's how she is when faced with something she's never dealt with before, eh?
3764033 3770463 I haven't actually watched a lot of anime (my friends are just getting me into it. I've watched Madoka Magica, Little Witch Academia, and the first episode of Attack on Titan) so I'm not sure what this means? Is that good? I'm really glad you love the story though.
3764144 3765264 Fasten your seatbelts, cause we're in for a ride. (At least, I hope you'll think so).
3770928 lol, its meant to be a joke on Twi reactions. They seem very romance animesque to me.
Hmm, normally I don't like this pairing too much, but you've done an excellent job of catchingy attention with this story. Well played, I look forward to reading more.
I thought this was humanized?
Very cute!
-Cheers-
3771001 Oh, okay.
3772769 3777947 3777884 Thanks! Glad you liked it guys.
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Oops...it is. I just seem to forget that sometimes. You don't know how often I have to erase manes and write hair. I'll fix that...Thanks!
3778076 Na, but it's really hard to find humanized that reflect my headcanon for them. I have a blog post about it all here, and that's also why I'm describing them chapter 1.
Love it.
D'awww, as corny as that "I don't like you, I love you" cliche is, you used it to great effect here. The grand opening scene at the restaurant seemed a bit rushed, though the little touches Pinkkie left as she worked were a nice idea. I guess you could write it off as Twilight being in a love-induced stupor so the time just flew by before she knew it!
Looking forward for what's to come. Have a great day!
3778634 Thank you!
3778845 Yeah. To be honest, I almost stopped at 'I'll be home early' but then I realized I had to add in a line or two, and it was perfect to have them just after that, but I also wanted to focus on Twila's watching Pinkie as opposed to getting involved in the 'opening' bit. I'm really glad you like what I've done so far and I hope I don't disappoint with what's coming next.
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They're just really hairy
Excellence.
True excellence.
I do hope you continue the story, if you can't/don't I understand completely, I really dug the what you were doing, and the characters and world you set up. Oh well, good luck in school tho! It can cripple even the greatest of authors.
3810807 what I'm going to try to do is write a little every day, but I have an overload of hours and while my classes aren't hard, they take a lot of time and work so I've got to concentrate on this stuff. Thank you for reading and liking this story, though. That means a lot to me.
3788075 thank you.
Cute ending
Definitely keeping an eye out for any possible sequel.
Weakest? I would hardly call anything related to this story weak.
Except that it's over.:(
3772821 Maybe Inkie and Blinkie always wore fur coats.
4406418 I should have been clearer with my joke.
...Well, I tried. I really tried. But this pointless renaming keeps throwing me off. It`s inconsistent, counterlogical and I want to eviscerate whoever invented the name "Twila" with a dull rusty spoon.
Is that supposed to be and? I also want to say this story is so tragic, but it still manages to make me smile at the same time and I think you made this story really well
. Have a like 