Twilight Sparkles love for peaches is unmatched. She eats them for breakfast, second breakfast, brunch, lunch, dinner, desert, and for a midnight snack! Her friends think she has a problem but what do they know. She doesn’t need them all she needs is her peaches…
WARNING: This story was written in only an hour. This story is UNEDITED. This story isn't serious at all. This story was the byproduct of random thoughts after reading two stories that got featured on the same day about Twilight eating peaches. You've been warned. It's so stupid that even I down-voted it.
Interesting fact, would you believe that on the same day I posted this story someone else actually posted another story of the same name as this one? Well it happened and this person’s story is 100% better than this one so you should just down vote this thing and go read that story instead.
Because potatoes.
Author...
Wat r u doin?
Author.
Stahp!
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I CAN'T STOP BECAUSE I'VE ALREADY FINISHED IT!
… "Everyone" rated? Comedy tagged? Really?
Basic editing would be nice.
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I should most likely up that to teen to the sexual innuendos at the beginning... Also the comedy tag might have been an accident...
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I was referring more to the fact that the climax of the story is that Twilight is literally killed and eaten by peaches, and the others discover the blood-stained, skeletal aftermath. That's horror-movie stuff, and IIRC killing a character is automatically Teen. I can see ways in which that could be played for comedy, but this isn't it.
Anyway, thank you for changing the rating.
I kept count of how many errors (mainly spelling and the like) I saw during the read. I ignored minor things like modifiers, and reached a count of eighteen. Eighteen spots where the spelling, punctuation, capitalization, and others were lacking.
Despite that, I was laughing at bit after reading this. For all intents and purposes, this story SHOULD warrant a spot on the Floor - yet I can't bring myself to do it! This thing was just too silly for me to take it seriously, and I find myself liking it on that merit.
What's wrong with me?
*Adds to Wall Shelf*
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Obviously you're insane.
Which I count as positive aspect!