Queen Twilight Sparkle, leader of Equestria.
Princess Beatrix Lulamoon, next-in-line for the throne of Equestria.
Miss Celestia Day, peasant of Equestria.
Miss Luna Day, peasant of Equestria.
Two are thousands of years old.
Two are merely six and nine.
Queen Twilight Sparkle runs the most prestigious school in the country, and when trials to get in begin, Celestia and Luna Day, peasants and unknown members of the large group that lives in the alleys, audition together.
They are in for a ride of their lives, while all this is child's play for Twilight Sparkle and Trixie Lulamoon.
You have been warned that Trixie will be an Alicorn.
No ships. Merely fun.
This will be more about the Twilight Sparkle/Celestia relationship, the Trixie/Luna relationship might eventually be developed.
Damn. Sounds awesome. Will read.
Did read. Is Awesome! Will follow!
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Great! I'm glad you love the story.
Don't bold chat it makes it seem like they are talking louder
Thanks for the meter measurements! It's very kind of you
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Okay, I'll fix it. :)
Wow, thanks to everyone.
This must be a decent story if it has 16 thumbs up and no thumbs down!
I'm no editor (well, maybe I am), but I'm good at pointing out mistakes!
And voicing my ridiculous opinion.
Did I say hi? Hi.
...Just thought you might need a period in there.
That's about it in terms of typos, that I saw, (after reading this once) anyway.
Onto the part where I say things that affect only me and should be disregarded under all circumstances:
I've read. Stories. Many. Good, bad, and quite a bit of in between. I'm a gigantic fan of proper flow. I think I've said the word flow at least once in every critique-like comment I've ever made.
This story's flow is... best put, different. It sidesteps being overly-descriptive, but in a way that the reader understands. There are a few breaks here and there, but the overall story overpowers them.
And I actually legitimately like the idea. I can't say that about a lot of stories.
...When is the next chapter coming out? Hehe.
Potential is evident (isn't it?),
-Time Centurion
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It's pretty much on hiatus right now. Thanks for pointing out the error-- I don't have an editor for this story. I was thinking about updating it, and I guess I might as well.
Thanks. I've gotten good reviews overall and being in 7th grade I'd consider this story a work of art from me. Hopefully my writing will get better as I step into the 2nd semester and take English Composition. :3
#Loveit!
I just started to read this story and I really like the story and hope to read more soon
How come you haven't updated?