Somepony was knocking on my door, and judging by the time it was too early to be the mailmare. I put my book down and took my time stretching. Bagheera whined as I got up and ruined his napping place next to me on the sofa. By the time I got to the door the knocking had stopped. Looking through the peephole on the door I saw Lyra there, and opened it up for her.
“Hey, Lyra. Come in.”
“Thanks.” She walked in and headed for the chairs in my living room. Lyra set her saddlebags down and sat in a recliner.
I closed the door and went into the kitchen to get a couple of sodas from the fridge. I took them back in and set them on the coffee table, then took a seat on the couch. My cat was meowing and walking along the back of the couch. Petting Bagheera seemed to placate him for now. “So, how’s it going?”
“Same as usual, but we’re all wondering how things are going with you.”
“Eh, I’m fine. It’s nice to take a break from all the pressure.”
Lyra leaned back and floated her soda up, popping the top of the can and taking a drink. “Pressure? I didn’t realize you were so stressed out before.”
I used the hoof-friendly pull-tab to open my soda and take a drink. “Yeah, everypony expected me to be some hero or something and act all perfect. That’s why it was refreshing to spend time with you, you didn’t think of me as some important pony.”
“I think you’re exaggerating a little… nopony is perfect, your friends weren’t expecting you to be. You’ve already apologized and it’s been two weeks. You should get back outside and quit moping.”
I groaned and slumped into the sofa. “Twilight sent you, didn’t she?”
“What, I’m not allowed to be worried either? I’m flattered you still want to hang out, but you need to have more than one friend, even if she comes with benefits.”
“Yeah, I guess so. I just don’t want to face Dash yet.” I stretched out a wing and put it over my cat, who began to groom the feathers.
“Not facing her isn’t going to make it any easier. You’ve got feelings for her, don’t you? I think that’s what this is really about.”
“And you, and Fluttershy, but I guess mostly her. I don’t know, she was like family to me!”
Lyra set down her empty can of soda. “Ponies are only as happy as they make up their mind to be. I know you’ve been rubbing ponies the wrong way lately, but now that they know going pony had side-effects for you, they understand.”
“Yeah, but I wonder if I’ll always be like this, my human traits rearing their head. Everypony else seems to be perfect.” I drank the last of my soda and burped, then set it down.
“You know that’s not true, surely you’ve heard of Twilight freaking out or Pinkie getting paranoid her friends didn’t want her around anymore, more than once?”
I lifted my hooves up in surrender. “You’re right. You should meet my psychiatrist, you’re both excellent at the guilt trips.”
Lyra stuck her tongue out at me. “Well then, I’ve got a concert to prepare for so I can’t stay and chat. I brought you a few more supplies for your first-aid kit. You think it’ll help you get a cutie mark?”
“Yeah.” I put my hooves down and then went over to rummage through the bag. “I was good at it on Earth, might as well be good at it here.”
She got up and walked around the chair. “Alright, but if you stay holed up in this house much longer I’ll drag you out of here by an ear, mister.”
“Fine,” I laughed and pushed her playfully towards the door. “Go on, you had better practice. Have a good day.”
“You too.”
Lyra opened the door and closed it behind her on the way out. I took the saddlebag over to another pair of saddlebags I had in the corner. There was gauze, splints, and other simple items that I transfered over to the bags. At some point I hoped to apply to be something like a paramedic, as Equestria was far too beautiful to have another indoor job.
There was knocking at my door again and I closed the flap of the bag and walked over to the door. I wondered why Lyra would have come back just moments after leaving. “Lyra, you don’t need to kno—” I opened the door and found Twilight standing there. “Oh.”
“Dawn.” Twilight barged in and looked around.
“Can I help you?”
“Yeah, nopony has seen Dash today and I’m worried.” Twilight turned around to face me again. “Have you seen her?”
“No, actually. I’ve been avoiding her if you hadn’t noticed. In fact, I’ve been avoiding all of you… so, if you don’t mind.” I gestured towards the door.
“This is no time to be childish!”
I shrugged. “You saw her yesterday, and not this morning. Isn’t there some rule about a pony having to be missing more than 24 hours before you start a pony-hunt?”
Twilight frowned. “Fluttershy says she broke up with Soarin, at least that’s her best guess. When she went to check on Dash, her and Soarin were gone. All his belongings were packed and taken.”
“Look, Twilight, I want to help, but I’m the last person Dash wants to see—”
“Dawn!” Twilight’s features hardened for a moment before softening slightly. She was still looking at me with narrowed eyes, and I felt myself backing up away from her. “Something’s wrong, and I’m worried. We’ve all given you space to deal with it because it’s what Dash said you’d like. We didn’t come over here and force you to apologize for yelling at Pinkie because Dash apologized for you. This whole time the one pony trying to help us understand what you’re going through while you hide in your stallion-cave was Dash!”
My mouth flopped open and closed a few times as I tried to think of a response to that. “I didn’t know…”
“Of course you didn’t. We’re not mean ponies, Dawn. We’re all just worried about you, and it has been a bit of a challenge getting used to your personality. We aren’t trying to make you feel alone because you used to be a human. As far as any of us care, you’re a pony and a close friend. So, I want you to help us find Dash, and I’d very much like it if you’d start visiting us all again.”
I smiled and nodded, then hugged Twilight. “Thanks, Twilight…” I let go and headed over to get my saddlebags. “I’ll help look for her, just gotta grab some stuff.” It only took a moment to strap the saddlebags in place.
“Thanks, Dawn.”
“Who else is looking for her?”
Twilight opened the door and held it for me as I walked out. “Rarity, Applejack, Big Mac, Fluttershy, Pinkie, and knowing how much trouble they have with listening to their sisters, probably all the Cutie Mark Crusaders.”
“Wow, all because she wasn’t in her house this morning and Soarin ran off with his tail between his legs?” I smirked, he was a jerk anyway and Dash deserved better.
“Yeah, now I’ve divided Ponyville into grid squa—”
“I don’t need it, Twilight. You mares can stick to the grid, but if you want to catch an emotionally distraught pegasus, you’ve got to think like an emotionally distraught pegasus.”
Twilight closed the door to my home and raised an eyebrow. “I… can’t find any logical basis for that assumption. You’re not Dash, nor are your emotional circum—”
“Shhh.” I put a hoof on her lips. “It’s a saying.”
She used her magic to bat my hoof away. “Hmm? From Earth?”
“Elmer Fudd, famous rabbit hunter and philanthropist,” I lied. I looked at her and realized she wouldn’t get the reference, then sighed at the lost opportunity.
“Okay, if you think it’s best. If you find her, stop by the library and let us know.”
“Sure thing.” I saluted her and then flew up to the roof of my house and perched on top of the chimney to look around.
The first thing I noticed was that the sky was devoid of clouds. Dash usually kept a few hanging low over town to take naps in. That meant the weather team had already done the weather for the day without her. If she wasn’t taking a nap after her morning weather duty, then she must have left during the night.
I considered where she’d want to go to get some privacy. She could have chased after Soarin to try and win him back, possibly all the way to Cloudsdale. Knowing Dash, she was too stubborn to take him back if he’d dumped her, and odds are she’d gotten sick of him and dumped him first.
There wasn’t a possibility she was at a friend’s house or hiding in the apple orchard, as she’d have been found and no search called.
I scanned the roofs of all the buildings in town, and then looked over the Everfree forest. Despite it not being a safe place to go, I began to focus more and more on it. There wasn’t really any place in town she could go to be alone. Each building had ponies living in it, and there were plains on the sides of town not bordered by the Everfree or apple orchard.
My wings flared and I let the breeze flow other the feathers, getting a feel for the air currents. Twilight had said they were searching the town, so I might as well look around the forest. I jumped off the roof and glided forward until I felt the wind change into an updraft. I beat my wings and climbed, gaining altitude above the trees. From up here, I couldn’t see the forest floor or any signs of a pony who didn’t want to be found.
There was a clearing not far from the edge of the forest so I swooped down, circling as I descended into it. I landed amidst some tall grass that was tinted a dark green. Thorny bushes bordered the clearing I was in.
A feather on one of the bushes caught my eye. It was cyan, and most likely from Dash. She could have come out here and sat down to have some time alone to think. However, she should have come back by now if that’s all that was going on.
Taking another look around the clearing a patch of flattened grass stood out. It could have been from a pony sitting down in the grass, and after looking closer I saw a hoofprint. She could have been here, then flown through the bushes if something had spooked her.
I cleared my head of any negative thoughts about what could have happened to her, and followed the path through the bushes and into the forest. There was a small creek another twenty feet ahead. It provided a nice clear path to fly along, as the trees weren’t growing too close together.
At the water’s edge were more hoofprints, and a jagged branch had a tuft of yellow and red hair hanging off of it. It was looking more and more like she’d had to flee something, but why wouldn’t she have gone straight back to town?
I hovered over the creek and looked around. It took me a minute just to find the path back to the clearing. The trees were all so black and similar to one another, I could see how easy it’d be to get disoriented. Looking up, I tried to force my way up through the foliage. The branches were almost woven together like a net, making it impossible to just fly straight up and get out. Dash had likely flown downstream looking for an exit.
While flying along the path of the small creek I kept an eye out for signs of broken branches. For some reason they seemed to stand out to me. Perhaps the larger pony eyes offered improved vision. At the very least, my vision was definitely better than back on Earth.
A large branch was broken off of a tree and I stopped to look at it. There were several large limbs from nearby trees with a gap between them next to the broken branch. Claw marks covered the branches and the nearby tree trunk. It looked like something had gotten stuck in the branches, and had to force its way loose.
I passed the branches and noticed a skid mark in the muddy floor. After poking my hoof through some of the mud that had piled up I saw another cyan feather, a sign I was on the right path. She must have given something the slip. I continued forward, looking for another sign but not finding any.
Just as I was about to turn around and see if I’d missed something, I saw a small cave. It was nearly hidden beneath the roots of a massive, old tree. I walked towards it, realizing that whatever was in it I had no way to light it up. I’d have to hope there wasn’t a grizzly bear or something living in it.
“Dash?” I stood to the side of the cave entrance incase something burst out. “Dash? You in there?”
The silence seemed to last forever, hanging in the air, until I finally heard a response. “Dawn?”
“Dash!” I walked forward into the cave, spreading my wingtips in front of me so I wouldn’t hit my head on the ceiling. As I felt my way further inside, it opened up a little and I saw Dash sitting there. “Are you okay?!”
“Yeah, I’m fine. Get lo… los…” Dash sniffed and it sounded like she had a runny nose. I watched as she rubbed a foreleg across her eyes.
“You’ve been crying?” I sat down next to her, reaching a hoof out to touch her. “I’m sorry, this is all my fault, isn’t it? I should have never lied to you about hearing voices, and I wouldn’t have run off and ruined your relationship with Soarin.”
She continued to sob softly, as if she didn’t want me to hear it. “He broke up with me, when I told him… told him about us.”
I scooted a little closer and before she could push me back, I’d wrapped a wing around her and pulled her to my side. “Hey, it’s okay. If he was gonna break up over a little alien body snatching, the marriage would never have lasted.”
“I’m pregnant.”
For minutes I must have sat there with my mouth agape, staring at her. I hoped the awkward silence wasn’t really that long, but I had no way of knowing how long it took me to find my voice. “What?”
Dash lifted her head up and looked at me. “I said I’m pregnant. Soarin—”
“It’s okay, I get how it works. And then he dumped you? What an asshole.”
She chuckled once, then wiped her face off again. “No… we hadn’t slept together again, since you were in my body. He put two and two together, that it was you he slept with, and he freaked.”
“Shit.” I looked at the ground. “So that’s why you ran away?”
“Yeah… I needed some time to think. First I find out I’m pregnant because I was vomiting at work yesterday, and then Soarin dumps me, and you weren’t talking to me…”
“I’m so sorry, I should never have been jealous of you two. Just because I had feelings and thought you deserved better I ruined your whole life, I’m such an ass—”
Dash grabbed me and planted her lips on mine. I stared in shock as she tightened her grip, turning her head to put more of her focus into the kiss. Her tongue started to explore my mouth, even as I sat dumbfounded and unable to properly return her affections.
After a minute she let go. “You talk too much, your apology is accepted.”
I blinked. “But I mess—”
She kissed me again. This time I was able to reciprocate, my feelings for her resurfacing and not marred by so much guilt. She tasted like fresh rain, even though her fur was covered in tears and dirt. Before I could truly enjoy the kiss, she pulled back again. “Look, it’s getting late and I sprained my wing. Can you get us back to town?”
It took me a minute to respond to her, as I was still sorting out my feelings for Dash. I still couldn’t quite understand how we had gone from massive screw-up to making-out, but I wasn’t about to look a gift-horse in the mouth. “Yeah… here.”
I pulled a splint and some gauze out of my saddlebag and began wrapping up the wing she presented me. As I tended to her wound I felt a stinging on my flank, like an insect had bit it. Then the other flank as well, so I swatted at them with a free hoof. After a moment I looked back to see what it was.
“Look at that,” Dash observed. On my flank was a rising sun, outlining a medical caduceus. The yellow-orange sun contrasted nicely with my fur, which was fortunate considering that I’d have this mark for life.
“Yeah, I’ve been wondering when I’d get my butt stamp.”
Dash laughed and after a moment I joined in, the stress and tension melting. “It doesn’t look to bad, can you fly on it?”
“Not well, we should walk.”
“What’d you piss off? It looked like a massive bear was clawing its way through the trees.”
Dash shrugged. “Just a manticore. He’s lucky I didn’t break his nose instead of running and hiding in this cave.”
I laughed. “Sure he was. At least you’re okay. You ready to go?” I stood up and backed away towards the exit to give her room.
She stood up and flexed her wing a little. “Yeah, I’m ready.” Dash yawned, taking a step forward and nearly tripping. “Bah, sorry, I haven’t slept much.”
“It’s okay, come on. Let’s get out of here and get you home.”
Dash nodded, and followed me out of the cave. I took her towards the river, not even thinking about how easily my sense of direction seemed to be working out here.
“So, you’re pregnant with me and Soarin’s baby? There’s something I wasn’t expecting.” I smiled wide and looked at her.
“Hey!” She smirked and hit my shoulder. “It’s our baby as far as I’m concerned. He was nice at first, but as soon as you two met he got over-protective and kinda a jerk. Maybe it is for the best, I mean, I did always sort of—”
“You had a crush on me!” I smiled and bumped into her side. “I knew it! I can read you like a book.”
“Come on. I just mean it’s nice that I already know you so well, there’s not gonna be any surprises. You’re not pretending to be something you’re not.” Dash walked along the bank of the river and I followed close beside her.
“Whew, because here I thought I was a human pretending to be a pony.”
Dash rolled her eyes. “You know what I mean.”
“So you’re not pissed off at me?”
“I’m sure I’ll get even… but mostly I was just hurt you wouldn’t talk to me. You know I’m stubborn. I figured you’d stop by again once I cooled down.”
“I guess I out-stubborned you.” I pointed ahead to the edge of the forest. “Looks like we’re almost there.”
“Isn’t that your house?” Dash pointed to the left as we exited the forest.
“Yeah, it is.”
“Well… my wing’s hurt so I can’t go to my house, and I feel dirty… I think we should stop by your house for the night, so I can get cleaned up and rest.”
“Sure.” I put a wing over her and walked towards my house. “As long as you promise I’m not gonna wake up covered in itching powder or poison joke.”
We walked to my house and I let her inside. Part of me was relieved that for once, things were simple. Maybe it was because we’d both had time to think, or she was too tired to fight, but that’d been easier than I thought.
I watched her head upstairs into the bathroom to shower and I sat on my bed, reflecting on the day. Perhaps Twilight and my therapist were right. Once I’d actually gotten out of the house, things weren’t so bad after all.
As I lay there I could feel myself getting sleepy, and yawned loudly. I couldn’t shake the feeling I was forgetting something, but whatever it was could wait until morning. I was glad to have Dash here with me.
Nice
Interesting; it appears as though ponies drink through their plots
who woulda known
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hmmm. quite interesting I didn't know it was customary to sit on your deink when you have guests that you have had sex with over
Heh...
Hehe...
Nice, nice. Like it.
So tomorrow's gonna roll around, Twi's gonna barge in freaking out that they still haven't found Dash and thinking something happened to Dawn because he didn't report back to her, and then there's going to be a long awkward pause when she realizes that not only are they both alright, they slept together while she was having a panic attack.Then everything's gonna burst into flames as Purplesmart's sanity breaks.
I'm calling it right now.
In the pic Rainbow must of fallen asleep after sucking him/her off!
I would sell my first born child for hair like RD's
4738290 I bet the world ten bit's that happens
4738290 amazing XD thats all i can say, utter brilliance.
And also, RD pregnant, never thought id see that coming
4738290 If twi doesn't have a freakout of any magnitude about the whole thing, I shall be severely disappointed.
In other news, very nice chapter Kaidan. Not a big fan of Soarin running out on Dash ( Oh, we'll make him pay for that, don't worry), however am a huge fan of Dash and Dawn getting together because in the end. Especially how it started with Dash shutting up Dawn with those two kisses.
By the way, could someone show me how to do the spoiler redact thing?
wait why is soarin treated like some sort of nonredeemable asshole here, it seems to be just a bs set up just to get dawn and dash together. i mean ya he is acting like a jerk but it seems to be reactionary from not being told anything about the situation and only having barely an understanding about the situation at hand.
Do they not have abortion clinics in Equestria?
Dawn looked around, there was his pink female self hanging around with Fluttershy, and what it looked like his male self with a different mane coloring hanging out with Rainbow Dash.
"Hey." Firefly said, she was dressed like a Filly Scout, and Dawn wondered how the hell he knew what a Filly scout was, stupid dream logic.
"Hi, are you here to sell me cookies?" Dawn asked
"Uh, nope. After you made peace with Dash and the others, well, things inside your head calmed down a lot."
"So, what happens now?"
"Your thing with Dash might not be basically incest, after all. Thinker had a good argument about it."
"What are you talking about?"
"While Dash was the template of your body, Luna then she added the rest of the mane six. So you basically only have 1/6 of Rainbow Dash. Maybe 1/7 if Luna added a bit of herself. Actually, Luna using some of her DNA to make you would explain how crazy your inner world is. Since is basically a manifestation of the ability to control your own dreams."
"Cool, being 1/6 or 1/7 related to Dawn most likely doesn't make it incest."
"Right, whatever makes you happy. Anyway, you should really, really get Luna to visit your head. She is the only one that can really help about your mental problems. Oh and Dawn...."
"What?"
"If you continue switching genders using poison joke, it will be bad for you. Fluttershy might only get a guys voice, but in your case you get a female body and gets heavily influenced by anything we say to you. However, Thinker suggest you could try to be a mare for a week or two, no poison joke involved, and see if it works or not. If it doesn't... well, I am willing to support you staying a guy."
"Wow, really?" Dawn looked surprised, this was the first time one of his so called personalities supported him being a guy besides Denial.
"Hey! I might be small, but I am your courage, do you think I am lying?"
"No, no, of course not."
Then Dawn woke up, Rainbow Dash resting comfortable over him... when he tried to move a bit, he noticed his mane had changed to the same colors it had in the dream.
"Ah horsefeathers..."
alright that went way too easily. no fighting the manticore? that just doesn't seem like you to not have them fight it.
good job Dawn, you left Twi searching and is probably gonna be freaking out going insane because you didn't tell her u found Dash. Equestria will probably be blown up by morning
Considering Soarin pissed off on her, she should go him for child support.
Twilight barges in on them and realizes that she never checked upstairs for Dash in Dawn's house. Explodes on him for hiding her and pretending to not know where she is.
Asshole dawn
Twilight and co are still searching for dash
I think Dawn forgot to tell Twi he found her.... oh well, she's safe.
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4738290 hahahahahahahh
Yay! More DoHII
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Well, that happened. Glad we've resolved [nearly] all of the loose ends from the epic freakout.
And...DawnXDash, finally. Had to happen eventually. Will be interesting to see how the pregnancy/eventual foal affects the storyline.
Also, cool pic.
No, no, no, no, no, no, just... NO! I don't like the emotional part of this story one bit! I mean, really? After all that happened to Dawn he's believed to be on the wrong side and everypony else on the right side? Pffff... that's ridiculous! It was a great story so far, but I sure don't like where it's going. I mean, the plot is great and I'm glad RD and Dawn are back together, but the last few chapters have been completely unfair towards Dawn! What I mean is... Is he 100% responsible for what happened between him and Fluttershy? Nopony seemsed to blame her one bit! And after all that happened, after revealing the true effects of poison joke to the others, he is the one who's forced to apologize to everypony, not VISE VERSA! That's beyond sucking.
very excelent chapter!
wait.. i'm confused....
if i remember right... wasn't it like a week after dawn in dashes body did the romp with soarin before he sacrificed himself to save them, then it was like 2 or 3 months before RD found him in her dreams, then like a couple more months before they made his new body and shorted him out of dash's head? wouldn't she have been almost or about halfway through her pregnancy by now?
my brain.. it boggles!
i feel it's more likely dash sat on a "used" sock of dawn's or something at this point.
too
Uhh, Twilight, he kinda was Dash.
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ow
Poor foal, to be born with only 2/3 of it's parents...
The product of quite a strange threesome.
Nice chapter.
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My reaction as dawn would be as follows
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oh you beat me too it..
Soarin's not only a jerk, but a super-ultra-mega jerk! Who didn't see that coming?
One thing's for certain. Someone's gotta get SHANKED for running out on Dash while she's pregnant.
Hold up, wasn't Soarin fucking around behind Dash's back? I mean, he tried to come on to Dawn! Oh, what a scandal! A Wonderbolt star with a child out of wedlock, and either cheating or attempting to on the mare!
4738441 Which gives him a good reason to be mad but he was trying to act like he had no problem with Dawn towards dash. When the truth was he hated him and feared he would take dash from him.
I know that can seem like a normal reaction but that's not the way they see it. To them him doing that means he didn't love dash. He just wanted to have her.
or at least that's what I believe.
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Everyone in this story is being a huge bitch. Mostly Rainbow, but no one else but Lyra is being much help either.
So he tried to apologize, she blew him off... and then she waited around for two weeks for him to come apologize? What? And not even a "sorry I walked out on your apology"? Or a sorry for anything?
Bitch!
And Remind me, what was he ever supposed to apologize for exactly? Sleeping with Fluttershy? You know, that thing Rainbow had no right to act mad over? Telling off that prick who Rainbow is only now acknowledging is totally a prick?
And everyone is acting like Dawn was the jerk in all of this? I mean holy shit. The guy is in therapy, depressed, and now he's grovelling to everyone like everything is all his fault and she doesn't give even one single "I'm sorry too".
Ok. This story has been great up until now. But if no one get's around to acknowledging how unfairly jerked around this guy has been lately, I might not stay interested.
4738807 Is that an extract, or just something you're hoping for?
4738817 Its from the story, actually.
4738817 It's from chapter 11 towards the middle.
4738759 Finally! Someone else who uses that term!
Also, I agree....
4738814 Okay, here's hoping I understand what's happening well enough to clear this up:
1) Tensions were high between Dash and Soarin, since Dash was teaching Dawn to fly, leading to
2) Soarin challenged Dawn at the Iron Pony (as a sort of masculinity test I suppose).
3) All this time, Dash has been hiding feelings for Dawn (something that Soarin might have been picking up on).
4) While Dawn is competing, he trips and falls onto Dash. Soarin, taking him as a pervert, attacks him. Dash flies off with Soarin in pursuit, while Dawn goes to Canterlot to cool his head a bit. Luna teleports him back.
5) Dawn bumps into Fluttershy, helps her find a few of her animals in the Everfree Forest, where he finds Poison joke and gets turned into a mare.
6) The two go back to Fluttershy's cottage (animals in tow) where Flutters tries to make Dawn the cure. Angel plays wingman for Flutters and hides one of the ingredients. The two spend a steamy night together.
7) In the morning, Dawn and Flutters head to the spa for the cure, only to find an Irate Dash, who found out he had slept with Fluttershy. Heated Words were exchanged, everyone left in bad spirits.
8) Dawn went back to the Iron Pony, embarrassed Soarin, and got sent to the spa to be cured by and irate Twilight, who then put him under an unspoken house arrest.
9) The next morning, Dawn admitted he was having problems adjusting to Equestria and apologized for the trouble he put them through. Twilight got him to Zecora for a cure for the other... ones of him...
10) He visited a psychiatrist, then talked awhile with Flutters.
I think what he was supposed to do with Dash was meet with her and explain what was going on that morning or... something. If I recall correctly, Rarity, Aj, Pinkie, and Lyra weren't being "huge bitches," nor did they act like Dawn was "the jerk" as you put it. Lyra supported him, Pinkie wanted to cheer him up, Aj was only upset that something happened on her land (which she got over pretty quickly), and Rarity was only upset that he'd kept his troubles to himself.
I do agree that Dash was being unreasonable, but she was probably having a few issues, seeing as a [colt] she liked who knew the real her (and who she knew just as well) was in conflict with her (then) coltfriend and long-time idol. That, and think about how all the hormone fluctuations from her pregnancy must have been affecting her.
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Thanks for the recap. Helpful. Really helps illustrate how few things Dawn actually did wrong.
That still leaves us with the pony in therapy over how shit his life has gotten groveling to the pony who flipped out then walked out on him and getting nothing in return warmer then "well I guess it's alright if you're sorry, and now that I'm unattached, let's hook up".
So yeah, huge bitch.
I seem to remember her saying something about "being there for him" when this started, and as soon as it counts, all she was there for was a lot of cold shoulder and bullshit. I'll ease up on her when she acts like she's actually repentant for that.
Dawn is quite a forgetful one. The others will be pretty upset.
4738817 I believe that's a quote from a previous chapter.
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You bring up some interesting points and totally remind me of how I felt as well. Dawn is being treated as this parasite who's doing all the problems when in reality there is so much horrible stuff happening to him and he has the least that's directly his fault.
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Thank you.
I feel like I'm hearing a whole lot of apologizing in this story, and absolutely all of it is from Dawn.
Every conversation these past few chapters feels like it turns into a lecture about what he's done wrong lately. Every last thing becomes his fault one way or another. Even this last lecture from Twilight comes across as little more than "shape up and stop moping". Great pep talk Twi. Awesome show of compassion for the guy seeing a shrink for depression.
So yeah, not thrilled with them ponies at the moment.
4739140 Yeah I don't know how long we'll see him just sitting there and take it. I find it interesting because this is something that very easily something that can happen in real life depending on the perspective people have about problems. This shows a lot about the differences between humans and ponies or at least how kaidan is trying to show it.
There is only so much dawn is going to take though before he'll be like "Forget it! I'm not putting up with taking the blame for everything that's clearly not my fault" and then he snaps at someone (I'd love it to be soarin)
edit: Or when twilight comes over tomorrow and starts to give him lip he can tell her what for.
That is a awesome chapter, really great work and love the drawing that was made for ya, now we get to see what Dawn really looks like.
Ha! Cue the Twilight freakout in the morning when she finds out he found Dash the day before and told no one. ..
I didn't like the ending. It's that typical 'forest scene' you would expect in a romance novel, which, to me, is just lazy writing. The two kisses ruined the chapter for me; you've ended your chapter with a cliché and have definitely rustled my jimmies.
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4739185 Huzzah! The word has been spread! Let us take off into the night!
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I'm cautious about where our illustrious author is actually taking this. If there's a point to Dawn getting kicked around like this, then I'll gladly see what's in the works.
As it is right now, I'm worried that this moment of romance when Dawn and Dash finally get together was supposed to be some happy creciendo when I only feel even worse about Dash then before.
I get that Dash has a lot of shit she's dealing with herself. She certainly has some pulling up of her own figurative shorts to do, but that's not Dawn's fault.
If I'm actually meant to believe Dawn is in the right to be begging forgiveness, then I feel we may have seriously missed a step somewhere.
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Horse pregnancy is 11 months.