No News is Good News
Applejack gave a slight chuckle.
“Heh. Good one, Bloom. Nice ta know ya ain’t lost yer sense o’ humor.” The little filly she was speaking to simply stared. Applejack’s playful expression quickly fell. She looked over the little pony, and her eyes began feeling wet.
“Are you alright?” the filly asked innocently. Applejack tried to compose herself, but seeing the look of unfamiliarity on her sister’s face made it impossible.
“I… I’m sorry. I need ta go.” She turned and darted through the door as two figures entered.
“Applejack, what’s-” Spike didn’t have time to finish his question as the distraught mare ran by. He turned to Apple Bloom, who seemed just as confused as he was.
“What’s wrong with Applejack?”
“All I did was ask her name. I didn’t mean ta upset her.”
“But… don’t you know her name?” She placed a hoof on her chin, pondering.
“... I don’t think so. But, hay, what do I know? I can’t even think of my own name right now.”
“Apple Bloom?” The little filly gasped.
“Is that it? I like it. Got a nice ring to it.”
Spike turned to the doctor, utterly dumbfounded. Dr. Star walked to the side of the small pony and more closely inspected her wound. He sighed as he reached a particularly speedy diagnosis.
“Trauma from the impact has instigated a case of retrograde amnesia, not very common. Her brain is currently incapable of accessing her stored memories.”
“What can we do?”
“Not much we can do. We’ll just have to wait it out. Eventually her memories should be accessible again. Until that time, she should go about life as normal.”
“All right. When can she leave?”
“She should be set to go tomorrow at noon.” Spike over-looked the filly, non-verbally apologizing for her current predicament.
“‘Kay. I’ll go tell her family. Thanks, doc.” The doctor nodded and returned to his patient as the dragon exited the room.
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Spike drudged through the small town of Ponyville, paying no attention to the many passersby giving their greetings. He entered the gate to the massive orchard run by the farming family. After a few more minutes of walking, he came to the door of the main house. Raising a claw, he sounded three relatively loud knocks through the house. A large stallion answered.
“Oh. Howdy, Spike,” Big Macintosh greeted, “Sorry, it’s not a great time right now. Bloom hasn’t come home yet and AJ’s actin’ like her voice has been stolen.” This took Spike by surprise.
“You… don’t know?”
“Know what?”
He simply sat watching the ponies in the room, reading them. The orange mare practically shaking. The large red stallion glaring at no particular point on the floor. Primarily his attention locked onto the elderly green mare, who seemed to be entirely vacant, no emotion or sense of awareness to be seen. Spike just stared at them, waiting for some sort of reaction. When he knew none was coming, he felt it time to leave.
“Anyway, the doctor said you could pick her up tomorrow at noon. Just thought you should know.”
Spike’s words were met with silence. He stood and walked to the door, ultimately deciding that now wasn’t an entirely appropriate time to speak with them. He bid them a quiet farewell before stepping through the door to the Apple house, beginning the long trek back to the library.
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“Spike! I just heard what happened. Are you alright?” His spiritual caretaker dashed toward him and began inspecting him from top to bottom, taking note of several patches of dirt and minor scratches. He would ordinarily try pushing her away, but today he appreciated the thought.
“I’m fine, Twilight,” he groaned out, “It’s Apple Bloom you should be worried about. When I pulled her out of the road, she hit her head on a large rock.” Twilight scooped the dragon into the biggest hug he had ever received.
“I know. The girls and I were about to meet up at the hospital to see her. Before I left, I wanted to tell you something.”
“What’s that?” She pulled out of the hug and gave him a quick peck on the forehead
“I am so proud of you,” he chuckled, rubbing the back of his head before a seriously harsh glare crossed her face, “But if you ever do something that stupid and reckless again, I’ll… I’ll… I don’t even know what I’ll do, but it will be bad! Got it?” Spike gulped and nodded. “Good!”
She gave him one more hug before walking to the door.
“And don’t stay up too late. After the day you've had, I’m sure you could do with some sleep.” He was considerably tired. So much so that he completely neglected, without immediately realizing it, to inform his friend of the filly's unusual condition.
He grunted and walked upstairs as he heard the door close. He hopped into his basket and pulled the covers over himself, though he knew he wasn’t going to be sleeping tonight.
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@ThaStrangr...
Yes, this chapter (2) also felt rushed through from the reader perspective (and that is never a positive thing). My advice would be to do some add-on & revision work at some point. In particular, you seem to have skipped over (or neglected) Spike informing Twilight Sparkle over Apple Bloom's amnesiac condition, or at least it reads that way.
Always remember: It is NEVER "too late" to go back and add-on, edit, refine, revise, or even completely overhaul your fan-fiction work(s) for the better.
3718318 Yes, I had intended to revise this chapter a bit later. Stupid me decided to start writing four stories at once.
I could add Spike informing Twilight, but it was my intention to make him more distant, less aware, out of personal guilt for the incident (which is brought up later).
I thank you for your feedback.
Oh, poor AJ! Still, once they get over the shock, I'll bet the Apples pull together-- They're good at that.
3726092 This story is about everyone feeling broken and empty (I'm a jerk like that
). AJ can't cope with her little sister looking at her as if she were a total stranger. You'll see more of that in the next chapter, when the other five go to see Bloom, completely unaware of her current state. They probably would handle it your way, but where's the fun in that? 
3720392...
Spike being distracted, or informing Twilight Sparkle having slipped his mind, is fine. The problem is from the reader perspective that it looks like the Author neglected that factor. So if/when you do get around to a revision & add-on, I would suggest describing that more in depth so it looks like the character un-intentionally neglected to inform, not the Author.
3726917 Thank you. I hadn't really considered that. I will try to emphasize his distraction more when I get to it.
3728746...
Always happy to help &/or provide guidance.
If a character is being neglectful (intentional or not), the Author has to show the reader audience that said character is being neglectful, even if by accident, distraction, or forgetfulness. The Author cannot "not write" anything to show the characters' flaws &/or mistakes, that makes the Author look neglectful.
And that, is the irony of literary writing.
3728789 Ah, the delightful specifics of modern literature.
I think this needs a tragedy tag. Losing memories due to injury? Truly quaifies in my book.
3771376 Well, if you truly believe so, consider it done.