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Oh no.
I am NOT going to read further until I see that Starshadow and Starsong are back home.
Also, I take back what I said about not killing off Polaris.
I have only one thing to say to that son of a whorse:
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''Things are starting to take a dark turn here...''
Starting to turn dark? Be honest we passed that stage long ago About a story ago.
Been updating the shit out of this huh?
What a fucking cliffhanger.
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You think so? Seemed like an appropriate place to stop to us...
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Yeah... I'm pretty sure they're all dead. Well, except Thunderlane so we can find some even more contrived reason for him to escape again...
Ja, 'a dark turn'... Sure. The whole pretense is extremely flimsy at this point. Why doesn't the Red Horse just bust in and save her? If they're doing all this horrible stuff, I'm pretty sure that when the authorities come to take him away, they'd find out how messed up things are in that house. Furthermore, I find it highly unlikely that someone hasn't murdered your antagonist yet; the wife would have every incentive to poison him - don't try the whole 'she's too terrified of him to do anything' nonsense; there are real life examples of tyrannical husbands being brought low by the wives they were so sure were too scared to do anything. Finally, why do you insist on having your main character be raped repeatedly? It doesn't add any more to her story and frankly it's lost its shock value - you really ought to find a different plot device about now.
Other than that, I can't wait to see the death of all of these terrible people.
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No wait, it gets even dumber...
A dark turn? Buddy, this has been one long trip through a black, sunless labyrinth without even a match.
Still digging it, though. Onward!
Ya know Starshadow, you should have made a deal with him. You should have said that you would open the book if he would publicly disown you and stay out of your life forever. But then the story would have ended here.
Oh HELL no!