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Fan of animated cartoons, comics and classic video games via Mario and Sonic. I enjoy a good romantic story and happy endings.

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The Nightmare Rarity debacle has left the Elements of Harmony defeated and only Spike remains.

Nightmare Rarity tries to convince Spike to Join her, only for the dragon to put up on offer of his own, all to save what is his.

This story has been edited by fellow FIMfiction.net author: Bico.

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I like the concept, but it's a bit hard to read due to the technical errors, I think. Letting any decent editor have a go at it would do it a world of good.

The Nightmare Rarity debacle has left the Elements of Harmony defeated and only Spike remains...Witness as Nightmare Rarity tries to convince Spike to Join her...only for the Dragon to put up on offer of his own...all to save what is his.

The Nightmare Rarity debacle has left the Elements of Harmony defeated and only Spike remains. Nightmare Rarity tries to convince Spike to join her, only for the dragon to put up an offer of his own, all to save what is his.

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If you'll be willing to edit, I'll give you credit.:fluttershysad:

I do not understand how people could dislike this… :fluttershysad:

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I don't get it either as I felt it had an emotional punch to it all. :applecry:

This story deserves more thumbs up than it already has. In my opinion, this story is really good… even though Spike sacrificed his own life. :fluttershysad:

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Could do, though it might take me a couple days since I'm a bit busy. If you copy and paste the text from the Edit screen into a google doc, you can share it and either allow comments only or direct editing by the people you send the link to.

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Okay it's done and it's entitled by the name of this tale. I hope you can find it. :unsuresweetie:

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Well, it'd probably be easier if you messaged me the link.

3667504 This story gives a great deal of feels. It has an excellent concept. It has a great execution. The dialog is amazing. And I am giving it a downvote. Because the technical aspect of this story, the grammar and the easiness of the reading, are THAT POOR. The errors, and the fact that it is VERY HARD to read, overshadows the great parts so much that it goes from a Grade A, Instant Fave, into something that makes me very sad. It has such potential, and it comes so close to reaching it, but then it just dies. I want to like this. The good parts are that good I want to love it despite its flaws. The flaws are just too much to overcome. Please, if you repost this after getting it cleaned up, send me a PM. If you can fix what is broken about this while maintaining the best of it, I will change my vote in a hoofbeat.

The start was rather confusing, but the ending, it hurt. :flutterrage::fluttercry::raritycry:

I've taken some time to read this, so that you had the opportunity to do some edits from the comments. I'm guessing you have because it looks and reads much better than the comments imply. There's still some errors, but a very interesting and well executed story. Although, I must admit that the end comes a tad fast.

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FINALLY I gotten this story re-edited.

Please give this tale a second look and see the changes that my editor, BICO, did for me. :fluttercry:

That's Bico, a fellow writer on this website.

3780734 Ok. I marked it unread and will comment again on it once I get around to it. I cant say when that will be. My time is fairly limited. And I currently have over 1.2k chapters worth of unread things. In favorites alone.

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Trust me, I know exactly how you feel about unread stories saved for later.

Im am so sad rhat I am lost form words to describe how I feel about how spike died:raritycry::fluttercry:
Can you make a sequel to this?:pinkiesad2:

RIP noble little drake:raritycry::facehoof::flutterrage::pinkiegasp::ajsleepy:

Should this have the Nightmare Rarity tag?

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