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Brew For Two

After Creating a mystery Potion, Zecora and Discord must work together to escape the twisted world created by Hysteria

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TCValley

TCValley #1 · Dec 22nd, 2013 · 1 · ·

...Geez.
That was intense.

Very nice. Good storyline, nice use of adjectives, and you made Zecora speak correctly.
There are a few errors, but they're small. Missing a space, misspelling a word, simple stuff like that.

She apprached the door and gently pushed it open with her hoof, making sure not to disrupt the phile in her satchel too much.

Careful of Approached there, and the tense jump.

Otherwise, wow.
You sure this is your first?

Comment posted by Platen Rhyme deleted Dec 23rd, 2013

Platen Rhyme

Platen Rhyme #3 · Dec 23rd, 2013 · 1 · ·

3667215 Indeed it was my first. Thanks for your input My computer has no spelling and grammar check for some odd reason so I was expecting some errors