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NickZ-Tales


I've been writing for quite some time now, but only recently got into the realm of Pony fanfiction.

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Why do Alicorns exist? What purpose do such powerful beings hold in this world?
And what happened to the others?

Royal duties used to be the only thing on newly crowned princess Twilight Sparkle's mind. When Princess Celestia summons her to discuss the responsibilities that come with the title of Princess of Magic, Twilight learns the truth about alicorns and their purpose to life in Equestria. The weight of the crown is measured in the bodies and souls of the citizens of Equestria, but that's not to say that both are needed to maintain balance and order.

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Comments ( 19 )

the way i see it, the elements of harmony are probably gonna be targeting celestia now, no i don't mean the ponies i mean the elements themselves.

Really promising so far, I can't wait to read the next chapter! A little strange for Celestia to suddenly be so harsh, tho.

Oh, two little things - There's another 'alacorn princess' in the story and some 'you're's should be 'your's instead:)

3648263 I wouldn't put it past the ponies either if they were to find out.

“Good morning, you’re highness.”

"[...] This facility is you’re get-out-of-conduit-mode-free card in a sense.”

Before she could finish, a brown unicorn in a white lab coat trotted up to Celestia holding a clipboard in his magic. “You’re highness.”

Your

“I was hoping you would’ve just stayed asleep,” Celestia chided, “It would have made thing’s so much easier.”

Things

Twilight tried to lunge at the white mare, but she found herself unable to move any of her limbs. All four and her wings had been constrained to long steel cuffs

All four legs

The magic-blocking device had been capped with a secondary device that topped the purple alacorn’s horn; a wire connected the device to something beyond Twilight’s sight.

Alicorn's

Twilight stared Celestia down with cold eyes, “And what about my disappearance? How could you convince the entire kingdom that seven normal unicorns could overpower an alacorn princess?”

Alicorn

The purple mare hid her face behind her hoof. Luna spoke next, “We-… I’m sorry it had to come to this Twilight. I really wish we could have known one another better, mayhapse as well as sisters.”

Mayhaps

3663697 Thank you for those, really appreciate it!

Haven't I read this before... a long long time ago? :facehoof:

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Can't say I've read anything similar myself, but I can tell you that I drew inspiration from a variety of different things: the Magic Current for example was taken from the pagan belief in lay-lines (with obvious changes and creative liberties), and I drew inspiration for the visuals in the Holding Chamber from one of the early scenes in the 1st Resident Evil movie, just to name a few.

Well, it's been a long long long time, so I don't remember the reasoning behind it, or if Cadence even existed at the time. But I do remember a one shot about Unicorns being used to power Magic while in stasis under Canterlot, and Celestia ending up stuffing Twilight in one in the end. :rainbowhuh: or maybe she stuffs Luna in it.... I can't remember, but it sounds very very familiar!

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I've only been a fanfic reader for roughly 5 months, and in that time I've only read a handful of fictions (slow reader, but I remember every detail). Though if you ever find said story, I'd love to give it a read because I do love this fictional idea of using living beings as power cells, an idea popularized in works such as The Matrix, and Coma by Robin Cook (the latter being more about harvesting, but still an eerie concept I've grown to love in Sci-Fi) :pinkiecrazy:

Plus this first part is only intended as a setup for a much bigger scheme, and goes beyond the bowels of Canterlot :raritywink:

3669310 Heh, I have tried looking for it, but it was so long ago I can't remember anything about it. It might not have even been from this site :rainbowlaugh: Oh well, it was a one shot that ended about how this chapter did, so I do wonder what you will have happen next. Will the elements be pushed into there with her? :pinkiecrazy: will Discord come and save her? :pinkiecrazy: Will Luna trip on a rock and break her neck? :pinkiecrazy: Only the next chapter will tell! :heart:

Is it just me,or is this like one of the Docter Who episodes?U know the one where he takes Rose to the future and everything's perfect and no illnesses but it's becuz ppl in tubes like these r "supplying" it?:applejackunsure:

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Come to think of it, I HAVE seen that episode, in fact that was my introduction to Dr. Who! Huh, funny how I never considered that. I guess I'll have to add that to what I said earlier:

... I do love this fictional idea of using living beings as power cells, an idea popularized in works such as The Matrix, and Coma by Robin Cook (the latter being more about harvesting, but still an eerie concept I've grown to love in Sci-Fi) :pinkiecrazy:

Though again, more things are going to happen :pinkiehappy:

I like it, it's a neat concept, but... :facehoof:

I don't know, to me I think Celestia would know her own student well enough to realize she would be less than accepting of such a duty. I can't really see her going about luring her into something like this in such a way. It might have been better if she was more sneaky with the concept, hiding a few details from Twilight and keeping her in the dark about where all that magickal energy was coming from.

That's really the only big qualm I have with the story though, nice job on it, evil Celesita is the best Celestia! :trollestia:

Dude I really feel sad and depressed. I'm shaking and my chest feels like ice. Gosh your YouTube led me here. It also lead me to read Sweet Apple Masacure (which was a terrible story BTW, like u said). And its night and, I know it sounds stupid but I'm really freaked out man. Celestia seemed so evil here. So out of character. Though, to be nice, u did put the alternate universe tab. Now to go watch something happy to calm myself.

Comment posted by Black Hoof deleted Jan 4th, 2018

Well I wonder what if DISCORD were to find out about this and revealed it to the whole world and then what if Starlight got wind of this, that is to say if it's before her village was found by Twilight and the girls, she could try and removes Celestia's cutie mark to make her powerless then. Of course I would love to see what kinds of things Discord would do to the world while Twilight is locked up, unless he would do things to keep Celestia busy while the Mane 6 go to free Twilight.

“So, why have you summoned me?” Twilight asked looking up at her mentor.

With the power of our lovely seven books of Sparkle, Twilight shall be summoned.

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