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It has been a long and bloody war between the Royal Equestrian Airforce and those of the ShadowBolt Revolution. Now two former friends clash in the ruins of their hometown. No one wins in war.
Disclaimer: I do not own My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic, it is property of Hasbro. This story was inspired by this picture http://scarabdynasty1.deviantart.com/art/Shadowdash-and-Fluttershy-289457276 by ScarabDynasty1. Please enjoy and be sure to leave a Review. Thank you

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Comments ( 43 )

...Wow. But if somehow Discord is released, IT would bring a new chapter about. Nice story.

318630 :pinkiehappy: Thanks for the comment. Yeah. I have very vague ideas on continuing this, if I do continue it. And bringing out Discord in a fight at Canterlot would pretty much make everything go crazy. Again thanks for reading and the comment. :heart:

Not that I cried or anything, but I really need a tissue. Some dirt got in my eye.
:fluttercry:

318697 *hands you tissue* thanks for reading and the comment. Why do I have tissues? Uh, no reason. :applecry:

Wow. im touched

just a quick note: "Princesses of Equstria" <----wrong spelling

318725 whoops :twilightblush: my bad. Could you tell me where it is exactly so I may correct it. Thanks for the read and the comment! :pinkiehappy:

The front page where it goes traitor scootaloo>>>>

Or just go ctrl-f and paste it in the search

Wow, this was really good. *sniffle*
I really enjoyed reading it.

318868 :pinkiehappy: Thank you very much reading it and your comment. :yay: You Rock!!!!

Little bit odd idea for a fic I give it that, but you managed to pull it out quite fine. There were some spelling errors here and there but it was enjoyable to read, even if I cannot grasp the idea of Fluttershy being an commander :fluttershysad:

Very nice! Stalin personally doesn't like sad stories, but this one is pretty well done. Although, gaps before quotes are too big in Stalin's opinion. Keep the good work and good luck!

Also, the picture is outstanding!

Very sad and sorrowful, not a story I like to read most of the time... but somehow it works...

Poor... everyone.

Whoa, whoa, whoa, whoa! :pinkiegasp:
Whoa, whoa... :rainbowderp:

Whoa... :rainbowhuh:

Whoa. :twilightoops:

This made me sad. For that, You and I can never be friends.

HOWEVER, I will admire how good your story is and simply say- nice work.

Nice. I'd like to see another chapter, you could use the assault on Canterlot (obviously).

I would really like an in depth explaination on why dash is so mean :rainbowdetermined2: . but i really liked the story. Here i will reward you will five out if five spikes :moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache: /:moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache:

Basically what emberdash said ;>_>;

:raritycry:

SCOOOOOOOOOOTS!:d

Lovely (albeit sad and dark) story. :moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache:

Hmm... nah. I don't really have much to say about this in terms of positives. The premise of this story doesn't make sense, and everyone is out of character. Now, I know war changes people, but this is ridiculous. Rainbow Dash doesn't even have the "changed by war" excuse. She started the whole thing for no reason. And Fluttershy is no warrior. She never will be. She's too kind and timid. Yet here, you have her as a fearless general. I don't think necessity alone is enough to change that.

This story is nothing but senseless violence and characters acting emo.

319041 First Thanks for reading and your comment. Yeah, Spelling and me arn't the best of friends and don't get me started on my complex relationship with grammar. :unsuresweetie: It was a bit odd, but I just felt really inspired by ScarbDynasty1's picture that I left a short scene in his comments and then got to writing this over the weekend. Yeah making Fluttershy commander was a big step but I felt it showed just how much she A) had changed over the course of the war and B) highlights a determination to bring Rainbow to justice. Again thanks for the Comment :pinkiehappy:

319108 Thank you Stalin...:facehoof: for the comment. I'm not one for sad stories either but I guess there are few ways to depict war other than sad. Yeah the gaps are something weird with the formatting. And all love for the picture goes to ScarbDynasty1 on deviantart. I just got so inspired by the picture. Thanks again, Comrade. :pinkiehappy:

319110 Thanks for reading. :ajsleepy: Yeah I understand if this isn't everybody's cup of cider. I don't really like this genre myself, yet paradoxically it what I am always writing, but I felt so inspired by the picture that I had to give it that tragic and dark feel. I'm glad that you could look past it and see that it works. Thanks for the comment. :pinkiehappy:

Here's for everybody who's sad now...http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=mNrXMOSkBas

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So you write a genre you don't really like reading?

Weird...

319330 Thank for commenting. I feel kind embarrassed that its getting featured. It's not really my best work, cranked it out over the weekend. And if this is the first war story featured I hope that means we'll be seeing some well written war fiction in future. :pinkiehappy: Thanks for reading and have a nice day.

319372 :raritycry: Well I'm sorry we can never be friends...will this cheer you up... http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=mNrXMOSkBas
Thanks for reading and your comment. :pinkiehappy: and I hope we can make amends in the future.

319403 I have ideas for the Assault on Canterlot, but I'm not sure if I'll return to this fic, seeing as it was a just a lighting strike of inspiration, and if I did it would be further down the line seeing as I have other fics to work on. Thanks for reading and you comment is much appreciated. Have a nice day. :pinkiehappy:

319407 I'm sorry that I didn't add that in. I don't have a real answer at this moment. But I'll give it a shot. Rainbow Dash started down this path after learning about what was happening to the Princesses and felt betrayed that the two most powerful beings in lives of all ponies were going away and her belief that the Canterlot Aristocracy would not have the best intentions for all ponies. So she gather followers to try and impose change but it was blocked by the corrupt officials, breeding a deep seated anger and frustration that exploded into this conflict. Part of her knows that she is hurting Equestria more than what she sought to protect it from, but her stubbornness and loyalty to those under her prevents her from turning away.
:ajsleepy: I know its not the best explanation but I hope it gives you some insight as to why she is this. Thanks for all the Spike, now where am I gonna put them all. :pinkiehappy: Thanks for reading and your comment.

319580 :pinkiehappy:Thanks for the read and the comment. More Spikes :yay: YAY!!!!!

319590 Thanks for your comment. I suspected that this wouldn't be everyone's cup of cider and its understandable. Thank you for your honest opinion. I know the characters are off and that's because I didn't really plan this one out. It was just a lighting in a bottle, one weekend and done story, so naturally some parts are going to falter. Your opinion is just a valid as everyone else's and I will take it into consideration in future enterprises. Thank you for the comment :pinkiehappy: and have a nice day.

319703 I know it sounds crazy...because it is...:pinkiecrazy:

319757

Not to mention, that's life for ya! Completely insane!

Impressive, but you need to run over it for spell and grammar check. You switch between present and past tense at the start of Fluttershy's final scene.

Also, you might want to fix the article on Scootaloo. you have "

" at the beginning, but since you didn't have the counterpart, it stayed that way. Might want to clean that up.

That aside, good story. And I for one vote for the Discord release/new chapter.

A great man had told me nothing is alway's keept in harmony everything colapses but only I stand againt what he said and told me only if you let it happend

319710 Perfect, I am totally cheered up now. Amends have been made. Keep writing, fellow artist.

Great Story, i enjoyed reading it and also looking at the cover image is making me think, what would i prefer to be, a wonderbolt or a shadowbolt

Alright, where do I enlist?
NOPONY KILLS TWILIGHT AND GETS AWAY WITH IT!

If I see rainbow again I will get a 2 barreled shotgun and SHOOT THAT MOTHER BUCKER IN THE BUCKING FACE WITH BOTH BARRELS!

Honestly, I think that you shouldn't continue this and just let the readers imagination as to what happens next be up to them.

Of course, this isn't my story, but that's my opinion.

The story was well written, even though it was grim. I don't think RD would turn traitor like that for that purpose. It would have to take some major event for that to happen. Fluttershy taking the role as Commander seems far fetched, but she definitely had a good reason to take up the cause. Good job on the overall feel of the story, it feels very believable.

Kudos to you for the feature!

Discord Truly Got The Last Laugh In This. The Princesses Dying. Equestria in Chaos. The Elements Shattered.

:raritycry::fluttercry:


IM DYING INSIDE FROM ALL OF IT

HOW COULD YOUUUUU


I'm just going to crawl into a little ball and die now

THIS IS WHY I CAN NEVER READ SAD OR GORY FICS

Still gonna thumbs up and favourite.

Why is fluttershy scared for betraying her element when all rainbow's is is grayed out? :applejackunsure:

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