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MnM


I write horse words and stuff. Formerly known as MarineMarksman. Also known as Big Willy in convention circles.

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"Wake me, when you need me."

The year is 2557, 5 years after the destruction of The Ark. The threat of the flood is gone, the Covenant is a small shadow of its former self, and the universe is now at peace. Or so it seems, as the remnants of the U.N.S.C. Forward Unto Dawn is sucked into another portal, causing it to crash into the land of Equestria. Will the inhabitants of the planet accept or exile him, and is there a new threat looming? Will Spartan-117 be able to handle it? Find out the answer to this and much more in Haylo: A New World.

Chapters (21)
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Comments ( 1410 )

First! Awsome fanfic so far, I'd love to see where it goes.:pinkiehappy:

I can't wait to see the chief kick some dragon ass with is bare hands!! lol kidding

MnM

13306 Chief? Dragon? Bare hands? The Chief is brave, but he is not stupid. But I'm sure he will kick some dragon ass with the appropriate firepower. Though, he might do hand-to-hand with a manticore.

I really appreciate all the positive criticism. I am already working on Chapter Two, and it will be out tomorrow.

MnM

13294 I actually got inspiration from your story, believe it or not. Arby FTW!

Do like
Especially since you seem to be going with the character's personalities.

I looking forward to more.

Please continue with this.....

or I will send ninja grunts after you.

You don't want that.:pinkiecrazy:

MnM

13324 I have my battle rifle ready for an endless stream of head shots.

A solid start my friend keep it up.

MnM

13351 Thank you. I already have Chapter Two done, and it will be out tomarrow.

I haven't played a Halo game in years, but I always liked the dynamic between MC and the Arbiter? I take it that this is just MC and Cortana in Equestria?

MnM

13356 In the end of Halo 3, the Arbiter and Master Chief were in the same Frigate, the U.N.S.C. Forward Onto Dawn. They were escaping the collapsing Halo ring, but the portal collapsed and cut the Frigate in half. One half reached Earth, which was holding the Arbiter. The Chief, however, was in the other half of the Dawn. So yeah, no Arbiter, yet, anyways. And that isn't a hint to my plans to the plot, but I might include him in it. :twilightsmile:

13326
Two things.
One: A battle rifle is only as useful as you are accurate and far.
The other thing: Try for chapters of 2500+ Words, and if you can't then chapters with 1500+
This allows for quick, decent length chapters. There needs to be much detail and dialogue given how it seems the story is going, but you also need to make sure the chief speaks mostly when spoken to, when needed, or when he really really wants to let his thoughts out, for it seems like that's when he talks.

Okay, there's a pretty glaring error in the synopsis.

You have the story happening in 2664, "Twelve Years," after the destruction of the Ark and the end of Halo 3. However, the Ark was destroyed in 2552. You have it happening in 2652, nearly a hundred years later.

MnM

13372 One. I found the battle rifle is great against foes with no shoes in close quarters. So a BR vs a bunch of grunts = BR wins. Two. Yeah, I normally do chapters around that length, but these are beginning chapters, not really much action yet. That will change rather quickly. As for the dialogue, it's that way on purpose. It's not going to be like that in Chapter Two and beyond, though.

Not bad, not bad. I look forward to future chapters.

MnM

13373 Thanks for pointing that out to me, man. xD That is a pretty bad error. I'll have it fixed immediately.

13374
Oh, another thing: With the Covenant scattered and ruined, and the flood supposedly extinct, you need a new foe.
Note the supposedly
:scootangel:

MnM

13382 In the end, the Covenant are known as crippled, but we don't know for sure that the Covenant is completely wiped out.

13383
Hence Scattered and ruined.
You can be ruined, but recover.
Destroyed is another matter entirely.

13389
Great to see an agreement reached quickly.
Faster than I'm used to.
Oh god, i just started thinking, the flood entering Equestria
That would be a little more than terrifying.

MnM

13391 The flood? Probably not. I doubt I could write as them. Besides, they creep the shit out of me, even if they are the most awesome zombies I have ever seen.

Remember ninja grunts You can't shoot what you can't see Marksman.

Now look behind you....See nothing.....That just proves my point ninja grunts

Sleep tight.:pinkiecrazy:

MnM

Motion Tracker. :trollestia:

MnM

13374 Wait... NO SHOES?!

This should be interesting hopefully chief doesn't jump the gun when the pony's show up :pinkiegasp:

Fucking Troll:twilightangry2:

Based on the first chapter, it looks good.
Will the chief have equipment such as a bubble shield?
Oh and also, just how much ordnance is in tact?

MnM

13445 Enough for one man. You will see in the second chapter.

YOU BASTARD!! I WAS THINKING OF DOING THIS SAME THING!!!

Haha kidding. Well, I was serious about thinking of this same idea, but apparently someone got to it first. Oh, well, there's probably going to be something along the lines of this in Halo: Fall of Equestria (spoiler alert).
Anywho, it looks like this is off to an excellent start. I can only imagine how the Chief - a killing machine bred for war - will fare on a planet of friendship and magic. :rainbowlaugh:

13410
I counter by walking.
I walk over your deploy-able landmine.
I walk up behind you.
Ninja grunts just slowly make their way to you.
:trollestia:

13374

Screw Battle Riffle, give me a DMR. :rainbowdetermined2:


And I gave you the idea! You said so yourself! :derpytongue2:

13549
Direct upgrade from pistol, nothing more. :facehoof:

Now that I think about, I don't need ninja grunts.

Update this story or I will glass your entire planet!:twilightsmile:

Who needs a switchblade when you got a chainsaw.:pinkiecrazy:

13558
the chainsaw is one of the WORST weapons you can use.
Needs fuel, extremely loud, bulky, heavy...
Only useful against trees and walls.

I wonder how Fluttershy will react to Chief...

MnM

13549 Yeah, you also gave me the idea.
13561 She will either shit herself, or snap his neck like that bear.
13478 :trollestia: Oh well, I really love your story. I'm glad you like this one too.

I honestly didn't expect to get this much of a positive reaction when I made this story. Hell, I was expecting a bunch of haters and trolls. Chapter Two is out.

MnM

Hope you people liked it. ^_^

Liked it theirs master chief, twilight sparkle,guns and warthogs WHATS NOT TO LIKE :rainbowdetermined2:
Also im looking forward to when chief meets with celestia:trollestia: this is going to be interesting :rainbowwild:keep it up. well guss i have to wait for a wile until i can read up on how you describe an alien genocide to pony's:derpyderp2: ..........:derpytongue2:.....:facehoof:

Another one for the track list.....

MnM

13593 I'm glad you liked it.

Btw people, I am looking for TWO pre readers. If you would like to be one, PM me. :twilightsmile:

And isn't the Assault Riffle MA5B?

MnM

13598 That's the assault rifle in Halo: Combat Evolved. The assault rifle in Halo 3 is the MA5C. I am such a Halo nerd. :twilightsheepish:

This is going to be interesting.

13600
I'm the only one of the people i know in real life who pays attention to the type of Assault Rifle.
I once saw an argument on the internet about why it sounds different between the games, and my response was merely a "Different kind of gun" response.
I love my inner Halo Nerd
:twilightsmile:
Gonna read the newest chapter.

MnM

13604 I hope you like it. :twilightsmile:

"For the record, that was awesome."
So much truth.
there are some errors in grammar though, such as "He throw it on it's back."
It's should be its and throw should be threw.

MnM

13607 Thanks for pointing that out to me, I'll fix that.

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